Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免重复和语法错误。可以简洁直接表达观点，并用具体细节支持。

Ejemplo: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, when I prepare for my iOS exam, I spend several hours learning vocabulary, but I often forget half of the words the next day.

Sugerencia: 回答应更清晰，避免语法错误，且内容应更具体。可以直接回答问题并举例说明。

Ejemplo: I can't recall forgetting something very important recently, but I often forget to bring the key when I leave home, which causes inconvenience.

Sugerencia: 回答应更简洁，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更连贯。可以用更丰富的词汇描述情境。

Ejemplo: In my daily life, I need to remember to bring my keys. If I forget them, I get locked out and have to wait for my parents to come home, which is very frustrating.

Sugerencia: 回答应更流畅，避免语法错误，使用连接词使内容连贯，并具体说明方法。

Ejemplo: I used to rely on mental notes, but that wasn't effective. Now, I write important dates, like birthdays, on my calendar and circle them to remind myself.

× Actually I have really poor memory.

✓ Actually I have a really poor memory.

这里的 memory 是可数名词，表示记忆力时需要加冠词 a。

× Like I want to prepare my iOS exam so that I need to spend four or five hours to remember the vocabulary, but I can only remember 100 of it and I will forget half of it on the next day.

✓ Like I want to prepare for my iOS exam so I need to spend four or five hours remembering the vocabulary, but I can only remember 100 of them and I will forget half of them the next day.

prepare 后面需要加介词 for；spend 后面接动名词 remembering；vocabulary 是不可数名词，不能用 100 of it，改为 100 of them；on the next day 改为 the next day。

× but I can only remember 100 of it and I will forget half of it on the next day.

✓ but I can only remember 100 of them and I will forget half of them the next day.

it 指代复数词汇时应使用复数代词 them；on the next day 改为 the next day。

× Actually if I forgot something important, maybe I won't remember right now, but I actually forgot something in my day-to-day life like when I live with my parents, our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.

✓ Actually if I forget something important, maybe I won't remember it right now, but I actually forgot something in my day-to-day life. Like when I lived with my parents, our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.

条件句中用一般现在时 forget；won't remember 后面加 it；live 和 need 用过去时 lived 和 needed；door 需要被动语态 opened；forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。

× our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.

✓ our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.

door 需要被动语态 opened；forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。

× our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.

✓ our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.

door 是单数，谓语动词用 needed；forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。

× Maybe like what I just mentioned I need to remember bring the keys in my daily life and if I forget to bring that I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents back to home.

✓ Maybe like what I just mentioned, I need to remember to bring the keys in my daily life and if I forget to bring them, I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents come back home.

remember 后面接不定式 to bring；that 指代 keys 应用复数代词 them；parents back to home 改为 parents come back home。

× if I forget to bring that I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents back to home.

✓ if I forget to bring them, I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents come back home.

that 指代复数 keys 应用复数代词 them；parents back to home 改为 parents come back home。

× So that's really a headache for me every time I need to double check I bring the key or not.

✓ So that's really a headache for me every time I need to double check whether I have brought the key or not.

double check 后面接宾语从句，需用 whether 引导；bring the key 改为 have brought the key 表示完成时态。

× I take some mental notes before but I find that's not a effective way.

✓ I took some mental notes before but I find that's not an effective way.

a effective way 中 effective 以元音音素开头，冠词应为 an；时态与上下文一致，took 更合适。

× I also forget a lot.

✓ I also forget a lot of things.

forget a lot 不完整，需补充名词 things。

× So right now I write on my calendar like if they they will have a big day someone someone are important to me like their birthday I will write the circle on calendar.

✓ So right now I write on my calendar. For example, if someone important to me will have a big day like their birthday, I will circle it on the calendar.

句子结构混乱，重复词 they they 和 someone someone 需删除；are 改为 is；write the circle 改为 circle it；加上适当连接词和标点使句子通顺。