Money— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve fluency and clarity by removing hesitations and repetitions, and give a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like “for example” or “so” correctly and avoid unnecessary filler words (uh, um). Keep the answer within three to four sentences.

Example: Yes, I have borrowed money before. For example, I borrowed money from my brother to buy a car last year, and I paid him back within six months. I prefer not to borrow often because I try to save and manage my own finances.

Suggestion: Work on pronunciation, reduce hesitation sounds, and organize the response with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. State who you lent money to, why, how much or roughly, and what happened afterwards (repayment or not). Use linking words like “because” and “so” to make the sequence clear, and limit to three sentences.

Example: Yes, I have lent money to a friend once because he needed funds for a long trip and did not have enough savings. I lent him about $200 and he repaid me within two months. I would help again if it were an emergency but I usually lend only small amounts.

× I have borrowed money from other for example like borrow money from my brother for buying a car.

✓ I have borrowed money from others; for example, I borrowed money from my brother to buy a car.

The student used 'other' (singular) but needed the plural 'others' when referring to other people (singular and plural issue). Also verb forms and prepositions were awkward: 'for example like' is redundant, and 'for buying a car' should be 'to buy a car' (use infinitive for purpose). Improve by using 'others' and simplifying the phrase: 'for example, I borrowed money from my brother to buy a car.' Suggested practice: review countable plurals and common purpose structures with infinitives.

× I don't like to borrow money always from others and I I try to use my money and think that it's better.

✓ I don't like to always borrow money from others, and I try to use my own money because I think that is better.

Placement of 'always' was incorrect (adverb placement) and the sentence had repetition 'I I'. The verb forms are fine but word order needed adjustment: adverb 'always' should be before the main verb phrase 'borrow money' or after 'don't like to'. Also use 'my own money' for clarity and 'that is better' or 'it is better' for a complete clause. Improve by removing repetition and placing adverbs correctly.

× Actually, yes, uh, I learned, umm, a money to, uh, my friend, uh, because uh, uh, he wants uh, to go to the, uh, long journey and don't have enough money.

✓ Actually, yes. I lent some money to my friend because he wanted to go on a long journey and did not have enough money.

Several issues: 'learned a money to' is incorrect verb choice and word order; the correct verb is 'lent' (past of 'lend'). Tense consistency: if telling a past event, use past tense 'wanted' and 'did not have'. Preposition 'go to the long journey' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go on a long journey'. Also contracted negative 'don't' should be 'did not' for past. Improve by using correct verb 'lend' in past tense, proper preposition 'on', and consistent past-tense verbs.

× And I lent him some money, but uh, actually, uh, additional.

✓ And I lent him some money, but actually it was additional.

The fragment 'actually additional' is incomplete; 'additional' needs a noun (e.g., 'help') or a linking verb: 'it was additional' or 'it was an additional amount'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'lent'. Improve by completing the idea: 'it was an additional amount' or 'it was extra help.'