Library— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Votre réponse est un peu redondante et manque de fluidité naturelle. Essayez de répondre directement à la question avec une phrase claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books and expanding my knowledge. Additionally, it gives me a chance to meet people who share similar interests.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse contient des hésitations et des répétitions. Pour améliorer, formulez une phrase principale claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

Ejemplo: In the library, I usually borrow history books to learn more about my country and others. This helps me deepen my understanding of different cultures.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse manque de clarté et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Répondez directement, puis expliquez avec des détails précis et utilisez des mots de liaison pour structurer votre réponse.

Ejemplo: I didn't go to a library as a child because there were none in my home country. However, after moving here, I started visiting local libraries and exploring various books to broaden my knowledge.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse est vague et contient des répétitions. Essayez de répondre directement, puis donnez des raisons spécifiques avec des exemples, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

Ejemplo: I believe many Chinese children often visit libraries because they value education and enjoy reading. This habit helps them improve their school performance and gain new knowledge.

× ...make new friends, new contacts with those who wants to get better knowledge.

✓ ...make new friends, new contacts with those who want to get better knowledge.

The verb 'wants' does not agree with the plural subject 'those'. The correct form is 'want' to match the plural subject.

× I often take some books of history and, and learn some more history of my country, of other countries and so on.

✓ I often take some books of history and learn more about the history of my country, other countries, and so on.

The phrase 'some more history' is acceptable but 'learn some more history of' is awkward. Adding 'about' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'some more history' is better than 'some more history of' for natural phrasing.

× I actually never went to a library when I was a kid because in my home country we don't have a library.

✓ I actually never went to a library when I was a kid because in my home country we didn't have a library.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb in the second clause should also be in the past tense ('didn't have') to maintain tense consistency.

× But when I grow up I I did go to the libraries here in my hometown and I often choose books that that is unnecessary for me.

✓ But when I grew up, I did go to the libraries here in my hometown and I often chose books that were unnecessary for me.

The phrase 'when I grow up' should be in past tense 'when I grew up' to match the past context. Also, 'choose' should be past tense 'chose' and 'is' should be 'were' to agree with plural 'books' and past tense.

× I often choose books that that is unnecessary for me.

✓ I often choose books that are unnecessary for me.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to plural 'books', so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× I think Chinese people like to read books because they have great, a great knowledge, a great attitude of learning new, learning new things and, and get the grades on school.

✓ I think Chinese people like to read books because they have great knowledge, a great attitude towards learning new things, and get good grades at school.

The phrase 'a great knowledge' is incorrect because 'knowledge' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'attitude of learning new' is incomplete; it should be 'attitude towards learning new things'. 'Get the grades on school' is incorrect; it should be 'get good grades at school'.