Money— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'I don't like to feel the way that I owe someone' 부분을 더 간결하게 표현하고, 은행에서 빌리는 경우를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 흐름을 부드럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: I have never borrowed money from friends or family because I dislike owing people. However, I have taken loans from banks when necessary, such as for buying a car or paying for education.

Suggestion: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 있으나, 문장 구조가 다소 어색하고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 'And yes' 대신 더 자연스러운 시작 문장을 사용하고, 긴 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 구체적인 상황을 조금 더 자세히 설명하면 답변이 풍부해집니다.

Example: Yes, I have lent money to friends who were short of funds. For example, I helped one friend cover hospital fees during an emergency and another with mortgage payments.

× I never borrowed money from others because I don't like to feel the way that I owe someone.

✓ I have never borrowed money from others because I don't like to feel that I owe someone.

The sentence uses 'never borrowed' which is simple past tense, but the context implies an experience up to now, so present perfect 'have never borrowed' is more appropriate to express an action that has never happened until now.

× Usually I prefer to earn my own money rather than borrowing from others unless it's bank.

✓ Usually I prefer to earn my own money rather than borrowing from others unless it's from a bank.

The phrase 'unless it's bank' is missing the preposition 'from' before 'a bank'. Prepositions are necessary to indicate relationships between words; here, 'from' shows the source of borrowing.

× And yes, I have lent money to others because some of my friends asked me that they are in short of fund and emergency cases such as hospital fees and mortgage payments.

✓ And yes, I have lent money to others because some of my friends told me that they are short of funds in emergency cases such as hospital fees and mortgage payments.

The phrase 'asked me that they are in short of fund' is incorrect. 'Asked me that' should be 'told me that' to report information. Also, 'in short of fund' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'short of funds'. The pronoun usage and phrase structure need correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.