Money— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors, and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details within 5 sentences.

Example: No, I have never borrowed money from others because I prefer to save my own money. For example, last year I saved enough to buy a laptop without any difficulty. This habit helps me avoid financial stress and be independent.

Suggestion: Your answer contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases that affect clarity. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific and avoid irrelevant details to make your answer more effective and natural.

Example: Yes, I have lent money to others before. For instance, last year a friend of mine needed money to buy a laptop because he was facing financial difficulties. Since I had saved some money, I lent it to him to help out. It felt good to support a friend in need.

× Well, in my life I have never borrowed money from anybody and it is one of my habit of creature to save the money in my Piggy Bank.

✓ Well, in my life I have never borrowed money from anybody and it is one of my habits as a creature to save money in my Piggy Bank.

The phrase 'one of my habit' is incorrect because 'habit' should be pluralized to 'habits' when used with 'one of my'. Also, 'of creature' is unclear and should be 'as a creature' to make sense. Additionally, 'the money' is incorrect here; 'money' is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× So whenever I need it I prefer to use.

✓ So whenever I need it, I prefer to use it.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object after 'use'. Adding 'it' clarifies what is being used. Also, a comma after 'need it' improves readability.

× From my saving last year I vividly remember that I need a laptop so with the help of of my savings I can I could purchase it instantly without any type of difficulty.

✓ From my savings last year, I vividly remember that I needed a laptop, so with the help of my savings, I could purchase it instantly without any difficulty.

The verb tense should be past ('needed') to match the past time reference 'last year'. Also, 'saving' should be plural 'savings'. The phrase 'can I could' is incorrect; 'could' alone is appropriate. 'Any type of difficulty' is better simplified to 'any difficulty'.

× Rather than to borrowing my money I prefer to save it.

✓ Rather than borrowing money, I prefer to save it.

The phrase 'Rather than to borrowing' is incorrect; 'rather than' should be followed by the base form or gerund without 'to'. Also, 'my money' is unnecessary here; 'money' suffices.

× Yes, in my life I have learned many a times to money to others.

✓ Yes, in my life I have lent money to others many times.

The phrase 'have learned many a times to money to others' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'lent' (past participle of 'lend'). 'Many a times' should be 'many times' and placed appropriately. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I vividly remember that last year one of my friend needed money to purchase the laptop because their financial condition is poor.

✓ I vividly remember that last year one of my friends needed money to purchase a laptop because his financial condition was poor.

'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. 'The laptop' is changed to 'a laptop' as it is not a specific laptop previously mentioned. 'Their' is changed to 'his' to agree with singular 'one friend'. Also, 'is' is changed to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So he just insists to me as I having a lot of money and I collected it to purchase my beautiful phone case.

✓ So he just insisted to me that I had a lot of money, and I collected it to purchase my beautiful phone case.

'Insists to me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'insisted to me' or better 'insisted that I had'. 'I having' is incorrect; it should be 'I had'. The sentence is adjusted to past tense for consistency.

× At that time I prefer to lend it.

✓ At that time, I preferred to lend it.

The verb tense should be past ('preferred') to match the past time reference 'at that time'. A comma after 'At that time' improves readability.