Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'uh', and provide specific details about your job. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I work as a barrister at Green Future Hospitality Service in Tinkune. I enjoy this job because it keeps me physically active and allows me to interact with customers regularly.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and contains repetition. Provide a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your role and responsibilities specifically.

Ejemplo: I work as a barrister and trainer, where I provide training to many students. Additionally, I handle customer communications and manage various activities related to my work.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and filler words. Try to express your feelings clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work because I enjoy the comfortable environment. Moreover, the pleasant temperature and coffee help me feel energetic and relieve stress.

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more coherent and specific.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like the place where I work because I enjoy spending time with my teachers and friends. Additionally, I conduct training sessions to help students improve their art skills, which is very satisfying.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear and structured response with linking words to explain your future plans logically and specifically.

Ejemplo: My future plan is to study in Korea for my bachelor's and master's degrees. After completing my studies, I will return to Nepal and start a small restaurant business.

× I job is a barrister, uh, in the bundle Tinkune in, uh, green future hospitality service and sector.

✓ My job is a barrister, uh, in the Bundel Tinkune in, uh, green future hospitality service sector.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I job' instead of 'My job' and 'service and sector' which should be 'service sector' as a singular noun phrase. 'My' is the correct possessive pronoun to indicate ownership of the job. Also, 'service sector' is a compound noun and should not be split with 'and'.

× I job is a barrister, uh, in the bundle Tinkune in, uh, green future hospitality service and sector.

✓ My job is a barrister, uh, in Bundel Tinkune, in the green future hospitality service sector.

The preposition 'in' is used twice awkwardly. It is better to say 'in Bundel Tinkune, in the green future hospitality service sector' to clarify location and sector properly.

× Uh, I love this job because it makes me, uh, physically active in the work and deals with the customer, uh, service.

✓ Uh, I love this job because it makes me, uh, physically active at work and involves dealing with customer service.

The phrase 'in the work' is incorrect; 'at work' is the correct expression. Also, 'deals with the customer service' is awkward; 'involves dealing with customer service' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I work in a barrister, a trainer, uh, I provide many students uh, training and also I e-mail quotes of the barrister.

✓ I work as a barrister and a trainer. I provide training to many students and also email quotes related to barrister services.

'I work in a barrister' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I work as a barrister.' Also, 'provide many students training' should be 'provide training to many students.' The phrase 'e-mail quotes of the barrister' is unclear and corrected to 'email quotes related to barrister services' for clarity.

× I carry all the activities and look out the customer and deals with them.

✓ I carry out all the activities, look after the customers, and deal with them.

The phrase 'carry all the activities' should be 'carry out all the activities.' 'Look out the customer' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'look after the customers.' Also, 'deals with them' should be 'deal with them' to agree with the subject 'I.'

× Yes, it is good place to walk because I can uh enjoy there.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because I can enjoy being there.

'Good place to walk' is incorrect; it should be 'good place to work.' Also, 'enjoy there' is awkward; 'enjoy being there' is more natural.

× I can feel very good and the temperature around there with the coffee makes me very energetic and makes me free from everything uh like stress, anxieties, etcetera.

✓ I can feel very good, and the temperature around there, along with the coffee, makes me very energetic and frees me from everything like stress and anxiety.

The phrase 'makes me free from everything uh like stress, anxieties' is awkward. 'Frees me from everything like stress and anxiety' is clearer. Also, 'anxieties' is usually uncountable, so 'anxiety' is preferred.

× Yes, I like the place where I work. I work is a barrister.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work. I work as a barrister.

'I work is a barrister' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'I work as a barrister.'

× I enjoy there with my teachers, friends and also I provide a training sessions to my students.

✓ I enjoy being there with my teachers and friends, and I also provide training sessions to my students.

'Enjoy there' should be 'enjoy being there.' 'A training sessions' is incorrect; it should be 'training sessions' without 'a' because 'sessions' is plural.

× I help many more people to draw different arts and makes them satisfied with their work.

✓ I help many people to draw different kinds of art and make them satisfied with their work.

'Many more people' is awkward; 'many people' is better. 'Draw different arts' should be 'draw different kinds of art.' 'Makes them' should be 'make them' to agree with the subject 'I.'

× My future work plan is to installed in the avoid of our country.

✓ My future work plan is to be established in the environment of our country.

'To installed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to be established' or 'to install' depending on meaning. 'Avoid' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'environment.' The sentence is unclear but corrected for grammatical accuracy.

× Uh, I will study, you know, Korea for my bachelor and the masters after completing master from there, I will, uh, return back to Nepal and do my uh, and start my small business is a restaurant.

✓ Uh, I will study in Korea for my bachelor's and master's degrees. After completing my master's there, I will return to Nepal and start my small business, which is a restaurant.

The original sentence has tense and structure issues. 'Study Korea' should be 'study in Korea.' 'Bachelor and the masters' should be 'bachelor's and master's degrees.' 'Return back' is redundant; 'return' is sufficient. 'Do my uh, and start my small business is a restaurant' is corrected to 'start my small business, which is a restaurant' for clarity and grammar.