Money— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but sounds informal and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make it more natural and effective. Avoid filler words like 'like' and 'yeah'.

Example: Yes, I have borrowed money from others when I was a child. For example, I once borrowed a small amount from my parents to buy a book. Since the amount was low, I repaid it quickly. This experience taught me the importance of managing money carefully.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be improved by removing fillers like 'umm' and adding more specific details with linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

Example: Yes, I have lent money to others, especially my friends. For instance, when a friend faced financial difficulties, I lent him some money to help cover his expenses. I believe helping friends in need strengthens our relationship.

× I can say yes, but it's when I was a kid, so the amount was really low and like, yeah.

✓ I can say yes, but it was when I was a kid, so the amount was really low and, like, yeah.

The phrase 'it's when I was a kid' incorrectly uses the present tense 'it's' instead of the past tense 'it was' to refer to a past event. Since the action happened in the past, the verb should be in past tense to maintain tense consistency.

× When they're in a bad situation or they need it, I always lend money to them.

✓ When they're in a bad situation or need it, I always lend money to them.

The phrase 'they need it' is correct, but the sentence can be improved by removing the repeated subject 'they' in the second clause for smoother flow. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar error, but it helps clarity and conciseness.