Memory— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically correct, concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, correct verb forms and article use, and give one brief supporting detail. Use linking words if adding reasons.

Ejemplo: I’m not very good at memorising things. I find it difficult to remember everything, especially facts from different subjects, so I usually write notes to help me recall key points.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, well-structured short story with correct tense and smoother phrasing. Use linking words (for example, then, so) and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with specific details and a short consequence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I once left my water bottle in class. After I left, I didn’t realise until I got home, so I had no water to drink and had to go back to the school the next day to collect it.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct topic sentence followed by one or two specific examples. Use correct modal verbs and concise phrasing. Include linking words like because or so to explain why it is important.

Ejemplo: I need to remember my class schedule every day so I don’t miss lessons. For example, I set alarms and check my timetable each morning to make sure I arrive on time.

Sugerencia: Be direct and use a clear structure: state the method, then give a brief specific example and a linking word. Avoid filler words and simplify sentence endings for fluency.

Ejemplo: I use my mobile phone to remember important things. For instance, I create calendar reminders and alarms so I can see deadlines clearly and get notified on time.

× I think I don't good at memorizing things because it is hard for me to uh, memorize everything like the like the knowledge from the cross.

✓ I think I'm not good at memorizing things because it is hard for me to memorize everything, like the knowledge from class.

The original uses the verb phrase 'don't good' which is ungrammatical; an adjective should be linked with a form of be (am/is/are) or a modal (do not + adjective is incorrect). This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and auxiliary verbs. Use 'I'm not good at' to correctly combine the subject, be-verb, negative, and adjective. Also remove filler repetitions and correct 'cross' to 'class'. Suggestions: use 'I'm not good at' or 'I am bad at' and avoid unnecessary fillers and repeated words.

× When I when I in the class I when I leave the classroom, I forgot to take my bottle.

✓ When I was in the class, I forgot to take my bottle when I left the classroom.

The sentence has tense sequence and word order problems. 'When I in the class' is missing the past tense 'was'. Also mix of 'leave' (present) and 'forgot' (past) should be consistent; use 'left' to match past narration. This is a past tense issue: make verbs consistent in past tense and correct word order. Suggestion: use 'When I was in class' and 'when I left the classroom'.

× So when I come to my home I realize that I have no water to drink.

✓ So when I came home I realized that I had no water to drink.

The sentence reports a past event but uses present tense verbs 'come' and 'realize'. This is a present tense issue; narrative description should use past tense. Change to 'came' and 'realized' and use past perfect 'had' to show the state at that past time. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when telling past events.

× I too remember the schedule of the class so that I would I can I would not miss the class and ensure that I can arrive the class on time.

✓ I also remember the class schedule so that I will not miss class and can arrive on time.

Problems include unnecessary repeated modal verbs and incorrect pronoun/auxiliary placement ('would I can I would'). This is an incorrect use of pronouns/auxiliaries and sentence structure. Use 'I also' instead of 'I too', choose a single future/modal 'will' or present simple 'can' appropriately, and omit repeated words. Suggestion: simplify to 'I also remember the class schedule so that I will not miss class and can arrive on time.'

× Yeah, for me, I just put the important things on my mobile phone and so that I can see it clearly and quickly.

✓ For me, I just put important things on my mobile phone so that I can see them clearly and quickly.

The original contains redundant connectors ('and so that') and a pronoun number mismatch ('it' referring to 'important things'). The problem fits verb+ -ing/form and pronoun use: 'put' is fine but the structure 'and so that' is unnecessary. Use 'so that' alone and change 'it' to 'them' to agree in number with 'things'. Suggestion: use 'so that I can see them' and remove filler 'Yeah' if formal.