App— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和口头语，使用更准确的词汇表达兴趣和使用原因。

Example: Recently, I have been using TikTok and Bilibili because I am interested in American TV series. These apps help me find and watch videos of my favorite dramas.

Suggestion: 回答中有较多重复和口头语，句子结构不够清晰，建议直接回答问题并用连词连接细节，表达更流畅自然。

Example: I usually enjoy apps that offer short videos and TV series. For example, I recently watched season 5 of Stranger Things on a video app because I am a big fan of American dramas.

Suggestion: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子，明确说明通过应用商店和朋友推荐来发现新应用。

Example: I usually find new apps through app stores like the Apple Store. Sometimes, I also ask my friends for recommendations when I want to download a specific app like Instagram.

Suggestion: 回答中有重复和口头语，建议直接说明未来想用的应用类型，并解释原因，使表达更简洁自然。

Example: In the future, I would like to use video editing apps because my major is broadcasting and TV directing. These apps will help me complete my graduation projects.

× It must be Tiktok and Billy Billy because, uh, reason at the recent time I, I was I am keen to American series.

✓ It must be Tiktok and Billy Billy because, recently, I have been keen on American series.

这里“must be”用法不当，表达推测时应使用“must be”，但后面句子时态混乱，应使用现在完成进行时表示最近的状态。建议用“have been keen on”表示最近一直喜欢。

× So I have to search this American dramas on this applications which can help me to find some, uh, videos in there.

✓ So I have to search for these American dramas on these applications which can help me to find some videos there.

动词“search”后应接介词“for”，表示“搜索某物”；“this American dramas”应为复数“these American dramas”；“this applications”应为复数“these applications”；“videos in there”中“in”多余，直接用“videos there”。

× A well, some short videos applications and some TV series applications.

✓ Well, some short video applications and some TV series applications.

“short videos applications”中“videos”应为形容词形式“video”，修饰“applications”；“A well”应为“Well”，不需要冠词。

× You know that recently, uh, the season 5 of Stranger things, they just came, they just came back.

✓ You know that recently, uh, season 5 of Stranger Things has just come out, it has just come back.

“came”是一般过去时，表示过去动作，但“recently”表示最近发生，建议用现在完成时“has just come out”；“they”指代不明，改为“it”指代“season 5”。

× So I, I, I am keen to this American drama.

✓ So I am keen on this American drama.

“keen”后应接介词“on”，表示“喜欢、热衷于”，而非“to”。

× So I have to, uh, search them on some video applications.

✓ So I have to search for it on some video applications.

“them”指代不明，前文提到的是单数“American drama”，应使用“it”；“search”后应加介词“for”。

× From the application stores like Apple store or some of the other ways.

✓ From application stores like the Apple Store or other sources.

“application stores”前不需要冠词“the”；“Apple store”应大写且加定冠词“the Apple Store”；“some of the other ways”表达不自然，改为“other sources”。

× Once I remember that I wanted to aid uh, down the Instagram, so I had to ask some person who has this the, the red book called uh, the by this way, I can ask them to find the Instagram.

✓ Once I remember that I wanted to download Instagram, so I had to ask someone who has this red book called Xiaohongshu. By this way, I can ask them to find Instagram.

“aid uh, down the Instagram”应为“download Instagram”；“some person”应为“someone”；“the red book”是“小红书”的直译，应使用其中文名“Xiaohongshu”；句子结构混乱，分为两句更清晰。

× Well, based on my major in my college, uh, my major is broadcasting and uh, TV director.

✓ Well, based on my major in college, my major is broadcasting and TV directing.

“in my college”可简化为“in college”；“TV director”应改为“TV directing”，表示专业方向。

× So I have to use some clip applications in the future to help me accomplish my, uh, graduating homework.

✓ So I have to use some clip applications in the future to help me accomplish my graduation project.

“graduating homework”表达不准确，通常用“graduation project”或“graduation assignment”表示毕业设计或作业。