Part 1
Examinador
Did you do puzzles in your childhood?
Candidato
Absolutely, I can say that puzzles no matter what, or except the word puzzles. I like almost all the puzzles when I was a child for I think this kind of games are were very interesting than any other things.
Examinador
When do you do puzzles, during your trip or when you feel bored?
Candidato
I prefer playing puzzles when I feel bored because, you know, I'm a boy so I don't think I am so careful people and I may not be so careful about the pieces when I play them on the trips, so I think I will play them when I feel bored at home.
Examinador
Do you like doing word puzzles or number puzzles? Which is more difficult for you?
Candidato
Well, I prefer playing the number puzzles for you know Chinese do not have very too much word puzzles and if I want to play those kind I need to use English or some other languages which may very difficult for me than the number puzzles.
Examinador
Do you think it is good for old people to do puzzles?
Candidato
Absolutely, for you know, some old people may have some problems with their memories and I think playing puzzles is a very good way to help them no matter improve their memorizing or ma make their brain run fast.
Did you do puzzles in your childhood?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,句子结构混乱,且有冗余。建议简化句子,直接回答问题,并用清晰的句子表达喜好。
Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed doing puzzles a lot when I was a child, except for word puzzles. I found most puzzles very interesting and fun to solve.
When do you do puzzles, during your trip or when you feel bored?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答较长且有些重复,表达不够简洁。建议直接回答问题,并用连词连接原因,使表达更连贯。
Ejemplo: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored at home because I might not be careful enough to handle puzzle pieces during trips.
Do you like doing word puzzles or number puzzles? Which is more difficult for you?
Puntuación: 68.0Sugerencia: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不够清晰。建议简化句子,明确表达偏好和原因,使用恰当的连接词。
Ejemplo: I prefer number puzzles because there are fewer word puzzles in Chinese. Playing word puzzles in English is more difficult for me.
Do you think it is good for old people to do puzzles?
Puntuación: 72.0Sugerencia: 回答表达了观点,但语法和用词不准确,句子结构不够清晰。建议用更准确的词汇和句式表达观点,并用连接词使句子更流畅。
Ejemplo: Absolutely. I think puzzles are beneficial for older people because they can help improve memory and keep the brain active.
× I like almost all the puzzles when I was a child for I think this kind of games are were very interesting than any other things.
✓ I liked almost all puzzles when I was a child because I thought these kinds of games were more interesting than anything else.
这里“this kind of games”应改为“these kinds of games”,因为“kind”后面接复数时用“these kinds”。“are were”时态混用,应统一为过去时“were”。“any other things”应改为“anything else”,更符合表达习惯。
× I like almost all the puzzles when I was a child for I think this kind of games are were very interesting than any other things.
✓ I liked almost all puzzles when I was a child because I thought these kinds of games were more interesting than anything else.
句中描述过去的情况,动词时态应使用过去时,“like”改为“liked”,“think”改为“thought”。
× I may not be so careful about the pieces when I play them on the trips, so I think I will play them when I feel bored at home.
✓ I might not be so careful about the pieces when I play them on trips, so I think I will play them when I feel bored at home.
表达可能性时,过去或将来情境中用“might”更合适,表示不确定性。
× I may not be so careful about the pieces when I play them on the trips, so I think I will play them when I feel bored at home.
✓ I may not be so careful about the pieces when I play them during trips, so I think I will play them when I feel bored at home.
“on the trips”应改为“during trips”,表示在旅行期间。
× Well, I prefer playing the number puzzles for you know Chinese do not have very too much word puzzles and if I want to play those kind I need to use English or some other languages which may very difficult for me than the number puzzles.
✓ Well, I prefer playing number puzzles because, you know, Chinese does not have many word puzzles, and if I want to play those kinds, I need to use English or some other languages, which may be more difficult for me than number puzzles.
“word puzzles”前应加复数形式“many word puzzles”。“those kind”应为“those kinds”。
× Well, I prefer playing the number puzzles for you know Chinese do not have very too much word puzzles and if I want to play those kind I need to use English or some other languages which may very difficult for me than the number puzzles.
✓ Well, I prefer playing number puzzles because, you know, Chinese does not have many word puzzles, and if I want to play those kinds, I need to use English or some other languages, which may be more difficult for me than number puzzles.
“very too much”是错误搭配,应改为“many”来修饰可数名词“word puzzles”。
× Well, I prefer playing the number puzzles for you know Chinese do not have very too much word puzzles and if I want to play those kind I need to use English or some other languages which may very difficult for me than the number puzzles.
✓ Well, I prefer playing number puzzles because, you know, Chinese does not have many word puzzles, and if I want to play those kinds, I need to use English or some other languages, which may be more difficult for me than number puzzles.
“for you know”应改为“because, you know,”,更符合表达逻辑。
× Absolutely, for you know, some old people may have some problems with their memories and I think playing puzzles is a very good way to help them no matter improve their memorizing or ma make their brain run fast.
✓ Absolutely, you know, some old people may have problems with their memory, and I think playing puzzles is a very good way to help them, whether to improve their memory or to make their brain work faster.
“their memories”应为“their memory”,memory不可数。句中“no matter improve their memorizing or ma make their brain run fast”结构不正确,应改为“whether to improve their memory or to make their brain work faster”。
× Absolutely, for you know, some old people may have some problems with their memories and I think playing puzzles is a very good way to help them no matter improve their memorizing or ma make their brain run fast.
✓ Absolutely, you know, some old people may have problems with their memory, and I think playing puzzles is a very good way to help them, whether to improve their memory or to make their brain work faster.
“run fast”用来形容大脑活动不合适,应改为“work faster”,更准确表达意思。