Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect naturalness and clarity. Try to form a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair every season because I like to keep up with the latest trends and match different outfits. This way, I can stay fashionable throughout the year.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and hesitations that reduce fluency. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and express your thoughts more clearly. Also, avoid repeating words and aim for more natural phrasing.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought most of my shoes online because it is more convenient. However, buying shoes online can be tricky since my shoe size is 6.5, and sometimes the fit is not accurate.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete thoughts. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more logical.

Ejemplo: I usually don't pay much attention to the price when buying shoes. As long as I like the design and quality, I am willing to spend money on them. However, I realize I should be more careful with my spending.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly. Also, avoid vague phrases and provide specific reasons.

Ejemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes because they look better and match my daily outfits. However, I also value comfortable shoes, especially when I need to drive or go hiking, as they provide better support.

× I love buying shoes.

✓ I love buying shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct; the verb 'love' is correctly followed by the gerund 'buying'. No correction needed.

× To be honest I think at the present I buy, I would prefer to buy a pair of new shoes every season so that I can stay on train I can match different outfit with.

✓ To be honest, I think at present I buy shoes, but I would prefer to buy a pair of new shoes every season so that I can stay on trend and match different outfits.

The original sentence has multiple issues: missing commas, awkward phrasing, and incorrect expressions. 'At the present' should be 'at present'. 'Stay on train' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stay on trend'. 'Different outfit with' is incomplete; it should be 'match different outfits'. Adding 'but' improves sentence flow. Commas are needed after introductory phrases.

× Yes, uh, I think up to 90% of my shoes were bought online is more convenient.

✓ Yes, uh, I think up to 90% of my shoes were bought online because it is more convenient.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks a conjunction to connect ideas. Adding 'because' clarifies the reason. Also, 'is more convenient' refers to buying online, so it should be connected properly.

× But to be honest buy issues online can be can be tricky because my shoe size is actually 6.5.

✓ But to be honest, buying shoes online can be tricky because my shoe size is actually 6.5.

The phrase 'buy issues online' is incorrect; it should be 'buying shoes online'. The repetition 'can be can be' is an error. Adding a comma after 'to be honest' improves readability.

× I don't calculate that and I'm not that price sensitive, so as long as I like this pair of shoes, I will get it.

✓ I don't calculate that, and I'm not very price sensitive, so as long as I like a pair of shoes, I will get it.

Adding a comma before 'and' separates independent clauses. 'That price sensitive' is awkward; 'very price sensitive' is more natural. 'This pair of shoes' implies a specific pair; 'a pair of shoes' is more general and fits better here.

× Umm, I don't really care about the price. And yeah, I think I should change.

✓ Umm, I don't really care about the price. And yeah, I think I should change that.

The sentence 'I think I should change' is incomplete; adding 'that' clarifies what should be changed.

× Personally I prefer fashionable shoes because they are more good looking and they go better with my daily outfit.

✓ Personally, I prefer fashionable shoes because they are better looking and go better with my daily outfits.

'More good looking' is incorrect; the correct comparative form is 'better looking'. Also, 'daily outfit' should be plural 'daily outfits' to indicate variety. Adding a comma after 'Personally' improves clarity.

× But in the other hand, comfortable shoes are also necessary because if you drive or you are hiking you would.

✓ But on the other hand, comfortable shoes are also necessary because if you drive or go hiking, you need them.

The phrase 'in the other hand' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on the other hand'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'go hiking' and 'you need them' completes the thought and improves clarity.