Hometown— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct place names consistently, and use clear present tense. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid filler words like “umm” and “actually.”

Ejemplo: My hometown is Borishal, in the northern part of Bangladesh. I’ve never visited, but I’m eager to explore its markets and rivers when I have the chance.

Sugerencia: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary (you likely meant “fair” or “festival,” not “fear”). Give a clear topic sentence about what you like and one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid hesitations.

Ejemplo: Although I haven’t visited Borishal, I’ve heard that it holds a weekly guava fair. This festival attracts many farmers and sellers, so it would be a lively place to try local fruit and meet people.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and concisely. Use a clear topic sentence stating you haven’t lived there, then give one specific contrast or reason with correct grammar. Remove hedging like “I guess.”

Ejemplo: I have never lived in Borishal; I’ve lived in Dhaka for almost my entire life. However, I’d like to stay in Borishal for a day or two to experience its rural atmosphere and local food.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”). Avoid filler words and tautology. Be more precise with language (e.g., ‘less pollution’, ‘outdoor activities’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it would be good for young people because it has lots of greenery and cleaner air. As a result, young people can enjoy outdoor activities and a healthier lifestyle away from the city’s pollution.

× Umm, my hometown is in Borishan which is actually north part of Bangladesh.

✓ Umm, my hometown is in Borishan, which is actually in the northern part of Bangladesh.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'the northern part' and 'northern' needs adjective form. Use a comma before the relative clause. Suggestion: include 'in' and change 'north' to 'northern' to show location correctly.

× I have never been there in my entire life but I would really love to explore Borishad in my future.

✓ I have never been there in my entire life, but I would really love to explore Borishan in the future.

Use of 'in my future' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'in the future'. Also 'Borishad' is likely a typo of 'Borishan'. Present perfect 'have never been' is correct. Suggestion: replace 'in my future' with 'in the future' and correct place name.

× As I have mentioned earlier that I did not visit there, I have heard, uh, fear that happens, uh, every week.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I have not visited there; I have heard that a fair happens there every week.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect words: 'did not visit there' should be 'have not visited there' to match present perfect context; 'heard, uh, fear' seems to be 'heard a fair'. Word order 'that I did not visit there' is clumsy. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences and correct 'fear' to 'fair' and reorder for clarity.

× Basically it's a weekly fair of, uh, Guava which.

✓ Basically it's a weekly guava fair.

The clause 'which' is incomplete and unnecessary. 'Weekly fair of Guava' is better expressed as 'weekly guava fair' using adjective order. Suggestion: remove 'which' and use noun phrase 'weekly guava fair'.

× I have lived in Dhaka almost my entire life and I like it here, but I really want to live there, at least for one or two days I guess.

✓ I have lived in Dhaka for almost my entire life and I like it here, but I would really like to live in Borishan for at least one or two days, I guess.

Add preposition 'for' with duration 'for almost my entire life'. 'I really want to live there' is acceptable but 'would really like to' is more natural in this context. Specify 'there' as 'Borishan' for clarity. Move 'I guess' to end and add commas.

× My hometown, umm, as far as I heard it, is full of greenery and uh, most importantly, as we cannot breathe in the, uh, hustling, bustling town, you can breathe there and it's good for young people.

✓ My hometown, as far as I have heard, is full of greenery. Most importantly, because we cannot breathe in the busy, bustling city, you can breathe there, and it's good for young people.

'As far as I heard it' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'as far as I have heard'. 'Hustling, bustling town' is awkward; 'busy, bustling city' is more natural. Sentence run-on should be split for clarity. Suggestion: use present perfect for reported information, choose appropriate adjectives, and split into two sentences.