Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 직접적인 주제문으로 간결하게 시작하세요. 불필요한 반복과 말더듬(uh, umm)을 줄이고 전공과 관심분야를 더 명확히 연결하세요. 예를 들어 한 문장으로 ‘I am a student majoring in global biomedical engineering’로 시작하고, 이어서 ‘I focus on neuroscience’ 같은 간결한 추가 설명을 덧붙이는 연습을 하세요. 또한 문장 수는 최대 3–4문장으로 유지하고, 연결어(for example, so)를 사용해 흐름을 좋게 하세요.

Ejemplo: I am a student at UH Song Gyung University, majoring in global biomedical engineering. I focus on neuroscience, particularly neural mechanisms related to behavior. For example, I have studied how neural circuits are involved in learning.

Sugerencia: 주제를 바로 말한 뒤 구체적인 정보(회사 역할, 내가 하는 일)를 추가하세요. 문법적 오류(‘a a’, ‘which research about’)를 고치고 동사의 형태를 정확히 사용하세요. 연결어(also, specifically)를 이용해 조직적으로 설명하세요. 예: ‘I work at a medical company that researches autism spectrum disorder. There I…’ 형태로 말하기 연습을 하세요.

Ejemplo: I work at a medical company that researches autism spectrum disorder. There, I assist with data analysis and experimental design to improve diagnostic methods. Specifically, I help process behavioral and neural data for ongoing studies.

Sugerencia: 질문에 대한 직접적인 평가(yes/no)로 시작하고, 이유를 논리적으로 제시하세요. 현재 시제와 완료 시제 사용을 정확히 하고 불필요한 발화(uh, umm)를 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘Yes, I’m satisfied because…’로 말하고 근무환경, 복지(휴가) 등 구체적 사례를 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I’m satisfied with my workplace because the working environment is pleasant and the vacation periods are generous. For instance, we have long breaks that allow me to rest and focus on research when I return.

Sugerencia: 중복되는 단어(beautiful twice)와 끊기는 말투를 없애고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 장소의 장점이 개인에게 주는 영향(스트레스 감소, 아이디어 생성 등)을 연결어(so, which helps)를 사용해 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes. The company is located in a beautiful forest, so I can take walks during breaks and relax. This peaceful setting helps me reduce stress and think more creatively.

Sugerencia: 미래 계획은 시제와 표현을 명확히 사용해 구조적으로 말하세요. ‘I plan to…’ 또는 ‘My goal is to…’로 시작하고 단계(PhD/postdoc → professor)를 순서대로 간결히 설명하세요. 또한 구체적 활동(연구 주제, 교육 계획)을 한두 가지 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다.

Ejemplo: My long-term goal is to become a university professor in neuroscience. First, I plan to complete a postdoctoral fellowship focusing on autism research, and then pursue a faculty position where I can teach and continue my research.

× I am a student at UH Song Gyung University and I am major in global biomedical engineering and I usually uh, study neuroscience.

✓ I am a student at UH Song Kyung University and I am majoring in global biomedical engineering, and I usually study neuroscience.

'major in' is acceptable but the progressive 'majoring in' is more natural when describing one's course of study. Also corrected university name spelling 'Song Kyung'. Use commas to separate clauses and remove filler words for clarity. Use present continuous 'am majoring' or simple present 'major in' consistently. Improve sentence flow by adding commas.'

× I select this umm.

✓ I chose this (program) or I selected this (program).

The student used present simple 'select' incorrectly for a past decision; use past tense 'selected' or 'chose'. If they mean a current choice, 'I have selected this' is also possible. Also add the object (e.g., 'program') for clarity.'

× I work at a a medical company which research about autism spectrum disorder and they usually do research for improving.

✓ I work at a medical company that researches autism spectrum disorders, and they usually conduct research aimed at improvements.

Use 'that' or 'which' with proper verb agreement: 'company that researches' (singular subject requires 'researches'). 'Research about' is awkward; use 'research on' or 'research into'. 'Do research for improving' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'conduct research aimed at improving' or 'to improve'. Remove duplicate 'a'.'

× Yeah, I I'm satisfied. Umm, I working at the air the yeah. Vacation period is long and enough so I've enjoyed.

✓ Yes, I'm satisfied. I work at the airline. The vacation period is long enough, so I've enjoyed it.

'I working' is missing auxiliary verb; use 'I work' or 'I am working'. 'at the air the' seems to attempt 'airline' or 'the company'; replaced with 'airline'. 'Vacation period is long and enough' is ungrammatical; 'long enough' is correct. Add object 'it' for 'I've enjoyed it'. Use contractions consistently.'

× Yes, uh, the company is located in umm, beautiful, umm, beautiful uh, forest, so I can walk around and enjoy the landscape. Yeah, it is best.

✓ The company is located in a beautiful forest, so I can walk around and enjoy the scenery. It's great.

Avoid repeating 'beautiful'. Use the article 'a' before 'beautiful forest'. 'Landscape' is acceptable but 'scenery' is more natural here. 'It is best' is vague; 'It's great' or 'It's ideal' conveys intent. Remove filler words for clarity.'

× Umm, I will go to the university and I will be a professor, and before, umm, being professor, I think I will do uh, post doctor of neuroscience and I will study autism.

✓ I plan to go to university and become a professor. Before becoming a professor, I intend to do a postdoctoral fellowship in neuroscience and study autism.

'Will' is grammatically possible but 'plan/intend' is more natural for future career intentions. 'Being professor' lacks article; use 'becoming a professor'. 'Post doctor' is incorrect; correct term is 'postdoctoral fellowship' or 'postdoc'. Use 'in neuroscience' for field. Streamline sentence and remove fillers.'