Weather— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문법과 표현을 개선하세요. 예를 들어, 'Four Seasons'는 'four seasons'로 소문자로 쓰고, 'in one years'는 'in one year'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 문장을 더 간결하고 효과적으로 만드세요.

Ejemplo: My country has four distinct seasons, so I can enjoy different types of weather throughout the year.

Sugerencia: 문장 연결과 문법을 개선하여 더 자연스럽고 논리적인 답변을 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I have a lot of sweat so'는 부자연스럽고 문법적으로 틀렸습니다. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 표현하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer cold weather because I tend to sweat a lot, which makes hot summers uncomfortable for me. Also, I enjoy seeing snow.

Sugerencia: 중복된 표현을 피하고 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드세요. 'as I mentioned it before'는 불필요하며, 문법 오류도 수정해야 합니다.

Ejemplo: I prefer dry weather because wet weather often makes me feel uncomfortable. Since I sweat a lot, dry conditions suit me better.

Sugerencia: 문장을 연결하여 더 자연스럽고 유창하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 여러 짧은 문장을 하나로 합치고, 관용적인 표현을 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every morning before I go out, almost every day.

Sugerencia: 더 구체적이고 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 'make greenhouse gases' 대신 'emit greenhouse gases'가 더 적절하며, 문장 연결도 개선할 수 있습니다.

Ejemplo: In my opinion, the increased use of vehicles is a major cause of climate change because cars emit greenhouse gases, which contribute to the rise in global temperatures.

Sugerencia: 문법과 표현을 개선하고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 'my bucket list is see a lot of snow since I was kid'는 부자연스럽고 문법적으로 틀렸습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. Since there is no snow in my hometown, seeing snow has been on my bucket list since I was a child.

× My country has Four Seasons, so I can enjoy a variety of weather in one years.

✓ My country has four seasons, so I can enjoy a variety of weather in one year.

'Four Seasons' should be lowercase 'four seasons' as it is a common noun phrase, not a proper noun. 'One years' is incorrect because 'years' is plural but 'one' requires singular 'year'. The correct phrase is 'one year'.

× I prefer cold weather. This is because I have a lot of sweat so.

✓ I prefer cold weather. This is because I sweat a lot.

The phrase 'I have a lot of sweat so' is awkward and incorrect. 'Sweat' is usually used as a verb in this context. The correct expression is 'I sweat a lot'. The word 'so' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed.

× Wet weather usually makes me feel bad and as I mentioned it before, I sweat a lot so dry weather makes more comfortable.

✓ Wet weather usually makes me feel bad and, as I mentioned before, I sweat a lot so dry weather makes me more comfortable.

The phrase 'makes more comfortable' is missing the object 'me'. Also, 'as I mentioned it before' should be 'as I mentioned before' without 'it'. Adding commas improves clarity.

× Yes, I have the habit of checking forecast. I usually check it. In the morning before I have to go out. I check it almost every day.

✓ Yes, I have the habit of checking the forecast. I usually check it in the morning before I have to go out. I check it almost every day.

'Checking forecast' is missing the article 'the'. The sentence 'In the morning before I have to go out.' is a fragment and should be combined with the previous sentence for clarity.

× The cars make greenhouse gases, so it leads to global temperature increase.

✓ Cars produce greenhouse gases, so they lead to an increase in global temperature.

'The cars' is too specific; 'cars' is better here. 'It leads' is incorrect because the subject is plural; it should be 'they lead'. Also, 'global temperature increase' needs an article and preposition: 'an increase in global temperature'.

× Actually in my hometown there is no snow. Therefore my bucket list is see a lot of snow since I was kid.

✓ Actually, in my hometown there is no snow. Therefore, my bucket list is to see a lot of snow since I was a kid.

The phrase 'my bucket list is see a lot of snow' is missing the infinitive 'to'. Also, 'since I was kid' is missing the article 'a'. Adding commas after 'Actually' and 'Therefore' improves readability.