Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one or two clear supporting details with linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confused phrases. Use specific examples of what you like to buy or which shopping places you visit.

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it is a good way to relax and find useful items. For example, I often visit local markets and small boutiques in the city to buy clothes and gifts. Also, I like window-shopping in shopping centres when I don't need to buy anything.

Suggestion: Give a clear yes/no answer and explain your reason with a simple structure: topic sentence + 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, so, for example). Mention how you compare (apps, labels, visiting stores).

Example: Yes, I usually compare prices because I want to get the best value. For example, I check prices online and then visit a couple of shops to see if there are discounts. This helps me decide whether to buy now or wait for a sale.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give clear reasons. State whether you find it easy or difficult, then explain with specific examples (choices based on price, quality, brand) and use linking words (because, however, for instance). Keep to 1–3 short sentences.

Example: Sometimes I find it difficult to choose, especially for expensive electronics, because there are many similar options. For instance, I compare features and prices between brands before deciding. However, I make quick choices for everyday groceries based on price and expiry date.

Suggestion: Provide a balanced opinion with clear language. Say your position (not always), then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (for example, however, because). Avoid vague phrases like "data itself" or unclear metaphors about social value without explanation.

Example: I don't think expensive products are always better. For example, pricier items can have better materials or longer warranties, but sometimes cheaper brands perform just as well. Therefore, I judge products by quality and reviews rather than price alone.

× I do generally because Australia doesn't have any appointments in the city, only have a little waterfalls and actually through features we have standing waterfalls of witnesses.

✓ I generally do, because in Australia there are no large shopping centers in the city; instead, we have a few small waterfalls and natural attractions.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect word order ('I do generally'), incorrect use of 'appointments' for 'shopping centers' or 'malls', missing subject for 'only have', and unclear phrases ('standing waterfalls of witnesses'). Rewrite clarifies meaning, uses correct subject-verb constructions ('there are') and natural vocabulary. Suggestion: keep subject before adverb ('I generally do') and use 'there is/are' for existence.

× There's only shopping and visiting houses.

✓ There is only shopping and visiting houses to do.

The sentence lacks a clear verb phrase showing purpose. Adding 'to do' clarifies that these are activities available. Also 'There's' is acceptable for 'There is' when listing activities.

× Shopping can cruise as I actually don't all buy stuff.

✓ Shopping can be a leisure activity because I don't always buy things.

Incorrect verb 'cruise' and awkward negative 'don't all buy'. Use 'can be a leisure activity' to express meaning and 'don't always buy' for frequency. Ensure adverb placement ('don't always').

× There's possible even though how we get away skewed properly.

✓ It is possible, although sometimes prices get distorted when we buy goods.

The original is unclear and ungrammatical ('There's possible', 'how we get away skewed properly'). Replace with a clear subject and verb and a concise clause explaining the idea. Use 'prices get distorted' to express skewed pricing.

× We have the manufacturer for example saying 90s manufacturer, I think it has the local choice which are polymile.

✓ For example, the manufacturer might be from the 1990s; I think there is a local brand option called Polymile.

Incorrect adjective/adverb use and unclear noun phrases. Clarify '90s manufacturer' and use 'local brand option' as noun. Proper punctuation and ordering improves readability.

× I only have the price, so they have a little.

✓ I only know the price, so they offer a small variation.

Pronouns and verbs are unclear: 'I only have the price' likely means 'I only know the price'. 'They have a little' is vague; specify 'they offer a small variation' or 'there is only a small difference'. Use precise verbs and objects.

× Installing the product and it also depends on price differences as well just to make groceries and the different is like half a bar probably button high and it's a big franchise of saying $10,000 difference or loan I would just.

✓ Choosing a product depends on its features and price differences; for groceries the difference might be small, but for big purchases there could be a large gap, for example $10,000, in which case I would choose the cheaper option.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. Combine ideas into coherent clauses: state that choice depends on features and price, distinguish groceries from big purchases, and give a clear example. Use parallel structure and precise quantifiers.

× Generally, yes, but not necessary.

✓ Generally, yes, but not necessarily.

Adverb 'necessary' is an adjective; the correct adverb form is 'necessarily' when modifying 'not'. Use correct adverb to modify the verb phrase.

× It has expensive products.

✓ There are expensive products.

Use 'there are' to indicate existence of expensive products. 'It has' is incorrect for general statements about a market or category.

× Sometimes they may not only for the data itself, but for otherwise experience and crystal and also the value that you poured in it and the social value that you're projecting out of yourself from holding that back.

✓ Sometimes they are not better because of the product itself, but because of the experience, craftsmanship, the value you invested in it, and the social image it projects.

Pronouns and noun phrases are confusing and ungrammatical ('not only for the data itself', 'crystal', 'holding that back'). Clarify by replacing vague pronouns with specific nouns ('experience', 'craftsmanship', 'value', 'social image') and using parallel structure. Suggestion: list reasons in parallel form and use precise vocabulary.