Jewelry— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, 'jewelries' nên là 'jewelry' vì 'jewelry' là danh từ không đếm được. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn.

Ejemplo: I don't wear jewelry often because my skin is sensitive and it causes itching. However, I admire the bright and luxurious jewelry I see in magazines. If I get married one day, I hope to receive a diamond engagement ring.

Sugerencia: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'Pearl jewelry' nên viết thường chữ 'pearl', và 'fit so well in my cloud' có thể là lỗi đánh máy hoặc dùng từ sai. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần có liên kết logic giữa các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'to wearing' nên là 'to wear'.

Ejemplo: I especially like diamond and pearl jewelry because they have a classic and elegant style. Moreover, they are convenient to wear at different parties and events, which makes me feel more confident.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ 'scared from my parents' không đúng nghĩa, có thể bạn muốn nói 'gifted by my parents' hoặc 'given by my parents'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'love necklace' nên là 'love necklaces'.

Ejemplo: I don't usually buy jewelry now because most of my accessories were gifts from my parents. However, I especially love necklaces. One day, if I have the chance and save enough money, I want to buy a diamond necklace as a special treat for myself.

Sugerencia: Bạn nên chú ý tránh lỗi lặp từ như 'a a special person' và dùng từ chính xác hơn như 'outdated' thay vì 'out of date'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý tốt hơn.

Ejemplo: In my opinion, some people keep a piece of jewelry for a long time because it was a gift from a special person and holds precious memories. Therefore, even if it is outdated, they still wear it regularly.

× I cannot resist the jewelries in the magazine.

✓ I cannot resist the jewelry in the magazine.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelries' is incorrect. Use 'jewelry' to refer to the collection or items in general.

× They are so bright and luxury.

✓ They are so bright and luxurious.

The word 'luxury' is a noun, but here an adjective is needed to describe 'they'. The correct adjective form is 'luxurious'. Using 'luxury' as an adjective is incorrect.

× One day if I get married, I have a dream of receiving diamond engagement ring.

✓ One day if I get married, I will have a dream of receiving a diamond engagement ring.

The sentence talks about a future event, so the verb should be in the future tense 'will have'. Also, 'diamond engagement ring' needs an article 'a' before it because it is a singular countable noun.

× I especially like diamond jewellery and Pearl jewelry.

✓ I especially like diamond jewellery and pearl jewelry.

'Pearl' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'jewellery' and 'jewelry' are both correct spellings (British and American English respectively), but consistency is preferred. No plural issue here, but capitalization corrected.

× For me they have classic and elegant style.

✓ For me, they have a classic and elegant style.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'classic and elegant style' because 'style' is a singular countable noun.

× Also, it is convenient for me to wearing them in different parties and events.

✓ Also, it is convenient for me to wear them at different parties and events.

After 'to' the base form of the verb should be used, so 'wearing' should be 'wear'. Also, the correct preposition for events and parties is 'at', not 'in'.

× They fit so well in my cloud and make me feel more confident.

✓ They fit so well in my clothes and make me feel more confident.

The word 'cloud' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'clothes' which is plural. 'Cloud' is a singular noun meaning something different.

× most of my accessories are scared from my parents.

✓ most of my accessories are scared of my parents.

The correct preposition after 'scared' is 'of', not 'from'. 'Scared of' means afraid of something.

× However, I especially love necklace.

✓ However, I especially love necklaces.

'Necklace' is a singular countable noun. Since the context is general liking, the plural form 'necklaces' is more appropriate.

× One day, if I have a chance and save enough money, I want to buy a diamond necklace for myself as a special treat.

✓ One day, if I have a chance and save enough money, I will buy a diamond necklace for myself as a special treat.

The sentence talks about a future intention, so 'will buy' is more appropriate than 'want to buy' to express a definite plan.

× some people might keep a piece of jewelry for a long time because it might be a gift from a a special person and sometimes it holds special memories.

✓ some people might keep a piece of jewelry for a long time because it might be a gift from a special person and sometimes it holds special memories.

There is a repeated article 'a a' which is a typographical error. It should be only one 'a' before 'special person'.

× So even though it's out of date, they still keep wearing them as a usual.

✓ So even though it's out of date, they still keep wearing them as usual.

The phrase 'as usual' is correct; 'a usual' is incorrect because 'usual' here is an adverbial phrase, not a noun.