Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and long fragments; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., "it distracts me from stress" not "distracted me"). Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping. It relaxes me and distracts me from stress, and I like the feeling of treating myself to something nice.

Suggestion: Avoid fillers and grammatical errors. Begin with a direct statement, then briefly explain the reason using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Be specific about how you compare (online reviews, store visits) and correct verb forms ("when I shop").

Example: Yes, I often compare prices because I want good quality at a reasonable price. For example, I check online reviews and visit two or three stores to find the best value.

Suggestion: Make the answer clearer and more coherent. Start with a simple direct answer, then give a concise reason and one brief example. Remove repetitions and fill words. Use linking words like "because" or "so".

Example: No, it isn't difficult for me to decide because I usually buy items that immediately appeal to me. For instance, if I see a bag I like, I compare it quickly and usually purchase it the same day.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion first and then support it with specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and improve grammar (e.g., "not always" and "may be expensive but of poor quality"). Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

Example: No, expensive products are not always better. For example, some designer items have poor craftsmanship, so I focus on product reviews and materials instead of price alone.

× Yes, actually I like shopping very much because when I'm shopping this activity gives me a good feeling and distracted me from stress and I feel a sense of luxury and good things.

✓ Yes, actually I like shopping very much because when I'm shopping this activity gives me a good feeling, distracts me from stress, and makes me feel a sense of luxury and happiness.

The sentence mixes present continuous and simple present verbs incorrectly. 'Distracted me' is past tense but the context requires present tense agreement with 'gives me'; use 'distracts me'. Also 'I feel a sense of luxury and good things' is awkward and ungrammatical; replace with 'makes me feel a sense of luxury and happiness' for clarity and correct verb usage. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same present tense and use parallel structure for the listed effects (gives..., distracts..., makes...).

× Actually, yes uh, I compare prices when I shopping uh, because uh, I uh, try to umm, shop and buy the cheapest and best quality things and uh, I think that uh, expensive uh, things, uh, is not.

✓ Actually, yes, I compare prices when I shop because I try to buy the cheapest items with the best quality, and I don't think expensive things are always better.

The phrase 'when I shopping' is incorrect; after 'when' use the base form with the subject ('I shop') or a progressive structure ('when I am shopping'). Also 'is not' does not agree with the plural subject 'things' and is incomplete; use 'are always better' or 'are better' and include a negator. Suggestions: Use 'shop' for simple present habitual actions, ensure subject-verb agreement ('things are'), and simplify filler words for clarity.

× No, it isn't difficult for me to choose something when I, uh, shopping because when I uh, like something, uh, that thing, uh, attracts me. I buy it, uh, uh, and uh, I don't think about uh, that and I, I shop think.

✓ No, it isn't difficult for me to choose something when I am shopping because when I like something, it attracts me and I buy it without thinking much.

'When I shopping' needs the auxiliary 'am' to form present continuous ('I am shopping'). 'That thing attracts me' is wordy; use 'it attracts me'. 'I don't think about that and I, I shop think' is ungrammatical and repetitive; replace with 'I buy it without thinking much.' Suggestions: Use correct continuous tense with 'am' and remove filler words to produce clear, grammatically correct sentences.

× No, I think that that this is, uh, not necessary through, uh, maybe something is expensive, but uh, have a bad quality. Uh, so when, uh, we are shopping, it's very important, uh, to pay attention to the quality of these things and not, uh, about, uh, uh.

✓ No, I don't think that is always necessary; something may be expensive but have poor quality. So when we are shopping, it's very important to pay attention to the quality of products rather than the price.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'I think that that this is not necessary through' is ungrammatical—use 'I don't think that is always necessary.' 'Maybe something is expensive, but have a bad quality' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong noun phrase; use 'something may be expensive but have poor quality.' The final fragment 'and not about' is incomplete; clarify 'rather than the price.' Suggestions: Use clearer negation ('I don't think'), modal 'may' for possibility, ensure subject-verb agreement, and complete comparative phrases ('rather than').