Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「I'm lack of a sense of rhythm」は「I lack a sense of rhythm」が正しいです。また、理由を明確に分けて簡潔に述べるとより自然になります。

Ejemplo: I don't like singing because I can't keep a high tone and I lack a sense of rhythm. Also, I feel nervous singing in front of many people, so I avoid karaoke with friends or colleagues.

Sugerencia: 回答が不明瞭で、意味が伝わりにくいです。文法の誤りも多く、内容を整理して簡潔に答える必要があります。例えば、過去の経験を明確に述べ、音楽の授業について具体的に説明しましょう。

Ejemplo: As far as I remember, I have taken compulsory music lessons since I was young, so I learned some basic singing skills.

Sugerencia: 回答が繰り返しや曖昧な表現を含み、文法も不正確です。話の流れを整理し、具体的な対象を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

Ejemplo: I feel hesitant to sing in front of people, but if I do, I would sing birthday songs for my nephew or cousins.

Sugerencia: 文法の誤りや繰り返しが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔で明確な表現を心がけ、理由をはっきり述べましょう。

Ejemplo: I think singing can bring happiness to people because when we feel happy or satisfied, we naturally want to sing.

× I can't keep my high tone and I'm lack of a sense of rhythm

✓ I can't keep my high tone and I lack a sense of rhythm

'I'm lack of' is incorrect because 'lack' is a verb and should not be used with 'am'. The correct form is 'I lack a sense of rhythm'.

× I have ever learned how to think, how to think.

✓ I have learned how to sing.

'Have ever learned' is incorrect in this context; 'ever' is usually used in questions or negatives. Also, 'how to think' is likely a mistake for 'how to sing'. The present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate here.

× I have an compulsory lessons about the music from an early stage

✓ I have compulsory lessons about music from an early stage

'An' should not be used before 'compulsory' because 'compulsory' starts with a consonant sound. Also, 'lessons' is plural, so 'an' is incorrect. 'The music' is better as 'music' without an article here.

× I have an, I have a hesitation to sing in front of people.

✓ I have a hesitation to sing in front of people.

The phrase 'I have an,' is incomplete and unnecessary. The correct sentence is 'I have a hesitation to sing in front of people.'

× I will sing for birthday song for the past person, for my nephew, umm, cousins and some kind of like that.

✓ I will sing a birthday song for the person, for my nephew, cousins, and others like that.

'Sing for birthday song' is incorrect; it should be 'sing a birthday song'. 'Past person' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'the person' or 'someone' is better. Also, 'some kind of like that' is awkward; 'others like that' is clearer.

× I think I'm singing, I will bring the happiness our our joy of the joy of living to people because when I we feel happy or satisfy something, we we will sing naturally.

✓ I think singing will bring happiness and the joy of living to people because when we feel happy or satisfied with something, we naturally sing.

The original sentence has repeated and incorrect pronouns ('I we', 'we we') and awkward phrasing. Correct pronouns and verb forms improve clarity and grammar.