Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答时语法和表达有些不自然，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且注意时态一致。可以更直接地表达观点，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

Ejemplo: I wasn't a patient person before because I always wanted everyone, including myself, to work efficiently. However, as I grew older, I started to understand others better and try to help them if they face difficulties.

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，建议使用更简洁的句子，避免冗长，同时注意冠词和词形变化。可以用连接词使句子更流畅。

Ejemplo: I feel impatient when tasks take too much time and effort because I am efficiency-oriented. This reduces my motivation to continue, as I prefer to work quickly and effectively.

Sugerencia: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议简化句子结构，注意时态和词汇的正确使用，并且避免模糊表达。

Ejemplo: It depends on the task. If it's meaningful, I am patient and dedicated. But if I dislike it and see no value, I become impatient and unwilling to continue.

Sugerencia: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子结构混乱。建议分句表达，注意冠词和介词的使用，保持句子简洁明了。

Ejemplo: I am currently a university student and responsible for some clubs. In these roles, I need to be patient when checking others' work and kindly correct their mistakes.

Sugerencia: 回答中时态使用不当，表达重复且不够流畅。建议使用过去时描述过去的情况，简化句子并使用连接词使表达更自然。

Ejemplo: Yes, I am definitely more patient now. When I was a child, I urged everyone, including myself, to work efficiently and lacked patience. But as I grew up, I started to understand others and help them when they face problems.

× I used not to be a patient person because I would urge everyone including me to do anything efficiently.

✓ I used to not be a patient person because I would urge everyone including myself to do anything efficiently.

这里的 'used not to be' 结构不正确，正确表达是 'used to not be'，表示过去习惯性的状态。

× I used not to be a patient person because I would urge everyone including me to do anything efficiently.

✓ I used to not be a patient person because I would urge everyone including myself to do anything efficiently.

'including me' 应该用反身代词 'including myself'，因为动作影响到说话者自己。

× So I will try to think if they have some problems in working and then I will come to help them.

✓ So I try to think if they have some problems in working and then I come to help them.

这里描述的是习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时而不是将来时。

× I think it may be because I'm a efficiency oriented person, so when I encounter some situations, while it takes me a lot of time and effort to do that, I will be impatient and have no patience to do that anymore because it will reduce my efficiency.

✓ I think it may be because I'm an efficiency-oriented person, so when I encounter some situations, while it takes me a lot of time and effort to do that, I become impatient and have no patience to do that anymore because it reduces my efficiency.

'a efficiency' 应该用 'an efficiency'，因为 efficiency 以元音音素开头；'efficiency oriented' 应加连字符变成复合形容词 'efficiency-oriented'；'will be impatient' 改为一般现在时 'become impatient' 更符合语境；'will reduce' 改为一般现在时 'reduces'。

× if I'm doing something worthy a lot of time and patience and I will be patient and dedicated to that.

✓ if I'm doing something worthy of a lot of time and patience, I will be patient and dedicated to that.

'worthy a lot of time' 应为 'worthy of a lot of time'，需要介词 'of'。

× But if it's something I dislike doing and it's has no words I will be impatient and did want to do that.

✓ But if it's something I dislike doing and it has no worth, I will be impatient and don't want to do that.

'it's has' 是错误的，应该是 'it has'；'no words' 应为 'no worth' 或 'no value'；'did want' 应为 'don't want'，时态和语态错误。

× Well, I'm a student now sore in my university I always responsible for some clubs and in that daily jobs I will have to check everyone if they have the mistake and problems in their daily work.

✓ Well, I'm a student now, so in my university I am always responsible for some clubs, and in those daily jobs I have to check everyone to see if they have mistakes and problems in their daily work.

'sore' 应为 'so'；'I always responsible' 缺少动词 'am'；'that daily jobs' 应为 'those daily jobs'；'check everyone if' 应为 'check everyone to see if'。

× So it requires me to be patient and tell them what's the right thing to do.

✓ So it requires me to be patient and to tell them what the right thing to do is.

'what's the right thing to do' 语序不正确，应该是 'what the right thing to do is'。

× Yes, absolutely I am more patient than before because when I was a child I will urge everyone including me to do anything efficiently so I'm have no not enough patience.

✓ Yes, absolutely I am more patient than before because when I was a child I would urge everyone including myself to do anything efficiently, so I did not have enough patience.

'including me' 应用反身代词 'including myself'；'I will urge' 过去习惯用过去式 'would urge'；'I'm have no not enough patience' 语法混乱，应改为 'I did not have enough patience'。

× But when I grow up I begin to try to understand others and check if they have some problems and I will go to help them.

✓ But when I grew up I began to try to understand others and check if they had some problems and I would go to help them.

描述过去的动作，时态应为过去时，'grow' 改为 'grew'，'begin' 改为 'began'，'have' 改为 'had'，'will go' 改为 'would go'。