Library— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations (umm), correct grammar ("one of my best hobbies"), and limit to under five sentences. Add a brief specific detail (what you read) and a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I go to the library almost every weekend because reading is one of my favorite hobbies. I usually borrow fiction and personal-development books, which help me relax after a busy week. For example, last weekend I read a short novel that helped me unwind.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence and use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., "I studied BSE in the non-medical stream"). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words (for example, then) and finish your thought with a specific activity (e.g., solving problems or taking notes).

Ejemplo: I usually look for chemistry and physics textbooks because I studied in the non-medical stream. For example, I often borrow a physics book on mechanics and then work through example problems to understand concepts better. This helps me prepare for exams and clarify difficult topics.

Sugerencia: Use a clear topic sentence and correct phrasing ("went to the library with my father"). Avoid repeating words and fillers. Give one specific detail about what you read or how you felt, and connect sentences with linking words like "because" or "however."

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to go to the library with my father because he enjoyed reading history books. However, as a child I wasn’t very interested in the books; I mostly relaxed there and skimmed picture books. Later, I grew to enjoy reading more.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid unclear country references. Use correct grammar and give a balanced opinion with a supporting reason and example. Use linking words (for instance, because) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I think many Chinese children do visit libraries regularly because libraries in cities like Hong Kong often offer engaging children’s sections and activities. For instance, my sister-in-law’s children enjoy story time and picture books at their local library, which encourages them to read more.

× Reading is my one of best hobbies, so every weekend I love to go to the library because umm, when I read any book and I can unwind myself very easily and I feel really relaxed with that.

✓ Reading is one of my best hobbies, so every weekend I love to go to the library because when I read a book I can unwind and feel really relaxed.

The phrase 'my one of best hobbies' is incorrect article and word order; the correct idiom is 'one of my best hobbies' (article problem, ID 22). 'Any book' is too general here and 'a book' is natural. Remove unnecessary 'and' before 'I can unwind' and avoid reflexive 'myself' which is unnecessary here. Suggestions: use fixed expressions ('one of my best hobbies'), choose appropriate article ('a book'), and simplify coordinated clauses.

× So definitely umm, I go to the libraries and.

✓ So definitely, I go to the library.

Use of plural 'libraries' is acceptable but unnatural in this context; more natural is singular 'the library' when referring to the local place (article problem, ID 17). The sentence also ends incomplete; remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: keep sentence complete and use 'the library' for a habitual visit to a specific place.

× Well, from my previous studies, I was a student for the BSE non medical.

✓ Well, during my previous studies, I was a student in the BSE Non-Medical program.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect with 'my previous studies'; 'during' or 'in' is correct (ID 11). Also 'student for' should be 'student in' or 'student of' a program. Suggestion: use 'during my studies' and 'student in the BSE Non-Medical program.'

× So in the libraries, I love to find the books related to the chemistry or physics.

✓ So in the library, I like to find books related to chemistry or physics.

'In the libraries' is awkward when speaking of going to a library generally; 'in the library' or 'at the library' is better (ID 17). 'The books' is too specific; use 'books related to chemistry or physics.' Also 'love to find' -> 'like to find' is stylistic. Suggestion: use correct article/noun phrases and simpler verbs.

× And sometimes I just took took like one of the, uh, best book for the physics, like for example, umm, kinetic energy.

✓ And sometimes I would just take one of the best books on physics, for example about kinetic energy.

Repeated 'took' is an error; verb tense and form are awkward. 'Took' suggests past single event; for habitual past 'would take' or present 'I take' is clearer (ID 5). Also 'one of the best book' is singular/plural mismatch; should be 'one of the best books' (ID 1). 'For the physics' should be 'on physics.' Suggestion: correct verb form and number agreement and use 'on' for topics.

× And then I find some examples relating to that in the.

✓ Then I find some examples related to that in the book.

Sentence ends incomplete and has awkward phrasing (ID 26). 'Relating to' is acceptable but 'related to' is simpler; specify 'in the book' to complete the thought. Suggestion: finish the sentence with the object and simplify relative phrasing.

× To be honest, when I was a kid, I just went to the library with my father because my father also loves to go libraries and read some books related to history.

✓ To be honest, when I was a kid I went to the library with my father because he also loved to go to libraries and read books about history.

Mix of past and present tenses: 'was a kid' (past) should match with 'loved' rather than present 'loves' (ID 5 and 6). 'Go libraries' is incorrect; needs preposition 'to' and plural noun 'libraries' or singular 'the library' (ID 11). Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and include correct preposition 'to.'

× And but that time I I didn't find anything like funny in the library.

✓ But at that time I didn't find anything funny in the library.

Redundant conjunctions 'And but' and repeated 'I' are errors; 'at that time' is the correct time phrase (ID 12). 'Find anything like funny' is awkward; simply 'find anything funny.' Suggestion: remove redundant words and use concise phrasing.

× So I just went with my father and I just relax over there and I just read.

✓ So I just went with my father, relaxed there, and read.

Tense inconsistency: 'went' is past, so follow with past verbs 'relaxed' and 'read' (ID 5). 'Relax over there' uses present; change to 'relaxed there.' Also avoid repetitive 'just.' Suggestion: maintain past tense and reduce filler words.

× Well, my sister-in-law, she's living in the Hong Kong, so one of the Chinese country.

✓ Well, my sister-in-law lives in Hong Kong, which is one of the Chinese regions.

'Living in the Hong Kong' incorrectly uses 'the' before Hong Kong (ID 11 and 17). 'One of the Chinese country' is grammatically wrong; 'one of the Chinese regions' or 'a place in China' is better. Suggestion: remove 'the' before place names like Hong Kong and use correct noun ('region' or 'countries') depending on meaning.

× So her kids are very enjoyed to go libraries because they found very interesting books in the library for the kids and which they are enjoying and the and they relax very well.

✓ So her children really enjoy going to libraries because they find very interesting children's books there and enjoy them, which helps them relax.

Multiple article and verb form errors: 'are very enjoyed' is passive and incorrect; should be active 'really enjoy' (ID 22 and 2). 'To go libraries' needs 'going to libraries' (ID 11). 'Found' should match tense or be present 'find' for habitual action (ID 6). 'Books in the library for the kids' is awkward; use 'children's books' or 'books for children.' Remove redundant 'and the and.' Suggestion: use present simple for habitual facts, correct verb forms, and proper noun phrases.

× So I think yes, definitely.

✓ So I think so, definitely.

This is minor: 'I think yes' is non-idiomatic; 'I think so' is natural (ID 27). Suggestion: use common collocations to sound natural.