Part 1
Examinador
Do you often wear jewelry?
Candidato
I don't often wear jewelry, I only wear it when I go on a date and as an outfit.
Examinador
What type of jewelry do you like?
Candidato
Among all type of jewelry, I like the Pearl best because I enjoy the luring luster from the perils and I think peril can make a.
Examinador
Do you usually buy jewelry?
Candidato
No, I don't usually buy jewelry. I only buy jewelry on my birthday. At most one piece a year.
Examinador
Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time?
Candidato
I think the people who were same peril for a long time. That means that the jury, not only a jury, it contains a special memory.
Do you often wear jewelry?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答时应更自然流畅,避免重复表达,并且句子结构可以更完整。可以用连接词使回答更连贯。
Ejemplo: I don't often wear jewelry, but I usually put some on when I go on a date or want to complement my outfit.
What type of jewelry do you like?
Puntuación: 50.0Sugerencia: 回答不完整且有语法错误,词汇使用不准确。应完整表达观点,使用正确单词并避免拼写错误。
Ejemplo: Among all types of jewelry, I like pearls the best because I enjoy their alluring luster, which adds elegance to any outfit.
Do you usually buy jewelry?
Puntuación: 80.0Sugerencia: 回答简洁明了,但可以增加一些细节使内容更丰富,同时使用连接词使句子更流畅。
Ejemplo: No, I don't usually buy jewelry; I only purchase a piece on my birthday, so at most, I buy one piece a year.
Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time?
Puntuación: 40.0Sugerencia: 回答中有多处拼写和语法错误,表达不清晰。应使用正确词汇,完整表达观点,并用连接词使句子连贯。
Ejemplo: I think people who wear the same piece of jewelry for a long time do so because it holds special memories and sentimental value for them.
× Among all type of jewelry, I like the Pearl best because I enjoy the luring luster from the perils and I think peril can make a.
✓ Among all types of jewelry, I like the pearl best because I enjoy the luring luster from the pearls and I think pearl can make a.
这里“type”应为复数形式“types”,因为指的是多种类型的珠宝;“perils”应为“pearls”,正确拼写为“珍珠”;“pearl”前不需要冠词“the”,且应保持单数形式。
× Among all type of jewelry, I like the Pearl best because I enjoy the luring luster from the perils and I think peril can make a.
✓ Among all types of jewelry, I like the pearl best because I enjoy the alluring luster from the pearls and I think pearl can make a.
“luring”用作形容词不合适,应使用“alluring”表示“迷人的”,更符合语境。
× I think the people who were same peril for a long time.
✓ I think the people who wear the same pearl for a long time.
“were”应为“wear”,表示“佩戴”;“peril”应为“pearl”,且前面应加定冠词“the same pearl”,表示特定的珍珠。
× That means that the jury, not only a jury, it contains a special memory.
✓ That means that the jewelry, not only jewelry, contains a special memory.
“jury”应为“jewelry”,且句中不应重复使用“it”,直接用“contains”即可,避免代词重复。