Holidays— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer wa natural desu ga, sentence ga nagaku natte imasu. Motto concise ni shite, linking words wo tsukatte, content wo motto specific ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I visited my friend's house in Sega. We also went to Lake Viva, the largest lake in Japan. I enjoyed the pleasant climate and peaceful lifestyle there.' to iu fuu ni.

Example: I visited my friend's house in Sega. We also went to Lake Viva, the largest lake in Japan. I enjoyed the pleasant climate and peaceful lifestyle there.

Suggestion: Answer wa rikai dekimasu ga, 'retain my personal feelings' wa fukuzatsu de wakari nikui desu. Motto simple de wakari yasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai. Soshite linking words wo tsukatte, content wo motto specific ni shite kudasai.

Example: Yes, I like holidays because they help me relax and reduce work stress. Also, I can visit new places and enjoy my free time.

Suggestion: Answer wa nagaku, redundant na phrase ga arimasu. 'Christmas holiday' wo ichido dake tsukatte, linking words wo tsukatte sentence wo rikai shi yasuku shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'I like Christmas because most organizations have holidays. We can meet friends, go hiking, and exchange gifts.' to iu fuu ni.

Example: I like Christmas because most organizations have holidays. We can meet friends, go hiking, and exchange gifts.

Suggestion: Answer ni wa grammar no shoujiki na misu ga arimasu. 'Hikings' wa 'hiking' ni shite, 'this the movies' wa 'movies' ni shite kudasai. Sentence wo rikai shi yasuku suru tame ni, linking words wo tsukatte kudasai.

Example: During holidays, I like to visit different places, usually parks or go hiking. Sometimes, I watch movies and spend time with my friends and family.

Suggestion: Answer wa grammar to word choice ni ooku no misu ga arimasu. 'Sometime' wa 'sometimes' ni, 'did my I spend' wa 'I spend' ni shite kudasai. 'Motivational video of philosophies' wa 'motivational philosophy videos' ni shite, sentence wo rikai shi yasuku shite kudasai.

Example: Yes, sometimes I spend my day at home watching movies, reading books, and studying motivational philosophy videos.

Suggestion: Answer wa rikai shinikui desu. 'Doing things in a little bit specific way allow me for a little bit timely but not busy' wa fukuzatsu de wakari nikui desu. Motto simple de wakari yasui kotoba de setsumei shite kudasai.

Example: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it is a time to relax. I like to plan my activities so that I have enough time but I am not too busy.

Suggestion: Answer wa rikai shinikui desu. 'It it makes me less calm' wa 'it makes me less calm' ni shite, 'relieve mentally' wa 'relax mentally' ni shite kudasai. Sentence wo motto rikai shi yasuku shite kudasai.

Example: I prefer a peaceful holiday because exciting holidays make me feel less calm. Peaceful holidays help me relax mentally.

× I went to my friend's house which is in Sega, and we visited Lake Viva, which is the largest lake in Japan and I really enjoyed the climate as well as the life of living there.

✓ I went to my friend's house which is in Sega, and we visited Lake Viva, which is the largest lake in Japan. I really enjoyed the climate as well as the life there.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence combining multiple ideas without proper separation. Using 'and' to connect independent clauses without punctuation causes sentence structure errors. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I like holidays because it allows me to retain my personal feelings as well as I can visit different places so that I can relax and relieve from the stress of work.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because they allow me to retain my personal feelings as well as visit different places so that I can relax and relieve stress from work.

The subject 'holidays' is plural, so the verb should be 'allow' instead of 'allows'. Also, 'relieve from the stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve stress from'. Additionally, 'as well as I can visit' is awkward; it is better to say 'as well as visit'.

× I like the Christmas holiday because in Christmas holiday most of the government organization as well as the private companies have holiday and so that we can meet all of our friends and we can go hiking.

✓ I like the Christmas holiday because during the Christmas holiday most government organizations as well as private companies have holidays, so we can meet all of our friends and go hiking.

'Government organization' should be plural 'government organizations' to match 'private companies'. Also, 'have holiday' should be 'have holidays' to indicate plural days off. The phrase 'in Christmas holiday' is better as 'during the Christmas holiday'.

× We get the some gifts as well.

✓ We get some gifts as well.

The phrase 'the some gifts' is incorrect; 'some gifts' is the correct quantifier usage. 'The' is unnecessary here and causes redundancy.

× During the holidays I like to go to different places, generally the parks or hikings.

✓ During the holidays I like to go to different places, generally parks or hiking spots.

'Hikings' is not a correct noun; the correct term is 'hiking' or 'hiking spots'. Also, 'the parks' is better as 'parks' without 'the' when speaking generally.

× Also sometime I watch this the movies and I spend time with my friends and family.

✓ Also, sometimes I watch movies and spend time with my friends and family.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'This the movies' is incorrect; it should be simply 'movies' without 'this' or 'the'.

× Yes, sometime I did my I spend my day at home watching movie and reading some books as well as I study some of the motivational video of philosophies.

✓ Yes, sometimes I spend my day at home watching movies, reading some books, and studying some motivational philosophy videos.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Did my I spend' is incorrect and redundant; 'I spend' is sufficient. 'Watching movie' should be 'watching movies' (plural). 'Study some of the motivational video of philosophies' is awkward; better as 'studying some motivational philosophy videos'.

× I prefer a leisurely holiday because generally holiday for me is time to relax, so doing things in a a little bit specific way allow me for a little bit timely but not busy.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because generally a holiday for me is a time to relax, so doing things in a slightly specific way allows me to be a little timely but not busy.

'Generally holiday' needs an article: 'a holiday'. 'Time to relax' needs 'a time to relax'. 'Doing things in a a little bit specific way' has repeated 'a' and awkward phrasing; 'in a slightly specific way' is better. 'Allow me for a little bit timely' is incorrect; 'allows me to be a little timely' is correct. Subject-verb agreement: 'doing things ... allow' should be 'allows'.

× I prefer peaceful holiday because on the holiday it's not so exciting, it it makes me less calm as well as I can relieve mentally.

✓ I prefer a peaceful holiday because on the holiday it's not so exciting; it makes me calmer and helps me relieve stress mentally.

'Peaceful holiday' needs the article 'a peaceful holiday'. 'It it' is a typo and should be 'it'. 'Makes me less calm' is incorrect; 'makes me calmer' is the intended meaning. 'I can relieve mentally' is awkward; better as 'helps me relieve stress mentally'.