Holidays— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use past tense consistently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. For example, start with where you went, then mention what you did and why it was enjoyable.

Example: Last holiday, I went to Pokhara. I enjoyed visiting different temples and meeting various people. I also collected souvenirs and cherished the travel experiences.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clear reasons. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Provide specific activities you enjoy during holidays.

Example: Yes, I really like holidays because they give me time to relax and meet different people. I also enjoy watching movies and trying new foods during my free time.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation sounds and use more precise vocabulary. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Example: My favorite public holiday is Dasai, which lasts about five to six days. During this time, I celebrate with my family and meet friends. I also visit many places and create lasting memories.

Suggestion: Complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific activities you do during holidays.

Example: During holidays, I like to go out with my family to watch movies and eat at restaurants. I also spend time with my girlfriend and friends.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you enjoy doing at home.

Example: Yes, I like spending days at home because it is relaxing. I enjoy celebrating with my family, watching movies, and cooking delicious meals together.

Suggestion: Try to avoid hesitation and repetition. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for clarity.

Example: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it allows me to spend time with friends and family. I also enjoy going out and watching movies during this time.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to explain why you prefer an exciting holiday and provide specific reasons.

Example: I prefer an exciting holiday because it offers new experiences and adventures. Going outside and trying different activities makes my holiday memorable and enjoyable.

× In my last holiday I am going for Pokhara and I really enjoy at the moment and collect various things and memorize all all the pre life and the traveling experience and meet a different kind of people and visit different temple and.

✓ In my last holiday, I went to Pokhara. I really enjoyed it and collected various things, memorized all the previous life and traveling experiences, met different kinds of people, and visited different temples.

The student incorrectly uses present tense 'am going' and 'enjoy' when referring to a past event. The correct tense for past events is the past tense, such as 'went' and 'enjoyed'. Also, plural forms like 'temple' should be 'temples' to match the plural context.

× I really enjoy at the moment and collect various things and memorize all all the pre life and the traveling experience and meet a different kind of people and visit different temple and.

✓ I really enjoyed the moment, collected various things, memorized all the previous life and traveling experiences, met different kinds of people, and visited different temples.

The phrase 'enjoy at the moment' is incorrect; 'enjoy the moment' is the correct expression. Also, 'a different kind of people' should be 'different kinds of people' to correctly express variety.

× Yes, definitely I really like and I adore our holiday lives and back is and due to I really prefer or I really have a lot of time to go outside and relax my mind and meet different kind of people and go rest range watch movies and eat a food.

✓ Yes, definitely I really like and adore our holiday life because I have a lot of time to go outside, relax my mind, meet different kinds of people, go to restaurants, watch movies, and eat food.

The phrase 'holiday lives' should be 'holiday life' to refer to the general experience. 'Back is and due to' is unclear and incorrect; it should be replaced with 'because'. 'Different kind of people' should be 'different kinds of people'. 'Go rest range' is incorrect; it should be 'go to restaurants'. 'Eat a food' should be 'eat food' without the article.

× Uh, it will gives me a lots of time to uh, celebrate the festival with my family, uh, and uh, meet with my uh, friends and school friends, visit lots of places and collect different uh, memories.

✓ Uh, it will give me lots of time to celebrate the festival with my family, meet my friends and school friends, visit lots of places, and collect different memories.

The modal verb 'will' should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'gives' should be 'give'. Also, 'a lots of' is incorrect; it should be 'lots of'. 'Meet with' can be simplified to 'meet'.

× Especially in my holiday I prefer to go with my family to watch movies and eat lots of food with my family in restaurants and go out in with my loved one girlfriend and my friends that is my.

✓ Especially during my holiday, I prefer to go with my family to watch movies and eat lots of food in restaurants, and go out with my loved one, my girlfriend, and my friends.

The phrase 'in my holiday' should be 'during my holiday'. 'Go out in with' is incorrect; it should be 'go out with'. Also, 'loved one girlfriend' should be 'loved one, my girlfriend' for clarity.

× Yes, because, uh, uh, staying at home is a really relaxing and amazing things. You get a chance to umm, celebrate at that moment with your family, uh, with your loved one and watching the movies with your family. That's and, uh, cooking lots of foods and eat that.

✓ Yes, because staying at home is really relaxing and amazing. You get a chance to celebrate the moment with your family and your loved one, watch movies with your family, cook lots of food, and eat it.

'Relaxing and amazing things' is incorrect; it should be 'relaxing and amazing' as adjectives describing the experience. 'Watching the movies' should be parallel with other verbs, so 'watch movies'. 'Lots of foods' should be 'lots of food' as 'food' is uncountable.

× I prefer leisurely holiday because leisurely holiday gives me all, uh, some time to meet with my friends, uh, classmates. My also in also, uh, get a time, uh, to umm, celebrate with my family and go outing and watching movies, uh, and uh.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because it gives me some time to meet my friends and classmates. I also get time to celebrate with my family, go out, and watch movies.

'Leisurely holiday' needs an article 'a'. 'Gives me all, uh, some time' is incorrect; 'gives me some time' is correct. 'Go outing' should be 'go out'. 'Watching movies' should be parallel with other verbs, so 'watch movies'.

× I prefer, uh, exciting holiday because, uh, if you get a chance to go outside, there is some exciting moment is also required, uh, from your part that keeps me, gives me a immense and amazing, uh, experience about life holiday things you get, you collect different things about.

✓ I prefer an exciting holiday because if you get a chance to go outside, some exciting moments are also required from your side. That keeps me going and gives me an immense and amazing experience about life and holidays where you get and collect different things.

'Exciting holiday' needs the article 'an' before a vowel sound. 'There is some exciting moment is also required' is incorrect; it should be 'some exciting moments are also required'. 'A immense' should be 'an immense'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.