Patience— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Nên trả lời trực tiếp, rút gọn và mạch lạc hơn; tránh tiếng ứ ờ (filler) và lặp ý. Thêm một câu ngắn nêu lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ cụ thể. Cố gắng giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Ejemplo: Yes, I consider myself quite patient because I often prefer waiting if it leads to a better outcome. For example, I’m happy to wait for a delayed train if it means I’ll arrive safely. However, I get annoyed by long, unnecessary delays that waste my time.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (makes → make) và tránh filler. Dùng liên từ như "for example" hoặc "such as" để liệt kê minh hoạ.

Ejemplo: I usually feel impatient when delays are pointless and avoidable. For example, I get frustrated by long ads before videos and when teammates take too long to finish their part of a group assignment.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Cần hoàn chỉnh ý, tránh câu bỏ dở. Nêu rõ cảm xúc theo hai trường hợp (có lợi/không có lợi) bằng cấu trúc đối chiếu và dùng từ vựng chính xác (worth it, worthwhile). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: If a long task ultimately benefits me, I feel it was worthwhile and I’m content to keep working. However, if the outcome is meaningless or worthless, I become frustrated and lose motivation.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No plus lý do), sửa cấu trúc câu và bỏ lặp. Nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về tình huống nhóm, kèm theo liên từ để rõ mạch truyện.

Ejemplo: Yes, being a student does require patience, especially during group work. For instance, if I finish my part early, I often have to wait for classmates to complete theirs so we can finalize the project together.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp với so sánh hiện tại vs quá khứ; sửa ngữ pháp và thì (I will learn → I have learned), tránh filler. Thêm một cụ thể ngắn về việc làm thế nào bạn trở nên kiên nhẫn hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I am more patient now than as a child. I used to be selfish and expected things to go my way, but I’ve learned to be more tolerant, for example by listening to others and waiting my turn in group activities.

× Wow, yes I would say I'm a fairly patient person and I would actually prefer to wait for something.

✓ Wow, yes, I would say I'm a fairly patient person and I actually prefer to wait for something.

The phrase 'I would actually prefer' is conditional/modal; here simple present 'I actually prefer' is more natural to state a general preference. Use present tense for habitual/general facts.'

× But if something that is unnecessary in uh, it requires a long period of time that I may get annoyed.

✓ But if something unnecessary requires a long period of time, I may get annoyed.

The original has extra words and incorrect clause structure ('something that is unnecessary in uh, it requires'). Remove filler and combine clauses correctly: 'If + subject + verb' structure. Use comma before result clause for clarity.'

× Well, and usually I would say things that may makes me feel impatient or when pointless and avoidable delays that waste my time.

✓ Well, usually I would say things that may make me feel impatient, like pointless and avoidable delays that waste my time.

Subject-verb agreement: after modal 'may' the base verb 'make' should be used, not 'makes'. Also restructure sentence to remove redundant 'and' and clarify the example clause.'

× For example, uh, like an ad advertisement on uh, videos or when someone takes too long to complete an assignment in my.

✓ For example, advertisements in videos or when someone takes too long to complete an assignment in my group.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundancy 'ad advertisement'. The original ends with 'in my' incomplete phrase; complete it to 'in my group' to make sense. Use plural 'advertisements' for general examples.'

× Well, if I'm doing something for a long period of time and then if the finished result actually benefits me, then I would not.

✓ Well, if I'm doing something for a long period of time and the finished result actually benefits me, then I would not be annoyed.

The original ends abruptly 'then I would not.' Complete the idea by specifying 'be annoyed'. Use conditional structure correctly; keep present progressive in condition and 'would' in result is acceptable, but include the missing verb.'

× I would feel that the weight was worth it.

✓ I would feel that the wait was worth it.

Typo: 'weight' should be 'wait' (the period of waiting). Correct the noun to convey intended meaning.'

× But if something like that turns out and worthless to me, then.

✓ But if something like that turns out to be worthless to me, then I would be annoyed.

Original is ungrammatical: missing 'to be' and incomplete result clause. Add 'to be' and complete the sentence with a clear result. Use 'would be annoyed' to mirror conditional structure.'

× Well, I'm a student in my school actually requires me sometimes to be patient, especially when I'm in a group work and I'm waiting for everyone else to finish their assignment in the plans of the group work when I already finished mine.

✓ Well, being a student at my school sometimes requires me to be patient, especially when I'm in group work and I'm waiting for everyone else to finish their assignments when I have already finished mine.

The original has incorrect clause connections and word order. Use gerund 'Being a student' as subject, 'at my school' for preposition, plural 'assignments' for multiple people, and correct tense 'have already finished' for completed action relative to waiting.'

× Back then when I was a child, I actually was most selfish and I thought that everything was going to go my way.

✓ Back when I was a child, I was quite selfish and I thought that everything would go my way.

'Back then when' is redundant; 'Back when' is cleaner. 'Most selfish' is unnatural here; use 'quite selfish'. For reported future in the past, use 'would' instead of 'was going to' for naturalness.'

× And now, uh, that I will learn to be more patient.

✓ And now, I have learned to be more patient.

Original mixes tenses and is ungrammatical ('that I will learn'). Use present perfect 'have learned' to show change from past to present. Remove filler 'uh' and 'that'.'

× Uh, I actually wait for thing to finish.

✓ I actually wait for things to finish.

Use plural 'things' to refer to general things, not the singular 'thing'. Also include 'to' is fine: 'wait for things to finish'.'