Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (I work as a nurse) then give one or two specific supporting details (years of experience, motivation). Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g. 'hard working' → 'hard work' or 'working hard'; 'help patient' → 'help patients'). Keep to under five sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to show reason.

Ejemplo: I work as a nurse and have done so for 15 years. I chose nursing because I wanted to help people and felt it suited my personality. Because of my long experience, I am confident in caring for patients and managing common treatments.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer then add one or two specific facts. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. 'the big hospital' → 'the largest hospital'; 'most patient are referred' → 'most patients are referred'; 'a lot of apply' unclear — maybe 'many specialists' or 'many departments'). Use linking words like 'because' to connect reasons logically.

Ejemplo: I work at the main hospital in Saman, which is the largest in our city. Most patients are referred there from smaller hospitals because we have many departments and advanced equipment.

Sugerencia: Balance your opinion and be specific with examples. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. 'It has pros and cons'). Use correct expressions ('latest drugs and updated equipment') and avoid absolute negative claims like 'we cannot cure them'—instead say 'treatment is limited'. Limit to three–four sentences and use linking words such as 'however' or 'therefore'.

Ejemplo: It is a mixed situation: the hospital is busy and well-staffed, but we lack some high-quality equipment. For example, we occasionally run short of IV bags and do not always have the latest drugs, so certain treatments are delayed. Therefore many colleagues consider opportunities abroad where resources are better.

Sugerencia: Make your stance clear in one sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar ('friendly and warm', 'we enjoy each other's company, which produces'). Avoid vague sentences and be coherent—use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'. Keep within five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my workplace because my colleagues are friendly and we support each other, which creates a positive atmosphere. Although the job is stressful due to patient care responsibilities, we often relax together after shifts, which helps us cope.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear plan with chronological steps and use correct tenses. Start with a topic sentence (e.g. 'I plan to...') and then list specific steps using linking words like 'first' and 'then'. Correct phrases: 'I immigrated to London a month ago', 'I want to achieve IELTS band 7', 'I will have a job interview for a nursing position.'

Ejemplo: I plan to continue my nursing career in London. First, I want to achieve an overall IELTS band score of 7. Then I will apply for nursing registration and attend job interviews to secure a position in a hospital here.

× I've been working as a nurse for 15 years.

✓ I have been working as a nurse for 15 years.

This sentence is actually correct but needed to match formal written contraction style; no tense change required. Use present perfect continuous to indicate an action that began in the past and continues now. Suggestion: keep 'I have been working' or use the contracted form consistently in speech, but in formal responses avoid mixing contractions inconsistently.

× My major was nursing.

✓ My major was nursing.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable: 'was' correctly places the study in the past. No change required. If you want to emphasize qualification, you can say 'My major was nursing, and I trained as a nurse.'

× When I took the entrance exam I had a dream to be a nurse.

✓ When I took the entrance exam, I had a dream of becoming a nurse.

Use the noun phrase 'a dream of' and the gerund 'becoming' to indicate aspiration. 'To be a nurse' is understandable but 'dream of becoming' is more natural English. Also add a comma after the time clause.

× By hard working I could accomplish my dream.

✓ By working hard I was able to accomplish my dream.

Use the adverbial form 'working hard' rather than 'hard working' and 'was able to' (or 'could') for past ability. The correct word order is 'working hard'. 'By' + gerund expresses means.

× So I worked this major and I like to help patient and can cure them and treat them.

✓ So I studied this major, and I like to help patients and be able to treat and care for them.

Use 'studied this major' (not 'worked this major'). 'Patient' must be plural 'patients' for general statements. Use parallel verb forms: 'like to help patients and be able to treat and care for them.' Also 'cure' is used when a disease is eliminated; 'treat' and 'care for' are more general.

× I work as a nurse in the hospital.

✓ I work as a nurse in a hospital.

Use the indefinite article 'a hospital' for general workplace reference. 'The hospital' would be used if it had been previously specified. Choose articles according to specificity.

× The hospital is located in Saman and I like to recommend that our hospital is the big hospital in our city.

✓ The hospital is located in Saman, and I would say that our hospital is the biggest hospital in our city.

Replace 'like to recommend' with 'would say' for stating opinion. Use 'biggest' (superlative) for a single hospital being the largest. Add comma after the clause and 'in' is fine for location.

× So most patient are referred from other hospital to our hospital to cure them and treat them because we have a lot of apply, we have a lot of equipment so we can treat them.

✓ So most patients are referred from other hospitals to our hospital to be treated because we have a lot of staff and a lot of equipment, so we can treat them.

Use plural 'patients' and 'hospitals'. 'Referred... to be treated' is the correct passive structure. 'Apply' is incorrect; likely intended 'staff' or 'supplies'. Use commas to separate clauses.

× Actually, although I work in the biggest hospital in our city, we don't have equipment with good quality.

✓ Actually, although I work in the biggest hospital in our city, we don't have high-quality equipment.

Use adjective 'high-quality' to modify 'equipment'. 'Equipment' is uncountable so no article is needed. 'With good quality' is awkward.

× We sometimes don't have access to IV bags and also most of people don't have access the latest drugs, medicine and also update equipment.

✓ We sometimes don't have access to IV bags, and most people don't have access to the latest drugs, medicines, or up-to-date equipment.

Use 'most people' not 'most of people'. Insert 'to' after 'access'. Use plural 'medicines' and adjective 'up-to-date' to describe equipment.

× We cannot cure them.

✓ Therefore, we cannot always cure them.

Add 'always' or another qualifier because the absolute statement may be too strong; also 'therefore' connects cause and effect. Grammatically the original is correct but adding adverb clarifies meaning.

× So most of my colleagues like to work in the other countries because they have lots of equipment.

✓ So many of my colleagues like to work in other countries because those countries have lots of equipment.

Use 'many of my colleagues' or 'most of my colleagues'. Do not use 'the' before 'other countries' unless specifying. Clarify 'those countries' to refer back to other countries.

× Frankly speaking, I have a lot of colleagues, they are really friendly and warmly, we enjoy each other's company so it produce a vibrant and joyful atmosphere.

✓ Frankly speaking, I have many colleagues; they are really friendly and warm, and we enjoy each other's company, so it produces a vibrant and joyful atmosphere.

Use 'many colleagues' for count nouns. 'Warmly' is an adverb but 'warm' (adjective) describes people. Use proper punctuation and subject-verb agreement: 'it produces'.

× We have to tolerate lots of stress in our workplace because we have to cure patient and they are really important for their families, friends and we have to look after them but.

✓ We have to tolerate a lot of stress in our workplace because we have to care for patients who are very important to their families and friends, and we have to look after them.

Use 'a lot of' not 'lots of' in formal speech. 'Care for patients' is better than 'cure patient'. Use 'important to' rather than 'important for'. Remove trailing 'but' and fix sentence flow.

× We hang out with our colleagues and friends and we may make it the best decision, we believe.

✓ We hang out with our colleagues and friends, and we believe this helps us make the best decisions.

Improve sentence logic: 'make it the best decision' is unclear. Use 'helps us make the best decisions.' Ensure parallel structure and add comma.

× Since I immigrated to London a month ago, I started to pursue my education.

✓ Since I immigrated to London a month ago, I have started to pursue my education.

Use present perfect 'have started' with 'since' to indicate an action that began in the past and continues to now. 'Started' alone suggests a completed action without ongoing relevance.

× First of all, I wanted to pass my IELTS exam.

✓ First of all, I want to pass my IELTS exam.

Use present tense 'want' to express current intention or plan. 'Wanted' places desire in the past.

× I need seven degree 7° and then I had an interview.

✓ I need a band score of 7 in IELTS, and then I will have an interview.

Express IELTS requirement as 'a band score of 7'. Use future 'will have' if interview is upcoming. 'Had an interview' is past tense and conflicts with timeline.

× I I will have an interview for my job since my measure was nurse.

✓ I will have an interview for a job as a nurse because my qualification is in nursing.

Remove duplicated 'I'. Use 'a job as a nurse' and 'qualification' (or 'degree') rather than 'measure'. 'Since' is ambiguous; use 'because' to explain reason. Ensure correct noun choice.