Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I like buying shoes" and "I often buy shoes once a month" in the same sentence. Also, correct minor errors like "re release" to "release" and use plural form "particular brands". Try to link your ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually do so about once a month. I find that shopping for new shoes helps me relax and relieve stress. I particularly like brands such as New Balance, Adidas, and Nike because of their comfort and style.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but could be more fluent and structured. Avoid filler words like "Umm" and improve grammar, for example, "I'm ready stick" should be "I usually stick". Use linking words to connect ideas, such as 'because' and 'so'. Also, clarify what you mean by "iconic apps" for better understanding.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I don't always have time to visit stores. Since I usually stick to brands like Adidas, Nike, and New Balance, I know my shoe sizes well. Therefore, I compare prices between popular shopping apps and the official websites to get the best deal.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides relevant information but has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. For example, "my preferably on buying shoes would be" should be "I prefer buying shoes that are". Also, the last sentence is unclear; try to explain why stylish shoes matter to you. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Ejemplo: I usually spend between 150 and 250 dollars on shoes. I prefer shoes that are both comfortable and stylish because I like to take photos wearing them. Stylish shoes help me look good in pictures, which is important to me.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and repetitive. Try to make it more concise and use linking words to improve flow. For example, use 'because' to explain your preference and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, consider mentioning comfort briefly to show balance.

Ejemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes because I often share photos on social media like Instagram and Facebook. I believe stylish shoes attract more attention and complement my outfits well.

× I like buying shoes and I often buy shoes once a month because I believe that shopping for new shoes can help me to relax and re release stress.

✓ I like buying shoes and I often buy shoes once a month because I believe that shopping for new shoes can help me to relax and release stress.

The phrase 're release' is incorrect; the correct verb form is 'release'. The prefix 're' is unnecessary here and causes redundancy. The verb 'release' alone correctly conveys the meaning of letting go of stress.

× And I love particular brand which is New Balance, Adidas or Nike.

✓ And I love particular brands such as New Balance, Adidas, or Nike.

The word 'particular' should be followed by a plural noun 'brands' because multiple brands are mentioned. Also, 'which is' is incorrect here; 'such as' is more appropriate to introduce examples.

× Yes, I often buy shoes online because sometimes I may not have time to go out to try the shoes.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online because sometimes I do not have time to go out to try the shoes.

The modal verb 'may' suggests possibility, but here the speaker wants to express a definite reason. Using 'do not have' is more appropriate to indicate a factual situation.

× Umm because I'm ready stick to particular shoes such as Adidas, Nike and New Balance.

✓ Umm because I usually stick to particular shoes such as Adidas, Nike, and New Balance.

The phrase 'I'm ready stick' is incorrect. It should be 'I usually stick' to express habitual action. Also, 'ready' is not the correct word here.

× So I pretty much know about the size of the shoes and I like to compare the price between the iconic apps and the original website.

✓ So I pretty much know the size of the shoes and I like to compare the prices on the iconic apps and the original website.

The phrase 'know about the size' is better expressed as 'know the size'. Also, 'compare the price between' should be 'compare the prices on' when referring to different platforms.

× I normally spend on shoes about the price range of 150 to 250 and my preferably on buying shoes would be comfortable and stylish at the same time.

✓ I normally spend about 150 to 250 on shoes and my preference when buying shoes is that they are comfortable and stylish at the same time.

The phrase 'spend on shoes about the price range' is awkward; 'spend about 150 to 250 on shoes' is clearer. 'My preferably' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'preference'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I can take lots of photos and it looks stylish on my picture.

✓ I can take lots of photos and they look stylish in my pictures.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'photos' which is plural, so 'they' is correct. Also, 'on my picture' should be 'in my pictures' to correctly describe appearance within photos.

× I prefer fashionable shoes as I often share photos on social media such as Instagram and Facebook and I believe that stylish shoes can attract more people and I often share about shoes and what kind of shoes match with my clothing.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because I often share photos on social media such as Instagram and Facebook, and I believe that stylish shoes can attract more people. I often share about shoes and what kinds of shoes match my clothing.

The sentence is a run-on with multiple 'and's. Using 'because' clarifies the reason. Also, splitting into two sentences improves readability. 'What kind of shoes match with my clothing' is better as 'what kinds of shoes match my clothing' for grammatical correctness.