Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "we can find our appropriate shoes amongst a lot of models and colors" which can be simplified. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because there are many styles and colors to choose from. I usually buy them for special occasions like ceremonies or official events.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas and by avoiding unnecessary phrases like "I can remember that once." Also, try to be more specific about your experience.

Ejemplo: Yes, I once bought shoes online, but I was disappointed because the style was different from the advertisement. Although I chose the right size, the shoes did not fit me properly.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more fluent. Avoid awkward phrasing like "I spend much more money at than casual shoes." Use linking words to organize your ideas better.

Ejemplo: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the style. For instance, I spend more on formal shoes for special occasions like weddings, while I buy casual shoes for daily use at my dental office.

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but contains many hesitations and filler words which affect fluency. Try to speak more smoothly and use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

Ejemplo: I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long hours. If they are uncomfortable, I feel tired and sometimes experience back pain at the end of the day.

× I usually find buying shoes very exciting because we can find our appropriate shoes amongst a lot of models and colors.

✓ I usually find buying shoes very exciting because we can find appropriate shoes among a lot of models and colors.

The word 'our' is unnecessary here because the sentence is general, not referring to specific shoes belonging to us. Also, 'amongst' is less common and 'among' is preferred in modern English.

× And I usually buy shoes for special occasions such as ceremony or even official.

✓ And I usually buy shoes for special occasions such as ceremonies or even official events.

The word 'ceremony' should be plural 'ceremonies' to match 'occasions' and 'official' is an adjective needing a noun, so 'official events' is correct.

× Yes Sir, I can remember that once I bought shoes online but I didn't like it because it was not the same as the style.

✓ Yes Sir, I remember that once I bought shoes online but I didn't like them because they were not the same style.

The phrase 'I can remember that once' is better as 'I remember that once' for naturalness. 'Shoes' is plural, so pronouns should be 'them' and 'they'. Also, 'not the same as the style' is awkward; 'not the same style' is better.

× It was advertised on the online shop and even though I have chosen the appropriate size, it didn't fit me well.

✓ They were advertised on the online shop and even though I chose the appropriate size, they didn't fit me well.

'Shoes' is plural, so pronouns should be 'they' and 'them'. Also, 'advertised on the online shop' is better as 'advertised on an online shop' or 'on the online shop' if specific. 'I have chosen' is present perfect, but past tense 'I chose' fits better here.

× I spend much more money at than casual shoes I wear everywhere at my dental office.

✓ I spend much more money than on casual shoes I wear everywhere at my dental office.

The phrase 'at than' is incorrect. The correct comparative structure is 'spend much more money than on casual shoes'. The preposition 'on' is needed after 'than' when comparing spending.

× I usually prefer comfortable shoes because they mostly I wear shoes for long hours and if they are not comfortable or convenient, uh, at the end of the day I feel uh, more tired, umm and uh, especially I feel the back pain.

✓ I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I mostly wear shoes for long hours and if they are not comfortable or convenient, at the end of the day I feel more tired and especially I feel back pain.

The phrase 'they mostly I wear shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'I mostly wear shoes'. Also, 'the back pain' should be 'back pain' without 'the'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.