Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but a bit repetitive and contains minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your response more coherent. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use more precise vocabulary.

Ejemplo: I usually eat snacks when I need a quick energy boost without having a full meal. For example, I often snack while watching movies or hanging out with friends because it makes the experience more enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide specific examples. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and improve sentence structure.

Ejemplo: Honestly, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they can lead to various health problems. For instance, sweets can increase the risk of diabetes due to high sugar content, and salty snacks like chips may cause skin issues such as acne.

Sugerencia: Your answer is too informal and contains many fillers and repetitions. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid unnecessary hesitation sounds.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I was a picky eater and didn't always know what to eat. Therefore, snacks were a convenient way to keep my energy up and feel full between meals.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Avoid filler words and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples. Use appropriate vocabulary and linking words to make your response coherent.

Ejemplo: I enjoy eating chocolate and salty snacks like pretzel sticks. I used to eat cheap snacks frequently, but they caused acne, so now I try to avoid them. Additionally, I like ice cream as a sweet treat.

× Also I often eat snacks when I am out with my friends or maybe watching movies because I love them so much and it it makes me happy.

✓ Also I often eat snacks when I am out with my friends or maybe watching movies because I love them so much and it makes me happy.

The phrase 'it it makes me happy' contains a repeated word 'it'. Removing the duplicate 'it' corrects the sentence. This is a typographical error rather than a grammar problem, but it affects sentence clarity.

× To be honest I don't think that it's healthy for my health to eat snacks because it can cause many disease.

✓ To be honest I don't think that it's healthy for my health to eat snacks because it can cause many diseases.

The word 'disease' should be plural 'diseases' because 'many' indicates more than one. Using the plural form agrees with the quantifier 'many'.

× For example sweets they are snacks and it can cause sugar and diabetes and chips and snacks like that can cause a acne and your skin problem like it can damage your skin.

✓ For example, sweets are snacks and they can cause sugar issues and diabetes, and chips and snacks like that can cause acne and skin problems; they can damage your skin.

'Sweets' and 'chips' are plural, so the pronouns and verbs referring to them should be plural ('they are', 'they can cause'). Also, 'a acne' is incorrect because 'acne' is uncountable and does not take an article. 'Skin problem' should be plural 'skin problems' to match the context.

× When I was young I was eating a plenty of snacks, uh, because, uh, I am picky eater and I uh, never know what I want to eat so the snacks are the only solution for my energy and my uh, meals to be full.

✓ When I was young I ate plenty of snacks, uh, because, uh, I was a picky eater and I never knew what I wanted to eat so the snacks were the only solution for my energy and my meals to be full.

The past continuous 'was eating' is less appropriate here than simple past 'ate' for habitual past action. 'A plenty' is incorrect; 'plenty' does not need an article. 'I am picky eater' should be past tense 'I was a picky eater' to match the past time frame. 'Never know' should be 'never knew' for past tense consistency. 'Want' should be 'wanted' for past tense. 'Are' should be 'were' to match past tense.

× When I was young I was eating a plenty of snacks, uh, because, uh, I am picky eater and I uh, never know what I want to eat so the snacks are the only solution for my energy and my uh, meals to be full.

✓ When I was young I ate plenty of snacks, uh, because, uh, I was a picky eater and I never knew what I wanted to eat so the snacks were the only solution for my energy and my meals to be full.

'Plenty' is a quantifier that does not require an article 'a'. Using 'a plenty' is incorrect. The correct form is simply 'plenty of snacks'.

× Uh, I like to eat, uh, for at first I would say cheap because they are love of my life.

✓ Uh, I like to eat, uh, at first I would say cheap snacks because they are the love of my life.

The phrase 'for at first' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'at first' to indicate the initial preference. Also, 'cheap' alone is an adjective and needs a noun like 'snacks' to complete the meaning.

× I ate that every day before my acne.

✓ I ate them every day before I got acne.

'That' is singular and does not agree with the plural noun 'snacks'. The correct pronoun is 'them'. Also, 'before my acne' is unclear; it should be 'before I got acne' to indicate the time before the condition appeared.

× Uh, also, I like chocolate very much. Uh, I like salty sticks, ice cream to uh, sneakers and that's it.

✓ Uh, also, I like chocolate very much. Uh, I like salty sticks, ice cream, snacks, and that's it.

The phrase 'ice cream to uh, sneakers' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or misuse. 'Sneakers' is a type of shoe and does not fit here. Possibly the intended word was 'snacks'. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.