Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "black format shoes" and "the people they suit who is made me feel well dressed". Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually do so twice a year, especially during Muslim festivals. I prefer black formal shoes because they match well with my suits and make me feel confident and comfortable.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and organize your answer logically. Use linking words to explain the situation and your opinion clearly. Avoid unnecessary fillers like "uh" and "and" repeatedly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online. One day, I saw an advertisement on Facebook for blue shoes that matched my shirt. So, I ordered them and received the shoes within two days. They were cheaper and looked good.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to speak more confidently and complete your thoughts. Use linking words like "because" and "so" properly to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating filler words like "uh".

Ejemplo: It depends on my budget. When I have enough money, I prefer to buy expensive shoes because they make me look stylish and feel comfortable. However, sometimes I choose affordable shoes to save money and avoid financial worries.

Sugerencia: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to finish your sentences and express your ideas clearly. Use linking words like "because" and "however" to explain your preferences. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like "fashion ambitions" and "make myself watchable".

Ejemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes when I attend parties or special occasions because I want to look good in front of my family and friends. However, I also wear comfortable shoes sometimes due to budget limitations.

× I tend to buy shoes 2 times in the year, especially when Muslim occasions occurred.

✓ I tend to buy shoes twice a year, especially during Muslim occasions.

The phrase '2 times in the year' is awkward; 'twice a year' is the correct plural expression. Also, 'when Muslim occasions occurred' should be 'during Muslim occasions' to indicate recurring events. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I like to wear a black format shoes with a suit and the people they suit who is made me feel well dressed and comfortable.

✓ I like to wear black formal shoes with a suit, and they make me feel well dressed and comfortable.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear phrasing. 'Format shoes' should be 'formal shoes'. 'The people they suit who is made me feel' is incorrect; it should be 'they make me feel'. This correction fixes pronoun misuse and clarifies meaning.

× One day I was calling my Facebook on my phone and I was the advertisement that showed, uh, a blue colored shoes.

✓ One day I was using Facebook on my phone and saw an advertisement showing blue colored shoes.

'I was calling my Facebook' is incorrect; 'using Facebook' is appropriate. Also, 'I was the advertisement that showed' is incorrect; it should be 'saw an advertisement showing'. The past continuous tense is corrected to simple past where appropriate.

× a blue colored shoes

✓ blue colored shoes

'Shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed. 'Blue colored shoes' is correct without 'a'.

× I need a blue color matching shoes of my shirt.

✓ I needed blue shoes that matched my shirt.

The sentence refers to a past event, so past tense 'needed' is appropriate. Also, 'a blue color matching shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'blue shoes that matched' for agreement and clarity.

× So I ordered them and uh, got them, uh, within two days and it was really, really cheaper and looking.

✓ So I ordered them and got them within two days, and they were really cheap and looked good.

'Cheaper' is comparative and needs a comparison; 'cheap' is correct here. 'Looking' is incomplete; 'looked good' completes the thought. Past tense consistency is maintained.

× Sometimes when I have enough money, I prefer expensive shoes because it, uh, uh, make me look, uh, stylish and comfortable.

✓ Sometimes when I have enough money, I prefer expensive shoes because they make me look stylish and comfortable.

'It' refers to 'shoes' which is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'make' agrees with plural subject 'they'.

× And sometimes I like affordable shoes, uh, because, uh, it helps me, uh, to save more money and, uh, I don't need to worry about my.

✓ And sometimes I like affordable shoes because they help me save money, and I don't need to worry about my expenses.

'It' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'shoes'. The sentence is incomplete; 'worry about my' needs an object, here 'expenses' is appropriate.

× Sometimes when I attend a party or during occasion, I prefer fashion ambitions because I would like to, uh, make myself watchable in front of my family members and friends.

✓ Sometimes when I attend a party or during an occasion, I prefer fashionable shoes because I would like to make myself noticeable in front of my family members and friends.

'Fashion ambitions' is incorrect; 'fashionable shoes' is correct. 'Watchable' is not appropriate; 'noticeable' or 'presentable' fits better. Also, 'during occasion' needs an article: 'during an occasion'.

× And sometimes I also use comfortable shoes because, uh, of limit, uh, limitation of budget and.

✓ And sometimes I also use comfortable shoes because of budget limitations.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Because of limit, limitation of budget and' is incorrect; 'because of budget limitations' is concise and correct.