Snacks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, use correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and give one specific time or habit. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I don't usually eat snacks these days because I'm trying to follow a healthier diet. For example, I often have salads or steamed vegetables in the afternoon instead of reaching for chips. This routine helps me feel more energetic and avoid unnecessary calories.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague fragments and filler words. Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and complete sentences. Focus on one or two concise reasons why snacks can be unhealthy and, if relevant, mention exceptions.

Ejemplo: I think most snacks are unhealthy because they are often highly processed and high in sugar and salt. For example, eating sweets or crisps regularly can lead to weight gain and low energy, so it's better to choose whole fruits or nuts as healthier alternatives.

Sugerencia: Correct word choice and tense: use past tense consistently and avoid incorrect words like "cheap child." Add a short reason or memory to make it more specific and natural. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I loved chocolate and I used to eat KitKats and Oreos after school because they were my favourite treats.

Sugerencia: Describe the snack clearly and give a brief reason why you like it using correct adjectives. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrasing. Use linking words to make the sentence smoother and state whether it is healthier compared to other snacks.

Ejemplo: At the moment I like Mikado sticks, which are thin breadsticks dipped in chocolate. I prefer them because they feel lighter than a full chocolate bar and I can eat just a few without feeling too guilty.

× Usually I don't eat snacks at the moment.

✓ Usually I don't eat snacks.

The phrase 'at the moment' implies a current ongoing action and conflicts with 'usually' which refers to habitual actions. This causes a tense/usage inconsistency. Remove 'at the moment' to match the habitual present 'usually'. Suggestion: Use either 'at the moment I am not eating snacks' for a current temporary situation or 'Usually I don't eat snacks' for a habitual action.

× I rather to have a healthier diet.

✓ I would rather have a healthier diet.

The verb 'rather' requires an auxiliary such as 'would rather' when expressing preference, and it should not be followed by 'to'. Using 'would rather' + base verb is correct. Suggestion: Use 'I would rather have' or 'I prefer to have'.

× I'm very committed in have a health diet.

✓ I'm very committed to having a healthy diet.

The correct structure is 'committed to' followed by a gerund (verb + -ing). Also 'health' should be the adjective 'healthy'. Suggestion: Use 'committed to' + gerund and correct adjectives: 'committed to having a healthy diet'.

× For example I usually eat salad, vegetables and pasta.

✓ For example, I usually eat salad, vegetables, and pasta.

The sentence is generally correct in tense but needs minor punctuation and parallel list formatting. Ensure commas for clarity in lists. Suggestion: Include commas and maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× That's all.

✓ That's all.

This sentence is grammatically correct as a short closing remark. No change needed.

× Absolutely not because we are eating everyday processed food and umm snacks are one of them.

✓ Absolutely not, because we eat processed food every day and snacks are one of them.

Use simple present 'we eat' for general truths/habits rather than 'we are eating'. 'Every day' is two words when indicating frequency. Move comma after 'not' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'we eat processed food every day' for habitual actions.

× You should consider to change your diet and trying to spend uh money for uh.

✓ You should consider changing your diet and try to spend money wisely.

After 'consider' use a gerund ('consider changing'), not 'to change'. Parallel structure requires 'try' (base verb) to match 'should' advice and 'try to' or 'try + gerund'. The fragment 'spend uh money for uh' is unclear; 'spend money wisely' is a clearer collocation. Suggestion: Use 'consider changing' and parallel verbs: 'You should consider changing your diet and try to spend money wisely'.

× What is really mean in it is really important to your life.

✓ What it really means is that it is very important to your life.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing conjunctions. Use subject 'what it really means' followed by a copula 'is' and a clause 'that it is very important to your life.' Also replace 'really important' placement for clarity. Suggestion: Reorder into 'What it really means is that it is very important to your life.'

× Yes, I love chocolate since I was a cheap child and I used to eat Kit Kat snacks and also Oreo.

✓ Yes, I loved chocolate since I was a child and I used to eat Kit Kats and Oreos.

When referring to a past habit that started in childhood and continued, 'loved' or 'have loved' is better; 'since I was a child' requires present perfect ('have loved') to link past to present, but the speaker says 'did in the past', so 'loved' is acceptable. 'Cheap' is incorrect word choice—should be 'a child'. Brand snacks pluralized. Suggestion: Use 'since I was a child' and plural names 'Kit Kats' and 'Oreos'.

× Yes, I loved those snacks.

✓ Yes, I loved those snacks.

Sentence is grammatically correct for past reference. No change needed.

× Right now, I like Mikado, for example, that are like, uh, breadsticks with chocolate on them, uh, because our light, uh, and, uh, are not, uh, too much unhealthy, we can say.

✓ Right now, I like Mikado, for example, which are breadsticks with chocolate on them, because they are fairly light and not too unhealthy, I would say.

Use 'which are' rather than 'that are like' to define the product. 'Our' is incorrect pronoun; use 'they' referring to the snacks. 'Too much unhealthy' is ungrammatical; use 'too unhealthy' or 'not too unhealthy'. Add commas and reduce filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Say 'they are fairly light and not too unhealthy' or 'they are not very unhealthy'.