Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar and use clearer linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix pronunciation/word choice (e.g. "concentrated", "distracted", "focus", "lose concentration").

Ejemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, when I write an article I can concentrate for hours without getting distracted, which helps me finish long tasks calmly.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence naming causes, then explain one cause with a specific consequence using linking words (e.g. "because", "so"). Avoid unfinished sentences and vague phrasing.

Ejemplo: Noisy places and stress make me impatient because they distract me and increase my anxiety, so I can't concentrate and finish tasks on time.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct statement and use contrast linkers (e.g. "however", "on the other hand"). Complete sentences and specific examples will improve clarity. Replace awkward phrases like "very hated" with "dislike" and finish ideas.

Ejemplo: It depends on the task: if I'm interested, such as reading a favorite book, I can spend hours without getting bored; however, if the task is something I dislike, I lose focus quickly.

Sugerencia: State directly that nursing requires patience, then give two concise, specific examples of tasks that need patience. Improve grammar and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, nursing requires a great deal of patience. For example, I need to calmly explain procedures to anxious patients and spend time carefully reading medical profiles to avoid mistakes.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a finished supporting detail. Use past/simple contrast (e.g. "When I was a child... Now..."). Avoid trailing off; complete the thought about what you learned.

Ejemplo: Yes, I'm more patient now. When I was a child I rarely considered other people's feelings, but now, through work and life experience, I understand others better and can stay calm in difficult situations.

× Yes, I think I'm quite patient person 'cause I can be very concentrated when I'm doing a work that I'll never feel bored, like maybe writing a passage.

✓ Yes, I think I'm quite a patient person because I can concentrate deeply when I'm doing work; I never feel bored, for example when writing a passage.

Missing article before 'patient person' and incorrect use of 'concentrated' (adjective) instead of the verb 'concentrate' or adverb phrase. 'A work' is unnatural; use 'work' or 'a piece of work'. Also replace informal '’cause' with 'because' and restructure for clarity. Suggestion: Add the article 'a' before 'patient person', use the verb 'concentrate' or the phrase 'concentrate deeply', and remove unnecessary articles before 'work'. Use 'for example' instead of 'like maybe' for clarity.

× I'm not easy to do another things and lose contract for them.

✓ I'm not easily distracted by other things and I don't lose concentration on them.

'Not easy to do another things' is ungrammatical and misuses quantifiers/determiners and word forms. Use the adverb 'easily' with 'distracted' and the noun phrase 'other things'. 'Lose contract' is a wrong collocation; the correct phrase is 'lose concentration'. Suggestion: Use 'easily' for manner, 'other things' for plural, and the verb phrase 'lose concentration'.

× If I'm too stressed, I think I'll become very anxious about the work I'm doing, so it'll make me feel like I cannot be completely the things that I need to do and also if.

✓ If I'm too stressed, I think I'll become very anxious about the work I'm doing, so I'll feel like I cannot completely do the things that I need to do.

'Anxious about' is correct but 'be completely the things' is incorrect word order and uses wrong preposition/structure. The verb 'do' is missing before 'the things', and the adverb 'completely' should modify 'do'. Remove the unfinished 'and also if.' Suggestion: Place the adverb 'completely' before the verb 'do' and include the verb to complete the meaning; eliminate incomplete clauses.

× I think it depends on what thing I'm going to do.

✓ I think it depends on what I'm going to do.

Redundant 'thing' makes the sentence awkward. The present progressive 'I'm going to do' is fine for future intention. Simplify by removing 'thing'. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary nouns that repeat the idea and keep the verb phrase.

× Maybe if I'm going to do a thing that I've very engaged in, like maybe reading a book that I'm very interested in, I think I would like to spend a lot of time without getting bored.

✓ Maybe if I'm going to do something that I'm very engaged in, like reading a book that I'm very interested in, I would like to spend a lot of time on it without getting bored.

Use 'something' instead of 'a thing'. 'I've very engaged in' is wrong: correct is 'I'm very engaged in' or 'I'm very interested in'. Add a preposition 'on it' to show spending time on the activity. Modal 'would like' fits hypothetical context. Suggestion: Use 'I'm' + adjective ('engaged') and include preposition 'in' or 'on' appropriately; replace 'a thing' with 'something'.

× But if I'm doing the thing that I'm very hated and not very interested, I think I will just lose my.

✓ But if I'm doing something that I strongly dislike and am not interested in, I think I will just lose my focus.

'I'm very hated' is wrong; 'hate' is active and should be 'I hate' or 'I strongly dislike'. Use 'am not interested in' rather than 'not very interested'. The sentence ends abruptly; supply the noun 'focus' (or 'interest'). Suggestion: Use active verbs for emotions ('I hate'/'I dislike') and complete the sentence with the object of 'lose' such as 'focus' or 'interest'.

× Yes, it's my job. My job is nursing is required a lot of patience when I'm facing different patients and also with when I'm dealing with some nursing procedure reading some profiles of the patient.

✓ Yes, it's my job. Nursing requires a lot of patience when I'm facing different patients and when I'm dealing with nursing procedures or reading patients' profiles.

Awkward repetition 'My job is nursing is required' and incorrect word order. Use simple subject-verb 'Nursing requires'. 'Reading some profiles of the patient' should be 'reading patients' profiles' (plural possessive) or 'reading the patient's profile'. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure, remove redundancies, and use correct plural possessive for 'patients' profiles'.

× So it requires a lot of time spending on looking after people.

✓ So it requires spending a lot of time looking after people.

'Time spending on' is a calque; the natural expression is 'spending a lot of time' followed by a gerund. Remove the extra preposition 'on'. Suggestion: Use 'spending a lot of time' + gerund ('looking after people').

× So in requires patience very much.

✓ So it requires a great deal of patience.

'In requires' is ungrammatical and 'patience very much' is awkward. Use the pronoun 'it' as subject and the verb 'requires' with appropriate quantifier 'a great deal of' or 'a lot of'. Suggestion: Use 'it requires' and natural quantifier phrases such as 'a great deal of' or 'a lot of'.

× Yes, definitely as because I think when I was a child, I cannot like thinking or taking care of other person thinking like maybe not feeling trying to feel what they would be feeling like.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I think when I was a child I couldn't think about or take care of other people or try to understand how they were feeling.

Mixes tenses and incorrect modal 'cannot' for past ability; should use 'couldn't'. 'Other person' should be 'other people'. 'Trying to feel what they would be feeling like' is awkward; use 'try to understand how they were feeling'. Suggestion: Use past tense modal 'couldn't' to express inability in the past, plural 'people', and clearer verb phrases like 'try to understand'.

× So and now I learn a lot about how to.

✓ And now I have learned a lot about how to do that.

Sentence is incomplete and tense is inconsistent. Use present perfect 'have learned' to indicate experience up to now and complete the clause with the object 'do that' or 'do it'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence by specifying what was learned and use present perfect to link past learning to the present.