Part 1
Examinador
Are you a patient person?
Candidato
Yes, I am definitely patient person. I had played football for 12 years. To improve my skills, I had to resist very hard practices such as running more than 10 kilometers.
Examinador
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Candidato
The network which doesn't work faster makes me feel impatient. I want to start to do my assignments or study as soon as possible, but sometimes my networks doesn't work fast.
Examinador
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Candidato
I think it depends on something I have to do. For example, reading books for a long time makes me feel better because I love reading books, especially novels. But if I have to study for a long time, like 2 hours, I don't want to do that.
Examinador
Does your job require you to be patient?
Candidato
Yes, my job requires me to be patient. I am working in universal shop. I was see by colleagues and customers every time so I have to keep right attitudes. So it makes me be patient.
Examinador
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Candidato
Yes, I definitely become more patient than when I was a kid. Then I used to run around not only the park but also the house. My attitude, such as it don't let my mother calm down.
Are you a patient person?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 文法の誤り(例えば、"I am definitely patient person" は "I am definitely a patient person" が正しい)を修正し、過去形と現在完了形の使い分けに注意しましょう。また、回答は5文以内にまとめ、より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけてください。
Ejemplo: Yes, I am definitely a patient person. I have played football for 12 years, and to improve my skills, I had to endure very hard practices, such as running more than 10 kilometers.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 文法の誤り("networks doesn't" は "network doesn't" または "networks don't")を直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、冗長な部分を避け、簡潔に答えることを意識してください。
Ejemplo: Slow internet connection makes me feel impatient because I want to start my assignments or study quickly, but sometimes the network is too slow.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Puntuación: 75.0Sugerencia: 回答はよく構成されていますが、"I think it depends on something I have to do" は "it depends on what I have to do" の方が自然です。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより流暢になります。
Ejemplo: It depends on what I have to do. For example, reading books for a long time makes me feel good because I love novels. However, if I have to study for two hours, I usually feel tired and unwilling.
Does your job require you to be patient?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 文法と語彙の誤りが多いです("I am working in universal shop" は "I work in a supermarket" などに修正)。また、"I was see by colleagues" は意味が不明瞭なので、"I am seen by colleagues" に直し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。
Ejemplo: Yes, my job requires me to be patient. I work in a supermarket, and since I am always seen by colleagues and customers, I have to maintain a polite attitude, which helps me be patient.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Puntuación: 55.0Sugerencia: 文法の誤り("become" は過去形の "became" に修正)や不自然な表現("it don't let my mother calm down")を直しましょう。具体的なエピソードを簡潔に述べると良いです。
Ejemplo: Yes, I definitely became more patient than when I was a child. I used to run around the park and the house, which often made my mother worried.
× Yes, I am definitely patient person.
✓ Yes, I am definitely a patient person.
In English, singular countable nouns require an article. 'Patient person' is singular and countable, so it needs the indefinite article 'a' before it.
× I had played football for 12 years.
✓ I have played football for 12 years.
The present perfect tense 'have played' is appropriate here to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Had played' is past perfect and is used to describe an action completed before another past action, which is not the case here.
× I had to resist very hard practices such as running more than 10 kilometers.
✓ I had to endure very hard practices such as running more than 10 kilometers.
The verb 'resist' is not appropriate here; 'endure' or 'withstand' better express tolerating difficult practices. Also, 'very hard practices' is acceptable but 'hard practices' or 'intense practices' might be more natural.
× The network which doesn't work faster makes me feel impatient.
✓ The network which doesn't work fast makes me feel impatient.
The comparative 'faster' is incorrect here because there is no comparison being made. The correct adverb is 'fast' to describe the network speed.
× sometimes my networks doesn't work fast.
✓ sometimes my network doesn't work fast.
The noun 'network' should be singular to agree with the singular verb 'doesn't'. 'Networks' is plural and would require 'don't' instead of 'doesn't'.
× I want to start to do my assignments or study as soon as possible,
✓ I want to start doing my assignments or studying as soon as possible,
After 'start', the gerund form ('doing', 'studying') is more natural than the infinitive 'to do' in this context.
× I was see by colleagues and customers every time so I have to keep right attitudes.
✓ I am seen by colleagues and customers all the time, so I have to maintain the right attitude.
The passive form requires 'am seen' not 'was see'. Also, 'every time' is better expressed as 'all the time'. 'Keep right attitudes' is unnatural; 'maintain the right attitude' is more appropriate.
× So it makes me be patient.
✓ So it makes me patient.
The verb 'make' is followed by an object and a bare infinitive without 'to'. 'Make me be patient' is incorrect; 'make me patient' is correct.
× Yes, I definitely become more patient than when I was a kid.
✓ Yes, I have definitely become more patient than when I was a kid.
The present perfect tense 'have become' is appropriate to express a change from past to present. 'Become' alone is simple present and does not convey this meaning.
× My attitude, such as it don't let my mother calm down.
✓ My attitude, such as it didn't let my mother calm down.
The pronoun 'it' refers to 'attitude' which is singular, so the verb should be 'didn't' (past tense) not 'don't' (present tense). Also, the sentence is incomplete and awkward; it would be better rephrased for clarity.