Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant and provides reasons, but it contains some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and ensure clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform an outfit and boost my confidence. Since I am a basketball player, I buy new shoes every month to replace worn-out ones and maintain good performance.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains awkward phrasing. Avoid redundancy and incomplete ideas. Use linking words to explain your experience clearly and logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it allows me to browse a wide variety of styles and brands. For instance, last week I purchased a pair of sneakers that fit me perfectly. However, I encountered a minor issue with the shoes, but the after-sales service helped me resolve it quickly.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Avoid repetition and finish your thoughts fully. Use specific examples and linking words to make your answer coherent and informative.

Ejemplo: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the brand and style. For example, foreign brands like Nike can cost between 1000 to 2000 Chinese Yuan, while national brands made in China are usually more affordable and reasonably priced.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words and provide specific reasons or examples to support your preference.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are not only stylish but also functional. For example, when playing basketball or football, comfortable shoes help improve performance and boost confidence on the court.

× Moreover, I buy shoes every month because since I am I am a basketball player, I need to repair my shoes more frequently than other people.

✓ Moreover, I buy shoes every month because, since I am a basketball player, I need to repair my shoes more frequently than other people.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I am I am' which is a redundancy and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing the duplicate 'I am' corrects the sentence and maintains present tense consistency.

× I purchased shoes on the online shop because I can browse into a variety of styles and brands of different shoes.

✓ I purchased shoes from an online shop because I can browse a variety of styles and brands of different shoes.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to shopping platforms; 'from' is appropriate. Also, 'browse into' is incorrect; 'browse' is used without 'into' when referring to looking through items.

× For example, last week I bought a pair of sneakers which quite fit me quite perfectly.

✓ For example, last week I bought a pair of sneakers that fit me quite perfectly.

The relative pronoun 'which' is less appropriate here; 'that' is better for defining clauses. Also, the phrase 'which quite fit me quite perfectly' is awkward and redundant; simplifying to 'that fit me quite perfectly' improves clarity.

× However, there's some problem with the shoes but after sales survey.

✓ However, there was some problem with the shoes after the after-sales service.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'There's some problem' should be past tense 'there was some problem' to match the past event. 'After sales survey' is incorrect; the correct term is 'after-sales service' or 'after-sales support.' The conjunction 'but' is unnecessary here.

× if people choose to buy the foreign brand which is like Nike shoes then it can up to 1000 to CN¥2000.

✓ if people choose to buy a foreign brand like Nike, then it can cost up to CN¥1000 to CN¥2000.

The phrase 'which is like Nike shoes' is awkward; 'like Nike' is better. Also, 'it can up to' is incorrect; 'it can cost up to' is correct. The currency amount should be consistent and clear.

× However, people decide to buy a national brand which made in China then it could reasonable and the price could be reasonable and.

✓ However, if people decide to buy a national brand made in China, then it could be reasonable, and the price could be affordable.

The sentence lacks proper conjunctions and verb forms. 'Which made in China' should be 'made in China' as a reduced relative clause. 'It could reasonable' is missing the verb 'be.' The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion.

× Personally, I prefer, uh, buying comfortable shoes because, uh, the shoe is not just for, uh, outward looking.

✓ Personally, I prefer buying comfortable shoes because they are not just for outward appearance.

The pronoun 'the shoe' is singular but refers generally to shoes; 'they' is more appropriate. Also, 'outward looking' is incorrect; 'outward appearance' or 'looking' is better.

× It's also like mainly used for, uh, it's more functioning.

✓ They are also mainly used for function rather than appearance.

The pronoun 'It' is singular but should be plural 'They' to refer to shoes. 'It's more functioning' is incorrect; 'used for function' or 'functional' is correct.

× For example, they used to play, uh, basketball or football that can help them to, uh, boost their confidence or, or their.

✓ For example, people who play basketball or football need shoes that can help them boost their confidence.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'They used to play' is incorrect in this context; 'people who play' is better. The sentence ends abruptly with 'or, or their.' Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.