Flowers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: ควรใช้ประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้นและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'flower' ควรใช้คำพหูพจน์ 'flowers' และปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน เช่น บอกว่าชอบไปตลาดดอกไม้ในช่วงปิดเทอมอย่างไร

Ejemplo: Yes, I really love flowers. During my summer break, I usually spend time visiting flower markets or sometimes I go to see flowers by myself.

Sugerencia: ควรตอบตรงประเด็นและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจน เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถาม และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อขยายความ เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'flower markets'

Ejemplo: Yes, many of my friends, like Lily, love flowers. Because of that, I often have the chance to visit flower exhibitions and markets in Bangkok.

Sugerencia: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'My city has' และปรับประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น อธิบายว่ามีต้นไม้ใหญ่และสวนเล็กๆ แทนดอกไม้ เพราะการปลูกและดูแลดอกไม้ยาก

Ejemplo: There are only a few flowers in my city because big trees and small gardens usually replace them. It is hard to grow and take care of flowers here.

Sugerencia: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'my city doesn't have' และใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'so' และปรับประโยคให้กระชับและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

Ejemplo: Definitely. Since my city doesn't have many flowers, when I see beautiful or unusual flowers, I usually take photos and share them with my friends and family.

Sugerencia: ควรปรับประโยคให้ถูกต้องและชัดเจน เช่น 'It is a common tradition among elderly people in my country to send flowers.' และอธิบายเพิ่มเติมเกี่ยวกับวิธีการส่งและเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

Ejemplo: Yes, sending flowers is a common tradition among elderly people in my country. They often send flower pictures through younger people to greet their friends and make them happy.

× Yes, I really love flower.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general, not a single flower.

× I usually spend time doing my summer time or summer break with flower market and sometime going flower by myself.

✓ I usually spend my summer break visiting flower markets and sometimes going to see flowers by myself.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect prepositions. 'Doing my summer time' is incorrect; 'spend my summer break' is correct. 'With flower market' should be 'visiting flower markets'. 'Sometime going flower' is incorrect; it should be 'sometimes going to see flowers'.

× Luckily many friends in my life Lily love flowers, so I have a chance to go to many flower exhibitions in Bangkok, especially some of flower market that I said before.

✓ Luckily, many friends in my life, like Lily, love flowers, so I have a chance to go to many flower exhibitions in Bangkok, especially some of the flower markets that I mentioned before.

'Some of flower market' should be plural 'flower markets' and include the definite article 'the'. Also, adding commas improves clarity.

× My city have a few flowers because it's usually replace by big tree or some tiny garden instead of flower because it's hard to growing and take care of them.

✓ My city has a few flowers because they are usually replaced by big trees or some tiny gardens instead of flowers because it's hard to grow and take care of them.

The subject 'My city' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. 'Replace' should be in passive form 'replaced'. 'Big tree' and 'tiny garden' should be plural. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'Growing' should be 'grow'.

× Definitely, since my city don't have many flowers near all around so when I see beautiful flowers or some type of flowers that I haven't seen before, I usually take a picture and share it to my friend or my family.

✓ Definitely, since my city doesn't have many flowers all around, when I see beautiful flowers or some types of flowers that I haven't seen before, I usually take a picture and share it with my friends or my family.

'My city' is singular, so 'don't' should be 'doesn't'. 'Near all around' is awkward; 'all around' is better. 'Some type of flowers' should be 'some types of flowers'. 'Share it to' should be 'share it with'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends'.

× Yeah, sending flowers to others is common traditional in my country in elderly people.

✓ Yeah, sending flowers to others is a common tradition among elderly people in my country.

'Common traditional' is incorrect; it should be 'common tradition'. 'In elderly people' should be 'among elderly people'.

× They usually send forward pictures to say hello or good morning to their friends via teenagers, usually seen for make their friends happy.

✓ They usually send pictures to say hello or good morning to their friends through teenagers, which is usually done to make their friends happy.

'Send forward pictures' is awkward; 'send pictures' is better. 'Via teenagers' is better as 'through teenagers'. 'Usually seen for make' is incorrect; it should be 'which is usually done to make'.