Holidays— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear at the end. Try to keep your response concise and complete your thoughts fully. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid trailing off. For example, you can say: "During my recent holiday, my husband and I visited my in-laws. It was exciting because I hadn't seen them for almost a year, and we had many meaningful conversations, including discussing some family matters."

Example: During my recent holiday, my husband and I visited my in-laws. It was exciting because I hadn't seen them for almost a year, and we had many meaningful conversations, including discussing some family matters.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to make it more coherent and by avoiding redundancy. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of "a very longer period of time," say "a long time."

Example: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they give me a chance to rest after working for a long time. Moreover, I can spend quality time with my family, especially my children, since they attend school daily and I usually work during the week. Therefore, holidays provide us with a great opportunity to have fun together.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve it by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance flow. Also, be careful with sentence structure to avoid confusion, for example, clarify who receives and gives gifts.

Example: My favourite public holiday is Boxing Day, celebrated on the 26th of December. I love this day because it allows me to share joy and laughter with my loved ones through exchanging gifts. Usually, I receive presents for my children and husband, and I also take the opportunity to give gifts to people who have helped me throughout the year.

Suggestion: Your answer is well-structured and detailed. To improve, try to use linking words like 'besides' or 'furthermore' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition, for example, use 'enjoy' instead of 'have fun'.

Example: On holidays, I usually clean my home since I am very busy during the week. Besides that, I enjoy taking my children to the shopping mall to buy ice cream and spend quality time together. Furthermore, we often go to the cinema to watch the latest movies, which is a great opportunity for us to bond.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but can be clearer and more concise. Avoid repeating ideas and ensure sentences are complete. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and improve coherence.

Example: It depends on my plans for the day. Usually, I like to stay home alone and relax after a busy workweek. However, when I am with my family, I enjoy going out to the shopping mall to buy ice cream and visiting the cinema to watch the latest movies, which helps us bond.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy. Try to be more concise and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Also, use the correct form 'leisurely' instead of 'leisure' as an adjective.

Example: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I usually work long hours during the week. So, when I have a holiday, I like to stay home, relax my mind, and spend quality time with my family discussing important matters.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using clearer linking words like 'if' and 'otherwise'. Also, use 'leisurely' instead of 'leisure' as an adjective. Try to make your sentences more concise.

Example: It depends on my plans for the holiday. If I want to relax at home, I prefer a peaceful holiday where I can sleep longer and unwind after work. Otherwise, if I plan a trip with my family, I enjoy a leisurely holiday going to the cinema and shopping malls to have fun.

× During my recent holiday I visited families and friends.

✓ During my recent holiday, I visited family and friends.

The word 'families' is plural, but here it is more natural to use 'family' as a collective noun when referring to relatives in general. 'Family' can be used as a singular collective noun to refer to all relatives together.

× Firstly, my husband and I visited my in laws and it was an exciting experience because it had been almost a year since I ever saw them and I got the opportunity to have lots of conversations with them and also discussed certain family issues.

✓ Firstly, my husband and I visited my in-laws and it was an exciting experience because it had been almost a year since I last saw them and I got the opportunity to have lots of conversations with them and also discuss certain family issues.

The term 'in laws' should be hyphenated as 'in-laws' when referring to relatives by marriage. Also, 'since I ever saw them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'since I last saw them' to indicate the most recent time. Additionally, 'discussed' should be 'discuss' to maintain parallel structure with 'have' in the sentence.

× Yes, I really enjoy holidays and this is because it gives me the opportunity to rest since I've worked for a very longer period of time.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy holidays and this is because it gives me the opportunity to rest since I've worked for a very long period of time.

The phrase 'a very longer period' is incorrect because 'longer' is a comparative adjective and cannot be used with 'very'. The correct form is 'a very long period'.

× And during holidays I get the opportunity to interact with my family, particularly my children because they go to school every day and I also go to work on holidays.

✓ And during holidays I get the opportunity to interact with my family, particularly my children because they go to school every day and I also do not go to work on holidays.

The original sentence says 'I also go to work on holidays' which contradicts the idea of interacting with family during holidays. Assuming the intended meaning is that the speaker does not work on holidays, the correction reflects that. However, if the original meaning is correct, no correction is needed here.

× It gives us opportunity to have fun.

✓ It gives us the opportunity to have fun.

The phrase 'gives us opportunity' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'gives us the opportunity'.

× One of the public holidays that I mostly enjoy is the Boxing Day which is on the 26th of December.

✓ One of the public holidays that I mostly enjoy is Boxing Day, which is on the 26th of December.

The definite article 'the' is not used before 'Boxing Day' as it is a proper noun for a holiday. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clause.

× I really love this day because it gives me the opportunity to share, laugh with my loved ones by exchanging gifts.

✓ I really love this day because it gives me the opportunity to share and laugh with my loved ones by exchanging gifts.

The sentence lacks a conjunction between 'share' and 'laugh'. Adding 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Most of the time I receive gifts for my children and for my husband and I also get the chance to gift people that have helped me.

✓ Most of the time I receive gifts for my children and my husband, and I also get the chance to give gifts to people who have helped me.

The phrase 'gift people' is incorrect; the verb 'gift' is not commonly used in this way. The correct expression is 'give gifts to people'. Also, 'that' should be 'who' when referring to people.

× On holidays, I normally clean my home because I'm very busy during the week with work. Aside that, I love to take my children out to the shopping mall to buy ice creams and have fun together.

✓ On holidays, I normally clean my home because I'm very busy during the week with work. Aside from that, I love to take my children out to the shopping mall to buy ice cream and have fun together.

The phrase 'Aside that' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Aside from that'. Also, 'ice creams' is better as 'ice cream' when referring to the food in general.

× Additionally, we also go to the cinema to watch the latest movies and this is really a great opportunity for us to bond together.

✓ Additionally, we also go to the cinema to watch the latest movies, and this is really a great opportunity for us to bond.

The phrase 'bond together' is redundant because 'bond' already implies togetherness. Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Well, it will depend on the day and the activities I have planned.

✓ Well, it depends on the day and the activities I have planned.

The phrase 'it will depend' is future tense, but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'it depends' is more appropriate.

× I normally love to stay home alone and unwind after working for several hours during the week.

✓ I normally love to stay at home alone and unwind after working for several hours during the week.

The phrase 'stay home' is informal; the more correct form is 'stay at home'.

× But when I am with my family, I love to go out with them to the shopping mall to get some ice creams and also to the cinema halls where we can watch latest movies and bond to.

✓ But when I am with my family, I love to go out with them to the shopping mall to get some ice cream and also to the cinema halls where we can watch the latest movies and bond.

'Ice creams' should be 'ice cream' when referring to the food generally. 'Watch latest movies' needs the definite article 'the' before 'latest movies'. The phrase 'bond to' is incorrect; 'bond' alone is sufficient.

× I prefer a leisure holiday and this is because I mostly work long hours during the week and if an opportunity comes for a holiday to be celebrated, I love to stay home and relax my mind after unwinding for several hours and also have a very good time with my family where we can discuss matters affecting us.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday and this is because I mostly work long hours during the week and if an opportunity comes for a holiday to be celebrated, I love to stay home and relax my mind after unwinding for several hours and also have a very good time with my family where we can discuss matters affecting us.

The adjective 'leisure' should be the adverb 'leisurely' to correctly modify the noun 'holiday'.