App— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਸਹੀ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਇਹ ਕੁਝ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹੈ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਦੱਸੋ ਕਿ ਤੁਸੀਂ ਕਿਹੜੇ ਐਪਸ ਵਰਤੇ ਹਨ ਅਤੇ ਕਿਉਂ। ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਛੋਟਾ ਅਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਰੱਖੋ ਅਤੇ ਜੁੜੇ ਹੋਏ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਵਰਤੋਂ।

Example: Recently, I have been using Snapchat to stay connected with my friends. I often send snaps to share moments from my day.

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਸਹੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਇਹ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹੈ। ਸਿੱਧਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਕਿ ਤੁਸੀਂ ਕਿਹੜੇ ਕਿਸਮ ਦੇ ਐਪਸ ਵਿੱਚ ਦਿਲਚਸਪੀ ਰੱਖਦੇ ਹੋ ਅਤੇ ਕਿਉਂ। ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਜੋੜੋ।

Example: I am usually interested in social media apps like Instagram and Snapchat because they help me stay updated and connected with friends.

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਅਧੂਰਾ ਅਤੇ ਗ਼ਲਤ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਭਰਪੂਰ ਹੈ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਪੂਰਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਕਿ ਤੁਸੀਂ ਕਿਵੇਂ ਨਵੇਂ ਐਪਸ ਲੱਭਦੇ ਹੋ। ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਹੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਜੋੜੋ ਅਤੇ ਪੂਰੀ ਜਾਣਕਾਰੀ ਦਿਓ।

Example: I usually find new apps by browsing the App Store on my phone. It shows me different categories, so I can choose apps related to my interests like health or information.

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹੈ ਪਰ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਚੋਣ ਵਿੱਚ ਸੁਧਾਰ ਦੀ ਲੋੜ ਹੈ। ਸਿੱਧਾ ਅਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਦੱਸੋ ਕਿ ਤੁਸੀਂ ਕਿਹੜੇ ਐਪਸ ਵਰਤਣਾ ਚਾਹੁੰਦੇ ਹੋ ਅਤੇ ਕਿਉਂ।

Example: In the future, I would like to use fitness apps and delivery apps. Fitness apps can help people stay healthy, and delivery apps make daily life more convenient.

× Recently I have to use the Snapchat because and I have to read on that place.

✓ Recently I had to use Snapchat because I had to read there.

The phrase 'have to' is incorrectly used in present tense for a past action. It should be 'had to' to indicate past obligation. Also, 'on that place' is incorrect preposition usage; 'there' is appropriate.

× I have to send the snap to my friends on that time.

✓ I had to send the snap to my friends at that time.

'Have to' should be in past tense 'had to' to match the past context. Also, 'on that time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at that time'.

× Uh, usually I have used the that apps they are inform me, they give the information to me for the social.

✓ Uh, usually I use those apps; they inform me and give me information about social activities.

The present perfect 'have used' is incorrectly used for habitual action; simple present 'use' is correct. 'The that apps' is incorrect; 'those apps' is correct. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Activities like Instagram, Snapchat was in the modern era, these two apps are more.

✓ Activities like Instagram and Snapchat are popular in the modern era; these two apps are very common.

'Was' is incorrect for plural subject; 'are' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my phone in App Store are the really help to me to find out the different type of apps for me provided the every types of apps in front of me.

✓ The App Store on my phone really helps me find different types of apps; it provides every type of app for me.

Incorrect preposition usage: 'In my phone in App Store' should be 'The App Store on my phone'. Also, sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× If I have to want the anywhere information and any health related I have so I.

✓ If I want any information or anything related to health, I have it.

Incorrect use of 'have to want' and incomplete sentence. Corrected to simple present 'want' and completed the sentence for clarity.

× In the future I'm use the fitness app and the delivery routine because in the nowadays people have not to stay healthy and they cannot to see out your body in the daily routine.

✓ In the future, I will use fitness apps and delivery services because nowadays people do not stay healthy and cannot take care of their bodies in daily routines.

'I'm use' is incorrect; future tense 'I will use' is appropriate. 'Have not to stay healthy' is incorrect; corrected to 'do not stay healthy'. 'Cannot to see out your body' is incorrect; corrected to 'cannot take care of their bodies'.

× So these are the useful app in the future.

✓ So these are useful apps for the future.

'App' should be plural 'apps' to agree with 'these'. Also, 'in the future' is better expressed as 'for the future' here.