Work— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Good direct answer with clear topic sentence and specific job details. To improve, make the opening sentence more concise and correct minor grammar (use present perfect: "I have been working since 2016"), avoid redundancy ("I love to work" → "I love"), and keep to at most 4–5 sentences. Add a linking word before the reason (e.g., "because" is fine but place it more smoothly).

Ejemplo: I work as an optician in London and have been doing so since 2016. My duties include refracting patients, fitting contact lenses, and screening for medical eye conditions. I enjoy my job because when someone tries on new glasses and can see clearly, it gives me a real sense of satisfaction.

Sugerencia: The answer gives location and atmosphere but has grammatical errors and some repetition. Improve by using correct articles and possessive forms ("a small, family-owned clinic in Lund"), avoid redundant phrases (remove repeated 'like'), and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "because"). Keep to 3–4 sentences max and add a specific detail about the clinic to enrich content.

Ejemplo: I work at a small, family-owned clinic in Lund with three colleagues and my manager. Because we’re a small team, the atmosphere is friendly and supportive, which makes coming to work enjoyable. For example, we often share clinical tips during breaks.

Sugerencia: Strong direct answer and reasons given. To improve, correct small grammar issues ("I can set my own hours and change my schedule"), use a linking phrase to contrast ideas more clearly (e.g., "despite having a lot of responsibility, "). Add one specific example of how colleagues help to make content more concrete.

Ejemplo: Yes, it’s a good place to work. Despite being the only optician there and having substantial responsibility, our team maintains a steady workflow and we always support one another. For instance, a colleague covers appointments when I need to handle an emergency, and I can also set my own hours.

Sugerencia: Clear opinion and specific physical detail, but some awkward phrasing and minor redundancy. Improve by tightening language ("the air humidity is low, which dries out my skin and eyes"), avoid tentative language like "might be" when confident, and use a linking word to contrast positive and negative points (e.g., "however"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my workplace; it’s bright and has been recently renovated. However, the air is quite dry, which often irritates my skin and eyes. Fortunately, we keep eye drops on hand, so that helps alleviate the problem.

Sugerencia: Good clear ambition and mention of specific requirements, but contains grammar errors and informal phrasing. Improve by correcting articles and verb choices ("work in Scotland" not "the Scotland"; "I need to sit some exams and register with the GOC"), use linking words to show sequence ("first... then..."), and be concise. Add one concrete step or timeline to make the plan more specific.

Ejemplo: I hope to work in Scotland as an optician. First, I need to sit a few language and professional exams and register with the General Optical Council, and then I plan to apply for positions there next year. If all goes well, I expect to relocate within 12 months.

× So I'm currently working as an optician in London, have been since 2016.

✓ So I'm currently working as an optician in London; I have been since 2016.

This sentence omitted the subject 'I' before 'have been'. The clause 'have been since 2016' requires the subject and auxiliary to form the present perfect ('I have been'). Adding 'I' clarifies the subject and makes the tense correct. Suggestion: include the subject before perfect auxiliaries (e.g., 'I have been').

× I work in the small family owned clinic in Lund.

✓ I work in a small family-owned clinic in Lund.

Use of the definite article 'the' implies a specific known clinic; 'a' is more appropriate here unless the clinic is already defined. Also 'family owned' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before the noun: 'family-owned'. Suggestion: use 'a' for general mention and hyphenate compound adjectives ('family-owned clinic').

× It consists of me and my 3 colleagues including my boss.

✓ It consists of me and my three colleagues, including my boss.

Numbers under ten are typically written as words in formal writing; also add a comma before 'including' for clarity. The structure 'consists of me and my colleagues' is acceptable but awkward; consider 'The staff consists of me and three colleagues' or 'There are four staff members: me and three colleagues'. Suggestion: write small numbers as words and punctuate subordinating phrases for clarity.

× I enjoy the family and the friendly atmosphere that we have and I like to see my colleagues and know that I like working.

✓ I enjoy the friendly, family atmosphere we have, and I like seeing my colleagues because it makes me enjoy working.

Original sentence repeats 'like' and is awkward. Reword to avoid repetition and improve flow. Also use gerund 'seeing' after 'like'. Suggestion: use concise structure and gerunds for repeated actions ('I like seeing...').

× I also can set my own hours and change the work scheme as I want to.

✓ I can also set my own hours and change the work schedule as I want to.

Place adverb 'also' after the auxiliary verb 'can' or after the subject: 'I can also...'. 'Work scheme' is awkward; 'work schedule' is more natural. Suggestion: position adverbs correctly and use natural collocations ('work schedule').

× Yes, I do like the place where I work. It's a bright and freshly renovated store.

✓ Yes, I do like the place where I work. It's a bright, newly renovated shop.

'Freshly renovated' is uncommon; 'newly renovated' or 'recently renovated' is preferred. 'Store' is fine but 'shop' is more natural in British English. Use comma between coordinate adjectives 'bright' and 'newly renovated'. Suggestion: prefer collocations 'newly renovated' and appropriate regional vocabulary ('shop').

× the air humidity is not that good and it dries your skin out and your eyes out.

✓ the air humidity is not very good and it dries out your skin and your eyes.

Use 'not very' instead of 'not that' for more natural phrasing. Place 'out' after the verb phrase once ('dries out your skin and your eyes'), not twice. Suggestion: keep parallel objects together and avoid duplicate particles.

× I would love to be able to work in the Scotland as an optician but before I can do that I have some grammar tests that I need to proceed with and also the GOC.

✓ I would love to be able to work in Scotland as an optician, but before I can do that I have some grammar tests to complete and also the GOC registration.

Do not use 'the' before country names like 'Scotland'. 'Proceed with' is incorrect here; use 'complete' or 'take' for tests. Clarify 'GOC' by adding 'registration' if intended. Suggestion: omit 'the' before country names and use correct verbs for exams ('take/complete tests').

× But if everything works smoothly then hopefully I will be able to achieve my dreams.

✓ If everything goes smoothly, I will hopefully be able to achieve my goals.

'Works smoothly' is acceptable but 'goes smoothly' is more natural. 'Hopefully' is better placed before the verb phrase or after the subject; keep phrasing concise. 'Dreams' can be replaced with 'goals' for a professional context. Suggestion: prefer 'goes smoothly' and place adverbs for clarity.