Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors such as "I got" instead of "I get" and "I more of a window shop" which is incomplete. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying new shoes because I love the excitement of trying something new. However, I don't buy shoes very often, maybe once a year or every two years, as I usually just browse without purchasing.

Sugerencia: Your answer repeats the same idea twice and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid redundancy and use more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer shopping in stores to avoid accidentally buying counterfeit products. This way, I can check the quality before purchasing.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides relevant details but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I usually spend about 1,000,000 rupiah on shoes because I prefer well-known brands like Nike or Adidas. Although they are a bit more expensive, they are comfortable and durable, which makes the cost worthwhile.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and well-structured but could be improved by reducing filler words like "like" and making sentences more concise. Also, use linking words to enhance coherence.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they let me walk freely without pain. For instance, when I go shopping or travel, comfort is essential to prevent sore feet, which can ruin my mood.

× I like the feeling when I got something new and I am really excited to try it on me.

✓ I like the feeling when I get something new and I am really excited to try it on me.

The verb 'got' is the past tense, but the sentence describes a general feeling, so the present tense 'get' should be used to indicate habitual action.

× maybe once every two year.

✓ maybe once every two years.

The noun 'year' should be plural 'years' because it refers to more than one year.

× I more of a window shop.

✓ I am more of a window shopper.

The sentence lacks a verb and the noun form 'shopper' is needed to complete the expression properly.

× because it prevents me to waste money by buying the knockoff version of it.

✓ because it prevents me from wasting money by buying the knockoff version of it.

The verb 'prevent' is followed by 'from' plus gerund form, so 'prevents me to waste' is incorrect; it should be 'prevents me from wasting'.

× So because to prevent that I buy my shoes in the store.

✓ So to prevent that, I buy my shoes in the store.

The phrase 'because to prevent' is incorrect; 'because' and 'to' should not be used together here. The correct structure is 'So to prevent that'.

× I usually spend about 1,000,000 rupiah because I prefer shoes that is that has a brand well known like Nikes or Adidas because they are like comfortable and durable enough.

✓ I usually spend about 1,000,000 rupiah because I prefer shoes that are well-known brands like Nike or Adidas because they are comfortable and durable enough.

The verb 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Also, 'that has a brand well known' is awkward; 'well-known brands' is correct. 'Nikes' should be 'Nike' as it is a brand name.

× because they are like comfortable and durable enough.

✓ because they are comfortable and durable enough.

The word 'like' is unnecessary and incorrect here; it should be omitted to correctly describe the shoes.