Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your answer clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid sentence fragments, correct grammar (e.g., "when I need to achieve a particular task" → finish the thought), and reduce repetition. Use one or two linking words (however, sometimes) and give one specific brief example. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I am not a very patient person. However, sometimes I can wait if there is a good reason, for example when a colleague explains that a delay will improve the final result, I will wait and focus on another task.

Sugerencia: Be careful with word choice and contradictions (you said "feel very patient" but meant "impatient"). Open with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a short example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I feel impatient when I am asked to wait for a long time because I dislike uncertainty. For example, if a service centre tells me the queue will take hours, I usually leave and try another place instead.

Sugerencia: Make sentences concise and correct grammar ("the energy that I intend using" → "my energy is reduced"). Start with a clear statement of feeling, then give one concrete example with simple past tense. Use a linking word like "because" or "for example" properly.

Ejemplo: I feel exhausted when I work on something for a long time because my energy runs out. For example, once I planned to finish a project in the afternoon but after hours of waiting for information I was too tired and could not complete it.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary and remove confusion ("health of rumors" unclear). Start with a direct sentence about your job, explain why patience is needed with a specific workplace example, and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, my job requires patience because I work with patients and their families. For example, when discussing medication schedules I must listen calmly and explain slowly, since many people feel anxious if rushed.

Sugerencia: Fix contradictions and grammar. If you mean you were more patient as a child, explain why with clear reasons and one linking word (because, but). Avoid unclear phrases like "do not have enough many tax" — likely you mean fewer responsibilities. Keep it concise.

Ejemplo: No, I am less patient now than when I was a child because I had fewer responsibilities then. As I grew older my obligations increased, so I often feel rushed and less able to wait.

× Usually when I need to achieve a particular task.

✓ Usually when I need to complete a particular task, I cannot be patient.

Sentence fragment: the original lacks a main clause and so is incomplete. In Nigeria English, always ensure a dependent clause is followed by an independent clause. Combine the dependent clause with a main clause to make a full sentence.

× Other time I find myself being patient, especially when I have given I'm giving reasons to wait.

✓ Other times I find myself being patient, especially when I am given reasons to wait.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms: 'have given' and 'I'm giving' are wrong here. Use present continuous 'I am given' is passive wording or 'I am given reasons' to mean people give reasons. Also correct 'Other time' to plural 'Other times.' Use consistent tense and correct passive form.

× When I'm told to wait for something for a longer period, these tend to make me feel very patient and I tend to leave that particular thing and focus on something that would give me an urgent answer.

✓ When I'm told to wait for something for a long time, that tends to make me feel impatient, so I often leave it and focus on something that will give me a quick answer.

Incorrect preposition and word choice: 'for a longer period' is awkward; use 'for a long time.' 'These tend to make me feel very patient' contradicts meaning — should be 'impatient.' 'Urgent answer' is unnatural; use 'quick answer.' Also replace plural 'these' with singular 'that' matching 'being told' situation.

× I feel very exhausted and this is because the energy that I intend using to achieve a particular task might be reduced.

✓ I felt very exhausted because the energy I intended to use to complete a particular task was reduced.

Tense inconsistency: the question asked about past feeling 'How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?' The student mixed present and modal forms. Use past simple 'felt' and past 'intended' to describe a past example. Also correct verb patterns: 'intend to use' not 'intend using' in this context.

× For example, there was a day I intended doing something but to wait for a long time to achieve that, but before I could do that I got tired and I didn't achieve it.

✓ For example, one day I intended to do something but had to wait a long time; before I could do it I became tired and did not complete it.

Awkward structure and incorrect infinitive use: use 'intended to do' not 'intended doing.' Replace 'to wait for a long time to achieve that' with clearer 'had to wait a long time.' Use past simple consistently.

× Yes, my current job requires me to be patient because I am dealing with the health of rumors and a lot of times I find that I found out that a lot of people do not like being rushed, especially when it comes to their medication adherence.

✓ Yes, my current job requires me to be patient because I deal with patients' health, and I often find that many people do not like being rushed, especially regarding their medication adherence.

Incorrect preposition and wrong noun: 'health of rumors' is nonsensical. Use 'patients' health' or 'people's health.' Remove redundant phrases 'I find that I found out.' Use 'often' instead of 'a lot of times' for smoother English.'

× No, I am not patient now.

✓ No, I am not more patient now than before.

Incomplete comparison: question asks 'Are you more patient now than when you were a child?' Answer should compare present and past. Add 'more' and explicit comparison to match question.

× When I was a child I was more patient because I do not have enough many tax to achieve within a short period of time.

✓ When I was a child I was more patient because I did not have as many tasks to complete in a short time.

Tense and word choice errors: use past simple 'did not have.' 'Enough many tax' is wrong — use 'as many tasks.' 'Achieve' is wrong in this context; use 'complete.' Keep consistent past tense.

× But as I grew older my my obligations increased and it required me to be more patient.

✓ But as I grew older my obligations increased and that required me to be more patient.

Redundancy and agreement: remove duplicate 'my.' Use 'that required' to match singular 'increase' effect. Preposition use is fine, but sentence needed clearer subject-reference agreement.