Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid generalizations. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and incorrect phrases (e.g., “put in stress” → “relieve stress”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping. For example, I find it relaxing and it lifts my mood after a stressful day, especially when I discover useful items or good deals.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason using linking words. Use correct verb forms and fewer repetitions. Mention a specific method or example of how you compare prices to add detail.

Example: Yes, I usually compare prices because it helps me save money. For instance, I check prices online and in different stores before I buy, and I also read reviews to make sure the cheaper option is good quality.

Suggestion: Answer directly (Yes/No) then explain briefly with a supporting detail. Improve sentence structure and word order, and use linking words like “because” or “so”.

Example: Not usually, because I normally make a list before I go shopping. So when I arrive I know exactly what I need, I pick it up quickly and head to the cashier.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason and an example. Use correct vocabulary (product, last, durable) and avoid vague phrases like “stay with me.”

Example: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. For example, I once bought an affordable phone that lasted as long as a more expensive model, so I usually judge items by quality and reviews rather than price alone.

× Yes, of course, I think all women like shopping because they feel uh, something like happy or they can uh, put in stress, uh, uh, in far away and enjoy to shopping.

✓ Yes, of course. I think many women like shopping because it makes them feel happy or helps them relieve stress and enjoy shopping.

Original uses incorrect pronouns and awkward phrasing ('they feel something like happy', 'put in stress', 'in far away', 'enjoy to shopping'). Replace vague 'something like happy' with 'make them feel happy', use 'helps them relieve stress' for correct verb and object, and 'enjoy shopping' (verb + -ing). Also change 'all women' to 'many women' to avoid an overgeneralization (not a grammar rule but improves accuracy).

× Yes uh, usually I compare, I compare price when I shop because uh sometime we can found uh, this product is uh cheaper rather than other uh uh, shop or select, so I want I need to compare.

✓ Yes, usually I compare prices when I shop because sometimes we find that a product is cheaper than in other shops, so I want to compare.

Errors include wrong noun form 'price' (should be plural 'prices' when speaking generally), incorrect verb forms 'sometime' -> 'sometimes', 'we can found' -> 'we find' (present tense), and awkward comparative 'cheaper rather than other shop' -> 'cheaper than in other shops'. Also remove redundant words and ensure verb+ -ing where needed ('compare prices when I shop').

× Sometime no is because when I go shop I go and I know what I want so I go directly I get the product and go the cashier.

✓ Sometimes no, because when I go shopping I know what I want, so I go directly to get the product and go to the cashier.

Multiple structural problems: 'Sometime' -> 'Sometimes', missing '-ing' in 'go shop' -> 'go shopping', misplaced 'no' should be 'no' after 'Sometimes', run-on sentence needs commas and proper infinitive 'to get'. Also add preposition 'to' before 'the cashier'. These changes fix tense, verb forms and sentence flow.

× No, not all time. Some cheaper project is good and we can stay with me a long time rather than expensive project. So I prefer it's has some uh equal between them.

✓ No, not all the time. Some cheaper products are good and can last with me a long time compared to expensive products. So I prefer when there is some equality between them.

Problems: 'all time' -> 'all the time' (article), 'cheaper project' -> 'cheaper products' (word choice and plural), verb agreement 'is good' -> 'are good', 'we can stay with me a long time' is ungrammatical — use 'can last with me a long time' or 'can last a long time', and 'rather than' -> 'compared to'. Final sentence 'So I prefer it's has some equal between them' corrected to 'So I prefer when there is some equality between them' to fix pronoun and verb forms and use correct noun 'equality'.