Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, run-on sentences). Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' correctly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it makes me feel confident. For example, buying clothes that suit my style helps me look presentable at work and social events, which in turn makes me feel more self-assured.

Suggestion: Organize your answer with a clear reason and a coherent example. Remove filler words ('umm') and correct the example so it is logical and grammatically correct. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' properly.

Example: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to get good value for money. For example, instead of spending $100 on one jacket, I might buy two cheaper jackets for $30 each so I have more options and save money.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two specific details. Remove hesitations and fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'types of clothes suit me'). Use a linking phrase like 'because' and give a brief example of what you do to decide.

Example: Sometimes I find it difficult to choose clothes because sizes and styles don't always fit my slim build. Therefore, I usually try items on and ask friends for advice to make sure the outfit looks right.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Replace vague statements with a clear opinion and one specific reason or example. Remove fillers and correct awkward phrasing.

Example: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. While higher-priced items can offer better materials or craftsmanship, price doesn't guarantee quality—sometimes cheaper products perform equally well or expensive ones have defects.

× Yes, I love shopping because it gives me a sense of satisfaction to look good in front of people gives me good appearance.

✓ Yes, I love shopping because it gives me a sense of satisfaction and helps me look good in front of people.

Original sentence repeats ideas and has poor structure and redundancy ('gives me a sense... gives me good appearance'). Combine coordinated ideas with 'and' and use a single clear verb phrase ('helps me look good') for clarity and grammaticality.

× This is not only boosts my confidence but also helps me to attract individuals towards myself.

✓ This not only boosts my confidence but also helps me attract others.

Incorrect use of 'This is not only boosts' mixes forms. Use parallel structure: 'not only' + verb and 'but also' + verb. Also 'attract individuals towards myself' is awkward; use 'attract others' for natural English.

× Yes, absolutely. I compare prices when I shop because it is very important to umm choose clothes which are budget friendly rather than expensive.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I compare prices when I shop because it is important to choose clothes that are budget-friendly rather than expensive.

Remove filler 'umm', fix phrasing: use 'that' or 'which' to introduce a defining clause ('that are budget-friendly'). Hyphenate 'budget-friendly'. Keep present tense and clear clause structure.

× For example, if I'm buying buying a jacket which is worth $100, this battery to buy 2 separate jackets $15 each other than buying the expensive ones because it gives me a wider choice when.

✓ For example, if I'm buying a jacket worth $100, it may be better to buy two separate jackets at $15 each rather than the expensive one because it gives me a wider choice.

Original has repeated word 'buying buying', incorrect word 'battery' (likely 'better'), missing prepositions and numbers format, and incomplete ending. Correct verb forms, use 'it may be better', add 'at' for price, and 'rather than' for comparison. Complete the clause 'because it gives me a wider choice'.

× Uh, sometimes I'm serious.

✓ Uh, sometimes I am indecisive.

'I'm serious' doesn't fit context (question about difficulty making choices). Likely intended 'I'm unsure' or 'indecisive'. Change to present descriptive adjective matching meaning.

× It is very difficult because the choices and the size matters a lot because as I'm a skinny person, not all type of clothes suits on well.

✓ It is very difficult because the choices and sizes matter a lot; as I'm a skinny person, not all types of clothes suit me well.

Subject-verb agreement: 'choices and sizes matter' (plural subject takes plural verb). Use plural 'types' and correct verb 'suit' with object pronoun 'me'. Remove unnecessary 'on' after 'suit'.

× So I have to think and also ask my friends sometimes about which both looks good on me.

✓ So I have to think and sometimes ask my friends which ones look good on me.

Use 'which ones' for plural items, 'look' for plural subject, and keep 'on me' acceptable. Remove redundant 'both' unless referring to exactly two items; if so, say 'which of the two looks good on me'.

× Well, I do not believe, uh, that expensive rugs are always better than cheaper ones because they can be flaws in each and every product that are found in that is found in the market.

✓ Well, I do not believe that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because flaws can be found in any product on the market.

Replace 'rugs' with 'products' to match context. Reorder sentence for natural English: 'flaws can be found in any product on the market.' Avoid redundant phrasing 'each and every' and incorrect relative clause.

× Because expensive products can be reliable to some extent, but after a certain point, they might go through flaws.

✓ Expensive products can be reliable to some extent, but after a certain point they may develop faults.

Do not start sentence with 'Because' when continuing previous thought; combine into one sentence. Use 'may develop faults' instead of 'might go through flaws' which is unidiomatic. Keep modal consistency ('can' and 'may').