Singing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting reasons using linking words. Fix tense and article errors and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat “really” or “singing” unnecessarily).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. For example, when I’m feeling sad I often choose a melancholy song because the lyrics resonate with me, and when I’m happy I sing upbeat songs. Overall, singing is my favorite hobby and a helpful way to relax.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear chronology and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “when,” “so,” “as a result”) and avoid filler sounds (“uh”). Be specific about what you learned and finish sentences clearly.

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was about eight years old I took singing lessons for four months. During that time I learned how to sing higher notes, how to adjust my tone for different songs, and how to use breath support from my diaphragm to improve my voice.

Sugerencia: Be emotionally clear with correct tense and smoother phrasing. Start with a direct statement, then briefly explain why and give a specific example of the song or message. Avoid awkward phrases like “in somewhere that is better.”

Ejemplo: I would love to sing for my late mother, who passed away two years ago. Even though she is gone, singing for her feels like a way to express my gratitude and love. I would choose a gentle, heartfelt song that says “thank you” and “I love you” because I miss her very much.

Sugerencia: Make your answer more coherent and specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give a concise example with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “positive white”) and repetition. Use correct verbs and word forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy. For example, when I walk down the street and hear someone singing, their energy and positive mood often lift my spirits. In that way, a singer’s enthusiasm can spread and brighten other people’s days.

× 'I really enjoy singing because first I can express my emotion to the lyric so I often sing according to my mood.'

✓ 'I really enjoy singing because first, I can express my emotions through the lyrics, so I often sing according to my mood.'

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because singing expresses various feelings. Use 'through the lyrics' instead of 'to the lyric' for correct preposition and noun form. Add a comma after 'first' and before 'so' to improve sentence flow.

× 'So if I'm feeling sad, I was singing a sad song and I feel like the lyrics understand me but really well.'

✓ 'So if I'm feeling sad, I sing a sad song and I feel like the lyrics understand me really well.'

'Was singing' is past continuous and does not match the conditional 'if I'm feeling' (present). Use present simple 'sing'. Move 'really' to correctly modify 'well' as 'really well' and remove 'but' which is unnecessary.

× 'And secondly, really singing is a way it's my hobby and it's a way for me to relieve my stress.'

✓ 'And secondly, singing is my hobby and a way for me to relieve stress.'

'Really' and the clause 'is a way it's my hobby' are redundant and ungrammatical. Simplify to 'singing is my hobby and a way for me to relieve stress.' Remove the article before 'stress' as it is uncountable here.

× 'Yes, I used to learn the technique of singing when I was around 8 years old for around 4 months.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to learn singing techniques when I was around eight years old for about four months.'

Use plural 'techniques' for multiple skills. Spell out numbers for formality and change 'around 4 months' to 'about four months.' The structure 'used to learn' is acceptable but 'learned' could also be used; here 'used to' emphasizes a past habit.

× 'But it's went really well that I learned how to sing the high pitched song and also how to correct my uh, singing tone according to the song and then how to use the uh, my abdomen to sing instead of.'

✓ 'But it went really well: I learned how to sing high-pitched songs, how to adjust my singing tone to the song, and how to use my abdomen to support my voice.'

'It's went' is ungrammatical; use 'it went'. 'High pitched' should be hyphenated as 'high-pitched' and pluralize 'songs'. 'Correct my singing tone according to the song' is better as 'adjust my singing tone to the song.' 'Use the my abdomen' incorrect article/pronoun; use 'my abdomen'. Remove trailing 'instead of' which is incomplete.

× 'I would love to sing for my late mom when she pass away two years ago.'

✓ 'I would have loved to sing for my late mom when she passed away two years ago.'

The sentence mixes conditional and past time. For a past unreal wish, use 'would have loved' and past tense 'passed.' 'When she passed away two years ago' clearly locates the event in the past.

× 'I know even she might not hear it but I know she will always hear it in somewhere that is better.'

✓ 'I know she might not be able to hear it, but I believe she will always hear it somewhere better.'

'Even she' is awkward; 'she might not be able to hear it' expresses inability. 'In somewhere' is incorrect preposition; use 'somewhere.' 'That is better' is clumsy; 'somewhere better' is idiomatic.

× 'I want to sing a song that is convey the meaning of thank you, I love you about a love to your mom because I miss her so much.'

✓ 'I want to sing a song that conveys the meaning of thank you and I love you to a mother because I miss mine so much.'

'Is convey' is ungrammatical; use 'conveys' to agree with 'a song.' Use conjunction 'and' to join 'thank you' and 'I love you.' 'About a love to your mom' is awkward; rephrase as 'to a mother' or 'to my mother.' Clarify 'I miss her so much' to 'I miss mine so much' if referring generally, or 'I miss my mother so much' for specificity.

× 'Yes, definitely. I think singing is a way to bring happiness to people.'

✓ 'Yes, definitely. I think singing is a way to bring happiness to people.'

'No correction needed.'

× 'So in when I walk around the street, I often hear people sing singing and at that time I can feel the energy and the positive white given by the people who given by the singer and I believe that this vibe has been spread to.'

✓ 'So when I walk around the street, I often hear people singing, and at that time I can feel the energy and positive vibes given by the singers, and I believe that this vibe spreads to others.'

'In when' is incorrect; use 'when.' 'Hear people sing singing' is repetitive; use 'hear people singing.' 'Positive white' is wrong word choice; use 'positive vibes.' 'Given by the people who given by the singer' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'given by the singers.' Finally, 'has been spread to' is incomplete—use 'spreads to others.'