Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'I always am dealing' which is awkward. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to be more specific about what tasks you handle.

Ejemplo: Yes, I consider myself patient because I often handle challenging tasks at work. For instance, when dealing with difficult clients, I stay calm and communicate clearly to avoid misunderstandings.

Sugerencia: Good content and relevant example, but avoid filler words like 'And' and 'Uh' at the beginning. Use linking words to connect your ideas better and make your answer more fluent.

Ejemplo: I feel impatient when I see injustice. For example, in our country, wealthy people have more privileges than the poor, which I believe is unfair and frustrating.

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make it more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, be more specific about your feelings and actions.

Ejemplo: When I have to work on something for a long time, I stay consistent even if results are delayed. For example, during my studies, I remained patient and kept working hard despite setbacks.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good content but some sentences are unclear or awkward, like 'As it enters'. Try to use clearer expressions and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, my job requires patience because I consult patients and listen to their problems. Sometimes, when patients are uncooperative, I remain patient to develop an effective treatment plan.

Sugerencia: Good answer with clear structure and relevant details. To improve, avoid informal phrases like 'So yeah' and use linking words to make your answer more formal and coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to understand my limits. For example, I used to want things beyond my reach, but now I accept situations calmly and manage them better.

× I always am dealing with certain tasks that are difficult and overwhelming, but I keep myself calm and I make sure that the message is always conveyed without hurting.

✓ I am always dealing with certain tasks that are difficult and overwhelming, but I keep myself calm and I make sure that the message is always conveyed without hurting.

The original sentence incorrectly places the auxiliary verb 'am' after the adverb 'always'. In English, the correct order is subject + auxiliary verb + adverb + main verb in -ing form. So, 'I am always dealing' is correct instead of 'I always am dealing'. This improves the natural flow and grammatical correctness of the sentence.

× I make sure that the message is always conveyed without hurting.

✓ I make sure that the message is always conveyed without hurting anyone.

The phrase 'without hurting' is incomplete and unclear because it lacks an object. Adding 'anyone' clarifies that the message is conveyed without causing harm to people. Prepositions and their objects must be used correctly to convey clear meaning.

× And I think what makes me feel impatient would be injustice.

✓ And I think what makes me feel impatient is injustice.

The sentence uses 'would be' which is conditional and not appropriate here. The speaker is stating a fact about what causes impatience, so the simple present tense 'is' should be used. This aligns the verb tense with the present context of the statement.

× people with power and resources get to enjoy more facilities and privileges than the poor ones.

✓ people with power and resources get to enjoy more facilities and privileges than poor people.

Using 'the poor ones' is less natural and somewhat informal. Replacing it with 'poor people' is clearer and more appropriate in formal speech. Pronouns and noun phrases should be chosen to maintain clarity and formality.

× I think I have always been really consistent with my job and my studies and there were days where I would not get the results that I needed or I wanted and I had to wait longer at that moment.

✓ I think I have always been really consistent with my job and my studies, and there have been days when I did not get the results that I needed or wanted and had to wait longer at that moment.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have always been') with past simple ('there were days') and conditional ('would not get'). To maintain consistency, 'there have been days' (present perfect) fits better with 'I have always been'. Also, 'when' is more appropriate than 'where' for referring to days. The past simple 'did not get' is used for specific past events within the present perfect context.

× As it enters, my job is to provide consultation to patients and listen to their problems and come up with a solution for them with the treatment.

✓ In essence, my job is to provide consultation to patients, listen to their problems, and come up with a solution for them through treatment.

The phrase 'As it enters' is incorrect and unclear. The intended phrase is likely 'In essence' meaning 'basically'. Also, 'come up with a solution for them with the treatment' is awkward; 'through treatment' is more natural. Correct prepositions and phrases improve clarity and naturalness.

× At that point, we need to be really patient so that we can get to the treatment plan.

✓ At that point, we need to be really patient so that we can arrive at the treatment plan.

The phrase 'get to the treatment plan' is less formal and slightly awkward. 'Arrive at the treatment plan' or 'reach the treatment plan' is more appropriate in this context. Prepositions combined with verbs should be chosen carefully to convey the intended meaning clearly.