Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke poin utama, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, jelaskan alasan mengapa Anda suka berbelanja dengan kalimat yang terstruktur baik.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it makes me happy. Sometimes, I just like to browse bags and clothes in stores without necessarily buying anything. Shopping is one of my favorite hobbies.

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lengkap serta koheren. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih logis dan jelas. Jelaskan alasan membandingkan harga dengan kalimat yang terstruktur.

Example: Yes, I always compare prices when shopping offline and online because I am responsible for my spending. Therefore, I try to find the best deals to save money.

Suggestion: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan efektif. Jelaskan alasan kesulitan dalam membuat pilihan dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan teratur, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan ide.

Example: It is quite difficult for me to make choices because I care a lot about spending money wisely. Therefore, I need time to compare prices and think carefully whether I really want to buy certain clothes.

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan pendapat Anda dengan alasan dan contoh yang spesifik, serta hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau ambigu.

Example: I don't always think expensive products are better because I have found many good products that are cheaper. So, I believe price does not always reflect quality.

× When I have a lot of money like I will go to store.

✓ When I have a lot of money, I will go to the store.

The original sentence lacks proper article usage and punctuation, making it unclear. Adding 'the' before 'store' is necessary because it refers to a specific place. Also, a comma after 'money' improves sentence clarity.

× With feeling of hapiness to buy or not buying.

✓ With the feeling of happiness about buying or not buying.

The phrase 'with feeling of hapiness' is missing the article 'the' and has a spelling error in 'hapiness' which should be 'happiness'. Also, 'to buy or not buying' is inconsistent; 'about buying or not buying' is clearer.

× Like just see the bags, clothes on the store.

✓ I just like to look at the bags and clothes in the store.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and proper verb form. Adding 'I just like to look at' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'on the store' should be 'in the store' as items are inside the store.

× That's actually one of my hobbies.

✓ That's actually one of my hobbies.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Like I'm always compare prices when I am doing offline shopping an compared to the.

✓ I always compare prices when I do offline shopping compared to online shopping prices.

The verb 'compare' should be in base form after 'always'. 'Doing offline shopping' is better as 'do offline shopping'. 'An compared to the' is incomplete and should be 'compared to online shopping prices' for clarity.

× On line shopping price because.

✓ online shopping prices because.

This fragment is incomplete and should be connected to the previous sentence for clarity. 'On line' should be 'online' as one word, and 'price' should be plural 'prices' to match context.

× I'm responsible for what I spend, so like I'm trying to really.

✓ I'm responsible for what I spend, so I try to be careful.

The original sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. 'I'm trying to really' needs an object or complement. 'I try to be careful' completes the thought clearly.

× I am a person who really care for two spans money to buy something.

✓ I am a person who really cares about spending money to buy something.

'Care for two spans money' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'cares about spending money'. Also, subject-verb agreement requires 'cares' for 'a person'.

× So like I need a lot of time to. To compare the price to really thing, is it some kind of clothes that I really want to buy or not like there's a lot of?

✓ So, I need a lot of time to compare prices and really think about whether there are some clothes that I really want to buy or not.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the fragments and correcting 'thing' to 'think' and 'price' to 'prices' improves clarity and grammar.

× I did not always like that because I found a lot of.

✓ I do not always think that because I have found a lot of.

The original sentence uses past tense 'did not' and 'found' inconsistently with the present context. Using present tense 'do not' and present perfect 'have found' is more appropriate here.

× Products that actually more good when I bought it a more cheap so I think it's just.

✓ Products that are actually better when I bought them cheaper, so I think it's just.

The phrase 'more good' should be 'better' (comparative adjective). 'Bought it a more cheap' is incorrect; it should be 'bought them cheaper'. The sentence is incomplete and needs further completion for clarity.

× Alright. A gossip.

✓ Alright, just a rumor.

The phrase 'A gossip' is incorrect in this context. 'Just a rumor' is a more appropriate expression to convey the intended meaning.