Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct small factual/language slips. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'which is the capital of the Philippines' is unnecessary if the examiner knows Manila). Use correct prepositions: say 'east of Manila' and 'to the south of Antipolo'.

Ejemplo: I come from Antipolo City in the Philippines. It lies east of Manila and borders Laguna de Bay to the south, and the area is mostly mountainous, which makes it popular for scenic views.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear topic sentence and then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'establishments' plural; 'necessary for daily life'). Avoid vague phrases like 'all kinds of transportation' — give an example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I like Antipolo because it feels very safe and community-oriented. In addition, it is convenient: there are buses and jeepneys to get into Manila, and essential facilities like malls, churches, and hospitals are all nearby.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence giving the time, then briefly explain key periods using linking words like 'from' and 'until'. Make the timeline clearer and more natural by smoothing the phrasing (e.g., 'from high school until after I graduated, when I also worked there'). Keep it to one or two sentences.

Ejemplo: I have lived in Antipolo for about 20 years, from my high school years until after I graduated, when I stayed there to work for some time.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give two distinct, specific reasons using linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'provide part-time work' or 'part-time jobs' and 'young people who want to study while working'). Be slightly more precise about opportunities available to young people to strengthen content.

Ejemplo: Yes — it is. For example, there are many leisure options like food courts and shopping malls that young people enjoy. In addition, the city offers all levels of education from elementary to college and plenty of part-time job opportunities for students who want to study while working.

× My hometown is in Antipolo City in the Philippines. It is located on the east of Manila, which is the capital of the Philippines, and on the southern part of Antipolo is the Laguna de Bay which is the largest river in the Philippines. My hometown is composed of mountainous regions.

✓ My hometown is Antipolo City in the Philippines. It is located east of Manila, which is the capital of the Philippines, and to the south of Antipolo is Laguna de Bay, which is the largest lake in the Philippines. My hometown consists of mountainous regions.

Errors: incorrect prepositions 'on the east of' and 'on the southern part of' should be 'east of' and 'to the south of' for correct spatial relationships. 'Composed of' is grammatical but 'consists of' is more natural for describing features. Also 'Laguna de Bay' is a lake, not a river, so corrected noun to 'lake'. Suggestion: use 'east of' and 'to the south of' for location, use 'consists of' for describing components, and verify geographic noun accuracy.

× What I like about my hometown is it is one of the safest cities in Manila.

✓ What I like about my hometown is that it is one of the safest cities near Manila.

Error: sentence needs a conjunction 'that' to connect the noun clause after 'is'. Also 'in Manila' is misleading because Antipolo is near Manila rather than inside it; 'near Manila' is clearer. Suggestion: add 'that' when using 'What I like about...' to introduce a clause and choose correct prepositional phrase for location.

× It is also convenient because of the availability of all kinds of transportation and most of the important establishment necessary for daily living such as malls, churches and hospitals are available.

✓ It is also convenient because of the availability of all kinds of transportation, and most of the important establishments necessary for daily living, such as malls, churches, and hospitals, are available.

Errors: 'establishment' should be plural 'establishments' to match 'most of the'. Commas improve readability. Suggestion: ensure count nouns agree with quantifiers ('most of the' requires plural noun) and use commas to separate clauses and items in a list.

× I have lived there for 20 years, since I was in high school up to the time after I graduated and was also working there.

✓ I lived there for 20 years, from high school until after I graduated, when I was also working there.

Error: tense mismatch and awkward phrasing. If the period is completed, use simple past 'lived' rather than present perfect 'have lived'. 'Since' with a point in time would typically pair with present perfect if still happening; here the action ended, so 'from...until' is clearer. Suggestion: choose past tense for completed periods and rephrase for clarity: 'from X until Y'.

× Yes, I think so because there are establishments available for young people such as food courts and malls.

✓ Yes, I think so, because there are establishments for young people, such as food courts and malls.

Error: 'available for young people' is redundant when you already say 'there are establishments for young people'. Removing 'available' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: simplify prepositional phrases and avoid redundancy.

× All levels of education are also available from elementary up to college and they also provide part-time works for those young people who wanted to study while working.

✓ All levels of education are available, from elementary through college, and they also provide part-time work for young people who want to study while working.

Errors: 'up to college' is better as 'through college'. 'Part-time works' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable here. Tense: 'who wanted' should be 'who want' to match general statement. Suggestion: use 'through' for ranges, use uncountable 'work' for jobs in general, and use present tense for general truths.