Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid unfinished fragments. Pronounce or write complete examples (e.g., types of shoes).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I’m interested in fashion. I usually buy shoes a few times a year; for example, I buy trainers for casual days and high heels for special occasions.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and use linking words to make answer coherent. Give one specific reason and a short example of when or what you buy online. Use present perfect/simple correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I buy most of my shoes online because it’s more convenient and there are often big discounts. For example, I recently bought running shoes from a website and saved almost 30% compared with the mall.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer: start with a general statement, then give specific price ranges using correct vocabulary and numbers. Use linking words (but, however) and avoid filler words. Correct word choice (heels, not 'high yields').

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of shoes. Comfortable sports shoes usually cost a few hundred yuan, but formal shoes or high heels for events can cost over a thousand yuan.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and exaggeration. Use natural collocations (care about my appearance, match my outfit).

Ejemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes because I care about my appearance. For instance, when I go out I choose shoes that match my outfit, such as stylish boots for a dress or elegant heels for evenings.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because I'm interested in fashion so I need different types of shoes to match my everyday outfit.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because I'm interested in fashion, so I need different types of shoes to match my everyday outfits.

Use plural 'outfits' to match 'everyday' occurrences (singular/plural consistency). Also add a comma before 'so' connecting two independent clauses. Suggestion: change 'outfit' to 'outfits' when referring to daily clothes and insert a comma before 'so'.

× I saw I buy shoes a few times a year, for example high heels and.

✓ I usually buy shoes a few times a year, for example high heels and sandals.

Original sentence has incorrect structure ('I saw I buy') and an unfinished list. Replace with 'I usually buy' to express frequency and complete the example. Suggestion: use 'usually' or 'a few times a year' and provide complete examples.

× Yes, I almost every shoes was bought online because it's very convenient and it always has very big discount.

✓ Yes, almost all my shoes are bought online because it's very convenient and there are often big discounts.

Problems: word order ('I almost every shoes'), incorrect tense and passive use ('was bought'), and singular/plural mismatch with 'discount'. Correct form: 'almost all my shoes are bought online' (present simple passive) and 'there are often big discounts' for plural and frequency. Suggestion: use 'almost all my shoes' and present simple passive for habitual actions.

× It always cheaper than shopping mall so I always buy it online.

✓ They are always cheaper than in shopping malls, so I always buy them online.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'It always cheaper' lacks 'is' and 'it' should refer to 'shoes' (plural), so use 'they are' and plural pronouns. Also use 'in shopping malls' for place comparison and insert comma before 'so'. Suggestion: keep number agreement and use 'they'/'them' for 'shoes'.

× And it depends, some comfortable sports shoes for exercise is cheaper, it always about hundreds yuan and and some high yields is for events it's more expensive with about thousands yuan.

✓ It depends. Comfortable sports shoes for exercise are cheaper, usually costing a few hundred yuan, while some high heels for events are more expensive, costing about a thousand yuan.

Many issues: sentence run-on, singular/plural agreement ('shoes ... is'), awkward phrases ('high yields'), incorrect number expressions. Corrected to two clear sentences: use plural verbs 'are', replace 'high yields' with 'high heels', and use 'a few hundred'/'about a thousand' for amounts. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct vocabulary for 'high heels'.

× I prefer to fashionable shoes because I'm very care about my appearance.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because I care a lot about my appearance.

'Prefer to fashionable shoes' is incorrect; use 'prefer' + noun or 'prefer to' + verb. Also 'I'm very care' is ungrammatical; use 'I care a lot' or 'I am very concerned about'. Suggestion: use 'prefer fashionable shoes' and 'I care a lot about my appearance'.

× Almost every day I go out I will take so many hours to make up and match my feet, so I need fashionable shoes to match my outfit.

✓ Almost every day when I go out, I spend a long time doing my makeup and choosing shoes to match my outfit, so I need fashionable shoes.

Original has unnatural phrasing: 'I will take so many hours to make up and match my feet' is awkward and incorrect ('match my feet'). Use 'spend a long time doing my makeup and choosing shoes' to convey the idea. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'spend time doing' and 'choosing shoes' instead of 'match my feet'.