Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is enthusiastic and provides personal experience, which is good. However, it is somewhat redundant and lacks clarity at the end. Try to avoid repeating similar ideas and complete your thoughts clearly. Also, use linking words to improve coherence and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, in school, my teachers often praised my ability to remember information quickly. However, nowadays, I find that I need to use other techniques to help me remember important details.

Sugerencia: Your answer includes a relevant personal story, which is good. However, the answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to finish your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'a lot of times' and be more specific.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, in 10th grade, I forgot my hall ticket at home, which made me very upset. Fortunately, my mother brought it to me, but she also scolded me for being careless. Since then, I have been more careful about remembering important items.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant and provides specific details about your daily life. However, the sentence structure can be improved for clarity and coherence. Use linking words properly and avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'however'.

Ejemplo: Since I am no longer studying, I mainly need to remember information related to my job. For example, I have to keep track of patients' appointment times and the treatments they require. Remembering these details is essential for me to perform my duties effectively.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear, well-structured, and includes specific methods you use to remember things. To improve, try to use more formal vocabulary instead of informal phrases like 'fish head'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I use several methods to remember important things. For instance, I place sticky notes on the fridge and wardrobe as reminders. In addition, I set alarms for important events and mark my calendar to ensure I don't forget anything, since my memory is not very reliable.

× I am excellent at memorizing things.

✓ I am excellent at memorising things.

The original sentence uses the American English spelling 'memorizing'. Since the examiner used 'memorising' (British English), it is better to keep consistent spelling. The verb + -ing form 'memorising' is correct here as it follows the preposition 'at'. No grammatical error, just spelling consistency.

× I remember back in school my teachers used to tell me that I'm like a parrot, that they used to use me as the epitome of just a memorizing things.

✓ I remember back in school my teachers used to tell me that I'm like a parrot, that they used to use me as the epitome of just memorising things.

The phrase 'a memorizing things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× And then they'll tell me, oh, she will just spit it down the table and I was that good.

✓ And then they'll tell me, oh, she would just spit it out on the table and I was that good.

The phrase 'spit it down the table' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'out' for 'spit it out' and 'on' for the location 'on the table'. Also, 'will' should be 'would' to match past habitual action.

× However, now I am a bit.

✓ However, now I am a bit forgetful.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a complement after 'a bit'. Adding 'forgetful' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× there are a lot of times that I forget a majority of my important things

✓ there are many times that I forget most of my important things

'A lot of times' is acceptable but 'a majority of my important things' is awkward. 'Most of my important things' is more natural and correct quantifier usage.

× I literally forgot my hall ticket at my home and I was disheartened when I learned about it.

✓ I literally forgot my hall ticket at home and I was disheartened when I learned about it.

The phrase 'at my home' is less natural than 'at home' in this context. 'At home' is the correct prepositional phrase for being in one's residence.

× After that my mother came and she gave me the ticket and also scolded me a bit but that.

✓ After that my mother came and she gave me the ticket and also scolded me a bit, but that was okay.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but that.' It needs a complement to complete the thought. Adding 'was okay' completes the sentence logically.

× there are some information that I need to remember

✓ there is some information that I need to remember

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be used with singular verb 'is' and quantifier 'some' without plural form.

× That is what time the patient will come, what treatment has to be given.

✓ That is what time the patient will come and what treatment has to be given.

The original sentence is a fragment. Adding 'and' connects the two clauses properly.

× I have this method where I just use a lot of sticky notes and I clip them to the fridge, my wardrobe, anywhere that I can find.

✓ I have this method where I just use a lot of sticky notes and I clip them to the fridge, my wardrobe, or anywhere else that I can find.

Adding 'or' and 'else' improves clarity and correctness in listing locations.

× Besides, I set alarms for important events.

✓ Besides, I also set alarms for important events.

Adding 'also' after 'Besides' improves the flow and emphasis of the sentence.

× because I'm quite a fish head when it comes to memory.

✓ because I have quite a poor memory.

'Fish head' is an informal or unclear expression. Replacing it with 'have quite a poor memory' is clearer and grammatically correct.