Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail about types of shoes or reasons, using correct number expressions. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'I love buying shoes' and 'I always buy').

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy four pairs a year, roughly one pair each quarter, because I like to update my wardrobe for different seasons.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and word choice, and use linking words for coherence. Replace awkward phrases ('is always in interesting', 'watch shoes') with accurate verbs and connect reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Be specific about what variety or features you look for.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it allows me to compare prices easily and see a wider variety of styles and sizes. For example, I can filter by brand, color and customer reviews before deciding.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar, remove fillers, and avoid repetition. State figures clearly and support them with a concise reason. Use linking words ('therefore','because') and more natural phrasing ('I budget', 'per pair', 'per year').

Ejemplo: I usually budget about $100–$150 per pair, so I spend roughly $500–$600 a year on shoes. I invest in shoes because the right pair can change an outfit and boost my confidence.

Sugerencia: Good structure and relevance. Improve fluency by removing hesitations and small errors ('an party', double 'I'). Use linking words ('however','when') and give one concise example to show preference in context.

Ejemplo: It depends on the occasion. When I attend a party or formal event I prefer stylish shoes, but for sports or jogging I choose comfortable trainers so I can move easily.

× So I can say in a year I buy a four pair of shoes.

✓ So I can say in a year I buy four pairs of shoes.

The noun 'pair' should be plural when preceded by a number greater than one. Use 'pairs' after 'four' to match plural form. Suggestion: use 'four pairs' for correct singular/plural agreement.

× Yes, online shopping is always in interesting and I watch shoes online many times in my life because I can easily compare the prices.

✓ Yes, online shopping is always interesting and I have looked at shoes online many times in my life because I can easily compare prices.

'is always in interesting' contains wrong preposition and article; 'in' and 'a' are incorrect here. Also 'watch shoes online' misuses 'watch' for 'look at' or 'browse' and the time expression 'many times in my life' requires present perfect ('have looked') to show experience up to now. Suggestion: remove 'in' and 'a', replace 'watch' with 'look at' or 'browse', and use present perfect for repeated past actions affecting the present.

× Also I can get a lot of variety online.

✓ Also I can find a lot of variety online.

'get a lot of variety' is not incorrect grammatically but 'find' or 'have' is more natural collocation with 'variety'. If focusing strictly on preposition, 'online' placement is fine. Suggestion: use 'find a lot of variety online' for natural phrasing.

× Well, for shoes I have always budget around 100 to $150.00.

✓ Well, for shoes I have always budgeted around $100 to $150.

The verb 'budget' should be in past participle 'budgeted' when used with present perfect 'have'. Also currency should place '$' before numbers and omit unnecessary decimals. Suggestion: use 'have always budgeted' to indicate habitual budgeting up to now.

× So I can say that in a year I can spend 500 to $600 in a year on my shoes because, uh, the shoes are really interesting thing that can, you know, change the outfit and your personality.

✓ So I can say that in a year I can spend $500 to $600 on shoes because shoes are a really interesting thing that can change your outfit and personality.

Multiple issues: '500 to $600' should be consistent with dollar sign before both numbers; remove repeated 'in a year'. 'the shoes are really interesting thing' has article and number errors: 'shoes' plural with 'a really interesting thing' is awkward—use 'shoes are really interesting' or 'shoes are a really interesting thing' but better 'shoes are a really interesting thing' still mismatches plural/ singular. Use 'shoes are really interesting' or 'a pair of shoes is a really interesting thing'. Also 'your outfit and personality' is more natural than 'the outfit and your personality'. Suggestion: use consistent currency format, remove redundancy, and match singular/plural and articles appropriately.

× If I'm going out on an party or somewhere to attend a event, then I I wear, you know, stylish shoes.

✓ If I'm going out to a party or to attend an event, then I wear stylish shoes.

'on an party' and 'a event' misuse prepositions and articles. 'on' should be 'to' and 'an' before consonant-starting 'party' is wrong; 'a event' should be 'an event'. Also duplicate 'I' and filler 'you know' removed for clarity. Suggestion: use 'to a party' and 'an event' and avoid unnecessary repetition and fillers.

× But if I am going to any kind of sports event or jogging, then I wear sports shoes which are quite comfortable.

✓ But if I am going to any kind of sports event or going jogging, then I wear sports shoes which are quite comfortable.

The phrase 'or jogging' lacks a verb; 'going jogging' or 'for jogging' is needed. Suggestion: use parallel structure 'going to a sports event or going jogging' or 'for jogging' to make the sentence grammatically correct.