Party— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'helps to relax and recharge our mind' multiple times. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to parties.

Example: Yes, I enjoy parties because they provide a refreshing break from daily routines. I usually dance, sing, and share meals with my family, which makes the experience more enjoyable and memorable.

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Be more specific about frequency and types of parties. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'when I was kid' to 'when I was a kid'.

Example: When I was a kid, I often attended various parties with my friends and family, including birthday celebrations, weddings, and other special ceremonies. These social events helped me relax and enjoy time with loved ones.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats the same idea twice. Try to be more concise and clear. Explain briefly why you haven't organized a party and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'till now I have not organized any party'.

Example: I have never organized a party because I tend to be ambivalent about hosting events. However, I enjoy attending parties with close friends and family since they help me relax and recharge.

× Yes, I love parties because it gives us some freshness and also it helps to relax and recharge our mind.

✓ Yes, I love parties because they give us some freshness and also they help to relax and recharge our minds.

The subject 'parties' is plural, so the verbs should be 'give' and 'help' instead of 'gives' and 'helps'. Also, 'mind' should be plural 'minds' to match the plural subject 'us'.

× Whenever I attend some parties, I always try to dance and sing, also enjoy meals with my family.

✓ Whenever I attend some parties, I always try to dance and sing, and also enjoy meals with my family.

The sentence is missing a conjunction 'and' before 'also enjoy' to properly connect the verbs. This is a sentence structure issue but related to plural actions.

× Uh, well, when I was kid, I used to attend so many parties with my FA friends and families, uh, such as birthday party, wedding and other special ceremonies.

✓ Uh, well, when I was a kid, I used to attend so many parties with my FA friends and family, such as birthday parties, weddings, and other special ceremonies.

The phrase 'when I was kid' is missing the article 'a'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring collectively. Also, 'birthday party' and 'wedding' should be plural to match 'so many parties'.

× Also, I used to attend some social events as well, which helps me relax and recharge my mind and.

✓ Also, I used to attend some social events as well, which helped me relax and recharge my mind.

The sentence ends with an unnecessary 'and'. Also, since the events were in the past, 'helps' should be 'helped'.

× Well till now I have not organized any party because I am kind of ambivalent person.

✓ Well, till now I have not organized any party because I am kind of an ambivalent person.

The phrase 'kind of ambivalent person' needs the article 'an' before 'ambivalent person'.

× So I love to attend party and enjoy with my close friends and family because it helps us relax and recharge our mind.

✓ So I love to attend parties and enjoy with my close friends and family because it helps us relax and recharge our minds.

'Attend party' should be 'attend parties' to match plural. 'Mind' should be plural 'minds' to match 'us'.