Traffic— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “there are several crosswalks” and “I have to cross the road about three times” convey similar information). Add a short comment about how it affects you to show opinion. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes — there are several crosswalks near my home, and I need to use them about three times on my commute. However, I often get frustrated because the signals take a long time to change during rush hour, which makes my journey slower. Because of this, I sometimes leave earlier to avoid delays.

Suggestion: Structure your response with a clear topic sentence stating what you would change, then give specific reasons and one consequence. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and avoid repeating location words. Be precise about who is affected and how.

Example: I would ask the local government to repair the roads near my home because heavy rains last summer left many potholes. As a result, I worry for elderly people and children crossing those streets, since the damaged surface is unsafe and could cause accidents. Prompt repairs would make walking and driving much safer.

× I have to cross the road about three times when I go to my company.

✓ I have to cross the road about three times when I go to my company.

No correction needed for preposition; sentence is acceptable. However, consider using 'to work' instead of 'to my company' for more natural phrasing: 'when I go to work.' This is a style suggestion, not a grammar error.

× Therefore, I sometimes feel frustrated while waiting for the signals to turn green, especially in rush hours.

✓ Therefore, I sometimes feel frustrated while waiting for the signals to turn green, especially during rush hour.

Use 'during' as the correct preposition with time periods and use the uncountable phrase 'rush hour' rather than the plural 'rush hours' when referring to the general busy period. Suggestion: say 'during rush hour' or 'during rush hours' only if referring to multiple distinct busy periods.

× I would like the local government to repair some of roads near my home because many of them were heavily damaged by terrible rain last summer.

✓ I would like the local government to repair some of the roads near my home because many of them were heavily damaged by heavy rain last summer.

Two issues: 1) Missing definite article before 'roads' in 'some of the roads'—use 'some of the roads' when referring to specific roads near the speaker's home. This is an article/preposition-related choice. 2) 'Terrible rain' is grammatically possible but 'heavy rain' is the more natural collocation in English. 'Last summer' correctly indicates past time, so keep past tense 'were damaged.' Suggestion: use 'some of the roads' and replace 'terrible' with 'heavy' for natural phrasing.

× So I sometimes feel worried when I see the elderly and children in my home crossing the road because there are many potholes there.

✓ So I sometimes feel worried when I see the elderly and children from my neighborhood crossing the road because there are many potholes there.

The phrase 'in my home' is incorrect for meaning people living nearby; use 'from my neighborhood' or 'near my home.' 'In my home' suggests inside the house. Also ensure plural agreement: 'the elderly and children' is acceptable, but 'the elderly and the children' can be used if referring to specific groups. Suggestion: use 'from my neighborhood' or 'near my home' to convey the intended meaning.